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The powdery snow gloves the fingers 
of maple forest, protecting barren bark 
with the expectation of rose tipped bloom.

A meeting point between pristine
innocence and the veiled promise of spring
ripening. Each trunk and limb mirrors 

the action of man. Reaching, arching, 
swaying, creating aisles of church-like splendor, 
a sacrament where the virginal may walk

toward communion with their God. Inward 
toward the birth of faith and outward toward 
the wedgwood sky in celestial sight.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 6/9/2016 8:55:00 AM
Beautiful words. Magical ride. Would love to hear you read it. For this format baffles me. I write poetry because grammar is a foreign language. Which I really, really want to understand.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 6/9/2016 9:01:00 AM
Yes, grammar is a bear! There is far more flexibility in grammar when writing poetry. I use a grammar guide for 8th grade LOL called Checking your grammar by Marvin Terban. It's a very small book, easy to understand & NOT intimidating!
Date: 5/24/2016 8:26:00 AM
Hi Debbie, True poetry in motion. I happened upon this by pure chance today. For me, great poetry is the ability to distil life down to its molecular abundance, to burst forth with the light of reason. What a brilliant accomplishment you have here. A 7+ by any standards. Have a great day. Earl
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Date: 5/24/2016 3:47:00 PM
I wrote this in church Earl during the servive ;)
Date: 4/20/2016 2:52:00 PM
Good Winter/spiritual imagery.
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Date: 1/5/2016 2:50:00 PM
An enchanting read. Very good!
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Date: 9/23/2014 3:11:00 PM
Brilliant! I will add this to my favs. Reading your poetry is an ultimate pleasure. Thank you for your immeasurable contribution to this community.
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Date: 1/22/2014 7:41:00 AM
So very well structured, and says so much within it's words. Deep, deep poem that I highly enjoyed - excellent poem.
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Date: 7/7/2013 1:20:00 PM
A very exceptional piece of poetry. I loved it all. Roger Dale Hadden.
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Date: 1/2/2013 3:04:00 PM
It weaves back and forth like a mesmerizing vision Debbie, Your talent shine bright in this beauty. Love, Elizabeth
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Date: 7/25/2012 6:26:00 PM
Congrats on your amazing poem winning the Semi Finals of the Poetry Soup Competition. I wish you good luck in the Finals
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Date: 7/18/2012 4:51:00 PM
You paint a beautiful picture with this one Debbie! Congrats on making it through the first round!~Tirzah~
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Date: 7/18/2012 8:23:00 AM
ya had me with your first two lines.....the judges agree! congrats on your first round bonzer! schneikies!!! I remember my first communion @ my Catholic Church 3-blocks away in Minneapolis....woulda been 'bout '64 (Beatles played concert @ Met Stadium that summer, now demolished) wish I'd paid more attention....
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Date: 7/18/2012 7:21:00 AM
Congratulations on your poem making it through round one of the PoetrySoup International Poetry Contest. I wish you the best in the finals Debbie. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/7/2011 7:03:00 PM
Beautiful eloquent poem!
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Date: 6/30/2011 5:09:00 AM
A belated congratulations Debbie on your win in the contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/20/2011 7:30:00 PM
Excellent !Goes to my Favs.Congrats on your win Debbie.
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Date: 6/17/2011 11:43:00 PM
Great one Debbie. Good choice for this contest. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/17/2011 9:41:00 PM
and congratulations, Dearie!
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Date: 6/17/2011 9:40:00 PM
Yes,this one has got to be one of your very best,Deb. And MOST deserving of this number one spot. In fact,I am going to see if I ever faved this one and if not, I'll come back and finally do it!
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Date: 6/17/2011 6:15:00 AM
Congrats Debbie dear on your first place win in this contest ..another elegant entry .. we are all first placers in this one luv..
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Date: 6/17/2011 12:09:00 AM
sunny congrats on your top win in brian's "off , one" , debs... we are all no.1 here in the contest! :) huggs
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Date: 3/17/2011 10:05:00 AM
Beautiful Debbie, well done:))
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Date: 3/17/2011 7:23:00 AM
Nice work, Deb. Congratulations on your win in the contest. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 3/17/2011 7:21:00 AM
Congratulations Debbie on your win in the "Maverick Free Verse" contest sponsored by John Moses Freeman. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/17/2011 4:31:00 AM
Super congrats for this lovely write dear friend.
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Date: 3/17/2011 3:22:00 AM
mystical in every sense, debs! i float with you! happy CONGRATS.. :) huggs, nette
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