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Find Me At Six - Peril Out At Sea

Find me when you sail upon aqua seas, 
pretty Loreli the water spirit.
My haunting melody will entice you; 
I will lure you to come closer, closer.
Many sailors have perished on the rocks -
If you hear my voice, don’t try to find me!

Find me at six Contest 
Sponsored by Nette Onclaud
Checked with how many syllables

*Lorelei is a feminine water spirit, similar to a siren or mermaid, which is rumored to send sailors to their death, by luring them near cliffs with her beautiful singing voice.

10~18~17

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2017

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Teddy Kimathi Date: 1/26/2017 7:39:00 AM A very enchanting piece..... Congrats Jan, for your WIN in the contest!!! ;-) Login to Reply

Arlene Smith Date: 1/23/2017 8:10:00 AM Back with a big congrats my friend!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/23/2017 8:51:00 AM Thanks Arlene I think we shared 6th place - I was glad to be on the winners list:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/22/2017 1:00:00 PM a great take with the mythology, Jan!! sorry I got so late in seeing this one. Congrats, my friend. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/22/2017 1:01:00 PM Thanks Andrea am chuckling at that video am sending it on to people lol - think we all need something to make us laugh at the moment!:-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior Date: 1/22/2017 8:55:00 AM Congrats!!! my friend...god bless...^WW^ Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/22/2017 12:24:00 PM Thanks ^WW^:-) hugs Jan xx

Sushma A. Singh Date: 1/22/2017 2:05:00 AM Congrats! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/22/2017 12:24:00 PM Thanks Sushma:-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi Date: 1/21/2017 9:45:00 PM Wonderful way to talk about the classics. Does that make this ekphrasis poetry? Congratulations. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/22/2017 12:23:00 PM I have no idea about the Ekphrasis form I just got the Lorelei idea and the poem flowed:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 1/21/2017 9:23:00 PM Back again to congratulate you on your win YEAH!!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/22/2017 12:23:00 PM Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud Date: 1/21/2017 5:35:00 PM jan, jan.. you sure know how to surprise the reader with a distinct turn in the end... winsome write... best congrats on your superb ranking and thanks for the coming around!..huggs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/22/2017 12:22:00 PM Thanks Nette for another great contest and win:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus Date: 1/21/2017 3:37:00 PM So glad you made it to the winners' list, Jan...your uniqueness did not go unrewarded:) Congratulations! Hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/22/2017 12:22:00 PM Thanks Paul I scraped in bear the bottom lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May Date: 1/21/2017 2:23:00 PM Congrats on a fine win Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/22/2017 12:21:00 PM Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White Date: 1/19/2017 1:09:00 PM Tic-toc.... time goes by while you grow older with the Sirens... Good luck Jan!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/19/2017 1:53:00 PM I went with the take on the them that their time is up if they get lured by the Lorlei lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus Date: 1/19/2017 7:11:00 AM Yours is the most unique take on the contest picture provided, Jan. Unlike many other entries you chose to end it by telling us NOT to find you! Hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/19/2017 1:53:00 PM I'm glad someone else went off on a tangent on the theme - not sure if Nette will like my interpretation but I'm happy with the poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 1/18/2017 11:41:00 PM Very good, Jan, good luck in the contest Hugs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/19/2017 1:54:00 PM thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish Date: 1/18/2017 10:45:00 PM Reminds me of the Sirens in the Odessy. Nice drawing to go with it. Good luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/19/2017 1:55:00 PM Thanks Matthew there have been films made based on the legend of the Lorelei:-) hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne Date: 1/18/2017 2:05:00 PM Stunning! A Fav! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/19/2017 1:55:00 PM aww bless you Armand:-) hugs Jan xx

Gary Smith Date: 1/18/2017 1:12:00 PM A lovely poem Jan :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/19/2017 1:55:00 PM Thanks Gary:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith Date: 1/18/2017 12:30:00 PM so lovely Jan...she is alluring as is the sea Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/18/2017 12:52:00 PM She sure is Tim ...a beautiful mermaid but with a sting in her tail!:-) hugs jan xx

Arlene Smith Date: 1/18/2017 12:11:00 PM I love this, Jan! I am so intrigued by folklore about the sea..Beautiful! Best of luck in the contest dear friend! We were thinking along the same lines.. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/18/2017 12:15:00 PM Yes we were both thinking of folklore and legends - great minds think alike:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green Date: 1/18/2017 11:19:00 AM If she lured them to the edge of TALL cliffs then she must have a HGH pitched voice. Ok, that was dumb. :) Really beautiful Jan and here's hoping it lands on the top in this contest. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/18/2017 11:39:00 AM Love the comment Chris:-) its quite fascinating reading up about the legend of the Loreli:-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior Date: 1/18/2017 10:55:00 AM Ah, the aqua seas...sounds like you love the water Jan...but up ahead...danger! danger! Will Robinson lol...great write my friend from the Isle of Man...god bless...^WW^ Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/18/2017 10:58:00 AM Thanks ^WW^ I love being on a little Island surrounded by the sea but don't like travelling on it lol:-) hugs Jan xx