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Burlesque Wall Art - Photograph - Fan Dance by Kristen Elsby

In a room that once commanded great respect, stage lights began to hiss with heated anticipation. There were sounds of alcohol infused rumblings and laughter rolling through the rows of seats from the tongues of young fancies whose foibles await the reverence paid to tales that may last a lifetime. A baritone voice boomed in imposing prominence that demanded attention. With such articulation, trained by years of experience spent in circus tents and speakeasies, the once proud barker's monologue cracked from age and fifty years of bad whisky. He had a past filled with evil deeds and dashed hopes, but on he stumbled as the introduction to tonight's show surged from his lips. A young lady emerged mid-stage from behind a curtain. A single spotlight bathed her every titillation, perfectly choregraphed to a pulsing rhythm. All eyes were fixated as imaginations were provoked beyond reality. The white feathers of her costume teased senses and libidos raged while she strutted, ending with a peek that would even give a preacher reason to pause. As the lights dimmed and the cat calls subsided, backstage an old women picked up her broom and slumped upon a stool. A tear fell, caressing her weathered cheek. Breathless, after performing the dance she'd practiced a thousand times, the young women took her final curtain call to an uproarious standing ovation. As she dashed toward the dressing room, the old woman rose from her stool and the two embraced. The joyful exuberance was that of a child at Christmas. Her voice cracked as she exclaimed, "I haven't felt this alive . in fifty years! "My dear sister, may I wear this enchanted costume again after your next show?" "May I, May I," the young girl implored. "Of course", the old woman replied, "twins share everything." C.W.S. 03/25/2020

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Date: 6/7/2021 3:33:00 PM
You have such a creative mind, I bet you were there, :)
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Date: 6/21/2021 1:10:00 PM
Thank You Rose, Been in a few...
Date: 5/4/2020 12:43:00 PM
I reread your story Charlie, what a wonderful tale - I was fascinated by it- a very creative poem and excellent craftsmanship well done my friend. Kudos. Blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 5/4/2020 1:17:00 PM
Thanks again Jennifer...
Date: 5/3/2020 8:52:00 AM
This is first class poetry my friend. You are a great story teller. This goes to my favourites. Well done Charlie.
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Date: 5/4/2020 1:17:00 PM
Thank you Richard...
Date: 4/14/2020 10:35:00 AM
Marvelous tale, Charlie; I savored every word (a beer and ribs to my senses)--compelled forward. Enchantingly written! Great story. Love it!
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Date: 4/14/2020 11:14:00 AM
Thank you Joe...
Date: 4/7/2020 6:03:00 PM
Its like I was given a free front row ticket to this play and boy it was one hell of a show! It was quite a pleasure to read your narrative,wonderfully done!
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Date: 4/8/2020 3:55:00 PM
Thank you Rercy...
Date: 3/28/2020 10:56:00 AM
Excellent poem. I enjoyed this. So well done, Charlie. I hope you are well. Have a nice day :)
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Date: 3/29/2020 11:09:00 AM
Thanks Heidi...
Date: 3/28/2020 10:27:00 AM
This is brilliant story telling.. I think it's the first time I've read a story poem from you.. enjoyable read.
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Date: 3/29/2020 11:08:00 AM
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Date: 3/27/2020 2:48:00 PM
You are an awesome story teller Charlie. I was transfixed from beginning to end! By the way, I am an identical twin. xxoo
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Date: 3/27/2020 3:00:00 PM
Thanks Connie, we have identical twin 5 year old grandsons, Thanks for the visit...
Date: 3/27/2020 1:59:00 AM
"Twins share everything"... Thanks for sharing too Charlie, I enjoyed your poem this morning. Keep them coming my friend.
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Date: 3/27/2020 12:23:00 PM
Thank you Gideon...
Date: 3/27/2020 12:15:00 AM
With each character you gave them life in your poem. I like the ending, a compassionate and loving of sharing and old costume. Beautiful story, Charlie.
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Date: 3/27/2020 12:13:00 PM
Thank you Eve...
Date: 3/26/2020 5:02:00 PM
Hi Charlie, another poetic gem from your golden pen. I was hooked from the beginning and mesmerized, to the very end. A poetic gem, Charlie. Have a wonderful evening. Your friend always....Mike.
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Date: 3/27/2020 11:59:00 AM
Thank you Mike...
Date: 3/26/2020 2:37:00 PM
Hello Charlie Smith, i like this poem. it was the ending that surprised me. Stay safe and be well. Be strong through these rough times. Enjoy your day my friend.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 3/30/2020 8:43:00 AM
Hello Charlie , I hope you are doing well. Stay safe be well. Be strong. Enjoy your day my friend.
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Date: 3/26/2020 2:59:00 PM
Thank you Darlene...
Date: 3/26/2020 12:48:00 PM
- An amazing poem, Charlie ... for some reason I became very touched by this old lady - hugs // Anne-Lise :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/26/2020 12:54:00 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise...
Date: 3/26/2020 11:26:00 AM
I was riveted to this poetic story, and the twist at the end that you revealed is just an amazing vivid outstanding imagination that you have my friend! Well penned Charlie. Blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 3/26/2020 12:31:00 PM
Thanks Jennifer...
Date: 3/26/2020 9:53:00 AM
Wow! Charlie I'm blown away! Absolute genius with this one. I love it and you kept me hanging on the edge of my seat. Thank you for brightening up my day with such a great poem.
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Date: 3/26/2020 11:05:00 AM
Thsnk you so much Mark...
Date: 3/25/2020 9:35:00 PM
WoW! Seems to be more to this tale than meets the eye. Well told. Really good imagery . God Bless, JB
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Date: 3/26/2020 7:22:00 AM
Thanks Judy...
Date: 3/25/2020 6:05:00 PM
A fascinating narration that left me with the impression I was a spectator enjoying a wondrous play on the stage dear, Charlie! A superb achievement!
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Date: 3/26/2020 7:21:00 AM
Thank you Demetrios...
Date: 3/25/2020 4:19:00 PM
Charlie, your words, images and emotion pulled me into the story and would not let me go until you resolved the story with your twist at the end. Excellent work, my friend.
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Date: 3/26/2020 7:14:00 AM
Thank you Sam...
Date: 3/25/2020 2:55:00 PM
wow what a provocative tale Charlie I was hooked from start to finish and I loved the twist with the twins - would make an fabulous 5 minute short story t v filler!!!! excellent poetry!!!:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/25/2020 4:16:00 PM
Thanks Jan..
Date: 3/25/2020 2:12:00 PM
This is a commanding write Charlie--I was spellbound from start to finish. A story brilliantly told in moving poetic words.
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Date: 3/25/2020 2:30:00 PM
Thank you Vijay. Lin edited it for me...

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