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Find Me At Six - Peril Out At Sea

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Find me when you sail upon aqua seas, pretty Loreli the water spirit. My haunting melody will entice you; I will lure you to come closer, closer. Many sailors have perished on the rocks - If you hear my voice, don’t try to find me! Find me at six Contest Sponsored by Nette Onclaud Checked with how many syllables *Lorelei is a feminine water spirit, similar to a siren or mermaid, which is rumored to send sailors to their death, by luring them near cliffs with her beautiful singing voice. 10~18~17

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Teddy Kimathi

Date: 1/26/2017 7:39:00 AM

A very enchanting piece..... Congrats Jan, for your WIN in the contest!!! ;-)

Arlene Smith

Date: 1/23/2017 8:10:00 AM

Back with a big congrats my friend!!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/23/2017 8:51:00 AM

Thanks Arlene I think we shared 6th place - I was glad to be on the winners list:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/22/2017 1:00:00 PM

a great take with the mythology, Jan!! sorry I got so late in seeing this one. Congrats, my friend.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2017 1:01:00 PM

Thanks Andrea am chuckling at that video am sending it on to people lol - think we all need something to make us laugh at the moment!:-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior

Date: 1/22/2017 8:55:00 AM

Congrats!!! my friend...god bless...^WW^

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2017 12:24:00 PM

Thanks ^WW^:-) hugs Jan xx

Sushma A. Singh

Date: 1/22/2017 2:05:00 AM

Congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2017 12:24:00 PM

Thanks Sushma:-) hugs Jan xx

Rob Carmack

Date: 1/21/2017 11:46:00 PM

I like your theme with this contest, almost every man I have ever known has hit those rocks. Congrats.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2017 12:24:00 PM

ha ha ha great comment hanks Rob:-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi

Date: 1/21/2017 9:45:00 PM

Wonderful way to talk about the classics. Does that make this ekphrasis poetry? Congratulations.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2017 12:23:00 PM

I have no idea about the Ekphrasis form I just got the Lorelei idea and the poem flowed:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 1/21/2017 9:23:00 PM

Back again to congratulate you on your win YEAH!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2017 12:23:00 PM

Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/21/2017 5:35:00 PM

jan, jan.. you sure know how to surprise the reader with a distinct turn in the end... winsome write... best congrats on your superb ranking and thanks for the coming around!..huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2017 12:22:00 PM

Thanks Nette for another great contest and win:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 1/21/2017 3:37:00 PM

So glad you made it to the winners' list, Jan...your uniqueness did not go unrewarded:) Congratulations! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2017 12:22:00 PM

Thanks Paul I scraped in bear the bottom lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 1/21/2017 2:23:00 PM

Congrats on a fine win Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2017 12:21:00 PM

Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White

Date: 1/19/2017 1:09:00 PM

Tic-toc.... time goes by while you grow older with the Sirens... Good luck Jan!!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2017 1:53:00 PM

I went with the take on the them that their time is up if they get lured by the Lorlei lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 1/19/2017 7:11:00 AM

Yours is the most unique take on the contest picture provided, Jan. Unlike many other entries you chose to end it by telling us NOT to find you! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2017 1:53:00 PM

I'm glad someone else went off on a tangent on the theme - not sure if Nette will like my interpretation but I'm happy with the poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 1/18/2017 11:41:00 PM

Very good, Jan, good luck in the contest Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2017 1:54:00 PM

thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish

Date: 1/18/2017 10:45:00 PM

Reminds me of the Sirens in the Odessy. Nice drawing to go with it. Good luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2017 1:55:00 PM

Thanks Matthew there have been films made based on the legend of the Lorelei:-) hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 1/18/2017 2:05:00 PM

Stunning! A Fav!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2017 1:55:00 PM

aww bless you Armand:-) hugs Jan xx

Gary Smith

Date: 1/18/2017 1:12:00 PM

A lovely poem Jan :)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2017 1:55:00 PM

Thanks Gary:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 1/18/2017 12:30:00 PM

so lovely Jan...she is alluring as is the sea

Jan Allison
Date: 1/18/2017 12:52:00 PM

She sure is Tim ...a beautiful mermaid but with a sting in her tail!:-) hugs jan xx

Arlene Smith

Date: 1/18/2017 12:11:00 PM

I love this, Jan! I am so intrigued by folklore about the sea..Beautiful! Best of luck in the contest dear friend! We were thinking along the same lines..

Jan Allison
Date: 1/18/2017 12:15:00 PM

Yes we were both thinking of folklore and legends - great minds think alike:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green

Date: 1/18/2017 11:19:00 AM

If she lured them to the edge of TALL cliffs then she must have a HGH pitched voice. Ok, that was dumb. :) Really beautiful Jan and here's hoping it lands on the top in this contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/18/2017 11:39:00 AM

Love the comment Chris:-) its quite fascinating reading up about the legend of the Loreli:-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior

Date: 1/18/2017 10:55:00 AM

Ah, the aqua seas...sounds like you love the water Jan...but up ahead...danger! danger! Will Robinson lol...great write my friend from the Isle of Man...god bless...^WW^

Jan Allison
Date: 1/18/2017 10:58:00 AM

Thanks ^WW^ I love being on a little Island surrounded by the sea but don't like travelling on it lol:-) hugs Jan xx