Notes About The Poem

First Communion

The powdery snow gloves the fingers 
of maple forest, protecting barren bark 
with the expectation of rose tipped bloom.

A meeting point between pristine
innocence and the veiled promise of spring
ripening. Each trunk and limb mirrors 

the action of man. Reaching, arching, 
swaying, creating aisles of church-like splendor, 
a sacrament where the virginal may walk

toward communion with their God. Inward 
toward the birth of faith and outward toward 
the wedgwood sky in celestial sight.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Thirtyseven Avatar
June 9, 2016 at 8:55 AM
Beautiful words. Magical ride. Would love to hear you read it. For this format baffles me. I write poetry because grammar is a foreign language. Which I really, really want to understand.
Guzzi Avatar
June 9, 2016 at 9:01 AM
Yes, grammar is a bear! There is far more flexibility in grammar when writing poetry. I use a grammar guide for 8th grade LOL called Checking your grammar by Marvin Terban. It's a very small book, easy to understand & NOT intimidating!
Schumacker Avatar
May 24, 2016 at 8:26 AM
Hi Debbie, True poetry in motion. I happened upon this by pure chance today. For me, great poetry is the ability to distil life down to its molecular abundance, to burst forth with the light of reason. What a brilliant accomplishment you have here. A 7+ by any standards. Have a great day. Earl
Guzzi Avatar
May 24, 2016 at 3:47 PM
I wrote this in church Earl during the servive ;)
Arnone Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 2:52 PM
Good Winter/spiritual imagery.
Drag Avatar
January 5, 2016 at 2:50 PM
An enchanting read. Very good!
Yvonne Avatar
September 23, 2014 at 3:11 PM
Brilliant! I will add this to my favs. Reading your poetry is an ultimate pleasure. Thank you for your immeasurable contribution to this community.
Vaillancourt Avatar
January 22, 2014 at 7:41 AM
So very well structured, and says so much within it's words. Deep, deep poem that I highly enjoyed - excellent poem.
Hadden Avatar
July 7, 2013 at 1:20 PM
A very exceptional piece of poetry. I loved it all. Roger Dale Hadden.
Wesley Avatar
January 2, 2013 at 3:04 PM
It weaves back and forth like a mesmerizing vision Debbie, Your talent shine bright in this beauty. Love, Elizabeth
Yamin Avatar
July 25, 2012 at 6:26 PM
Congrats on your amazing poem winning the Semi Finals of the Poetry Soup Competition. I wish you good luck in the Finals
Conway Avatar
July 18, 2012 at 4:51 PM
You paint a beautiful picture with this one Debbie! Congrats on making it through the first round!~Tirzah~
Goff Avatar
July 18, 2012 at 8:23 AM
ya had me with your first two lines.....the judges agree! congrats on your first round bonzer! schneikies!!! I remember my first communion @ my Catholic Church 3-blocks away in Minneapolis....woulda been 'bout '64 (Beatles played concert @ Met Stadium that summer, now demolished) wish I'd paid more attention....
Brown Avatar
July 18, 2012 at 7:21 AM
Congratulations on your poem making it through round one of the PoetrySoup International Poetry Contest. I wish you the best in the finals Debbie. Love, Carol
Suzadail Jr. Avatar
December 7, 2011 at 7:03 PM
Beautiful eloquent poem!
Brown Avatar
June 30, 2011 at 5:09 AM
A belated congratulations Debbie on your win in the contest. Love, Carol
Poet Avatar
June 20, 2011 at 7:30 PM
Excellent !Goes to my Favs.Congrats on your win Debbie.
Johnson Avatar
June 17, 2011 at 11:43 PM
Great one Debbie. Good choice for this contest. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
Dietrich Avatar
June 17, 2011 at 9:41 PM
and congratulations, Dearie!
Dietrich Avatar
June 17, 2011 at 9:40 PM
Yes,this one has got to be one of your very best,Deb. And MOST deserving of this number one spot. In fact,I am going to see if I ever faved this one and if not, I'll come back and finally do it!
Sweetheart Avatar
June 17, 2011 at 6:15 AM
Congrats Debbie dear on your first place win in this contest ..another elegant entry .. we are all first placers in this one luv..
Onclaud Avatar
June 17, 2011 at 12:09 AM
sunny congrats on your top win in brian's "off , one" , debs... we are all no.1 here in the contest! :) huggs
Laan Avatar
March 17, 2011 at 10:05 AM
Beautiful Debbie, well done:))
Devonshire Avatar
March 17, 2011 at 7:23 AM
Nice work, Deb. Congratulations on your win in the contest. Love, Carolyn
Brown Avatar
March 17, 2011 at 7:21 AM
Congratulations Debbie on your win in the "Maverick Free Verse" contest sponsored by John Moses Freeman. Love, Carol
Mannan Avatar
March 17, 2011 at 4:31 AM
Super congrats for this lovely write dear friend.
Onclaud Avatar
March 17, 2011 at 3:22 AM
mystical in every sense, debs! i float with you! happy CONGRATS.. :) huggs, nette
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