Farmer's Rose

I walked ten thousand feet
Through high stocks of wheat
You holding onto my arm

The wind blew through your hair
I was glad to be there
This our new home on the farm

It seems like yesterday
As together we play
We lived a life filled with charm

You turned and walked away
Not enamored with clay
You wanted more that is true

The earth was my solace
I watched the seasons pass
What else could I really do

The ground my mistress 
Still I wanted your kiss
Yet there was no sign of you

As all the years went by
I couldn't help but cry
Yet this was the life I chose

From tears a green shoot grew
A thing of beauty new
I watched as the flower rose

A woman oh so fair
Standing before me there
From my garden her I chose

A new form for Dr. Ram
The Balassi Stanza Contest

I combined three seperate Balassi poems
forming  nine stanzas. My first attempt
at this form. I hope I got it right.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Mc Mills-Cooper Avatar
October 10, 2016 at 5:21 PM
This was a good poem. I like the odd forms. Breaking the mold sometimes is a good thing. glad I picked this one out! Nice work! MC
Davis Avatar
February 2, 2014 at 9:22 PM
Richard Such a beautiful and sad poem rolled up with emotion and sentiment. Nicely done Thanks for the silly and great comment on my Love Hints poem
Lamoureux Avatar
February 2, 2014 at 9:26 PM
My pleasure, thanks for the visit Robin.
Ligon Avatar
December 22, 2013 at 6:54 PM
Sad but enjoyable poem. Nice comparison to the garden as a mistress. Congrats, Richard!
Oyewole Avatar
December 18, 2013 at 7:53 PM
Congratulations Richard.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 18, 2013 at 8:28 PM
Thanks A O.
Kendrick Avatar
December 18, 2013 at 9:53 AM
Ahhhh!! Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!!Sara
Lamoureux Avatar
December 18, 2013 at 9:57 AM
Thanks Sara.
Maverick Avatar
December 15, 2013 at 3:15 PM
Very well combined Richard, Warm congrats on the win. Joe..)
Lamoureux Avatar
December 18, 2013 at 9:58 AM
Thanks Joe.
Gorelick Avatar
December 15, 2013 at 1:35 PM
YOu got it right! Congrats. BG
Lamoureux Avatar
December 18, 2013 at 9:58 AM
Thanks Barbara.
May Avatar
December 15, 2013 at 10:09 AM
a well crafted poem Richard...with a lovely ending...congrats on the win
Lamoureux Avatar
December 15, 2013 at 10:47 AM
Thanks Joseph.
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
December 15, 2013 at 8:25 AM
Congratulations Richard you must have got it right it's a winner lol xx
Lamoureux Avatar
December 15, 2013 at 8:37 AM
Thanks Mandy.
Undertaker Avatar
December 15, 2013 at 3:32 AM
Congratulations Richard.This poem really makes one emotional. A great poem Richard.(: ) Jenish.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 15, 2013 at 7:34 AM
Thanks Jenish.
Mehta Avatar
December 14, 2013 at 7:38 PM
Thanks for your interesting poem and congratulations on the win, Richard
Deschler Avatar
December 2, 2013 at 5:35 PM
A beautiful poem, Richard! I think some gardeners do tend to fall in love with their roses! This was very well written, and I enjoyed it! I wish you the best of luck in the contest!...Thank you so much for the wonderful comments on my latest poem! I really do appreciate the fave! :)
Lamoureux Avatar
December 2, 2013 at 8:23 PM
Once again it was my pleasure. So nice to have your visit.
Sirak Avatar
December 1, 2013 at 8:32 AM
I don't know anything about this form, but you got the words right as always.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 1, 2013 at 8:36 AM
Good morning Monterey, So nice to have your visit.
Chircop Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 6:41 PM
Tnks for stopping by my post Richard.I was so busy to be online.This is such a beauty to read.Hope I have time to return and read more.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 1, 2013 at 8:38 AM
So nice to have you back. I'm glad I was one of your stops.
Jones Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 11:34 AM
Wow Richard such a lovely poem whatever form it is....hope you had a nice Thanksgiving..
Lamoureux Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 11:44 AM
Back in October, I'm from Canada but I still took a few minutes to reflect on your thanksgiving. I have much to be thankful for.
Puddifoot Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 7:05 AM
I don't know much about this form, but it is a lovely poem, transforming from sadness to hope...thanks for stopping by with your kind comments :)
Lamoureux Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 7:58 AM
Thanks Charlotte, it was my pleasure.
Manassian Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 6:02 AM
Richard......this is a thing of absolute beauty!!! You can nail any form! Oh....I like it...the content matter, the flow...all a beautiful rose....
Lamoureux Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 7:59 AM
Thanks Eileen, you have made my morning.
Kendrick Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 6:06 AM
The reply below ended up in the wrong place..Forgive..Sara
Kendrick Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 6:05 AM
The form that is.Sara
Kendrick Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 5:56 AM
I'll have to look that one up ...Very emotive and expressive work..I enjoyed reading your contest entry..I noticed that you dropped by..Your comments were encouraging..Sara
Lamoureux Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 8:00 AM
Thanks Sara, have a great weekend.
Undertaker Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 5:39 AM
Richard, a beautiful song of real life.started really well.you should have stopped by fifth stanza.anyway a great poem which touched my heart.awesome.(: ) Jenish.
Lamoureux Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 8:03 AM
Thanks Jenish, I understand your point yet I still like the direction I went with it. There is enough sadness and gloom in lives a little hope is often welcome in a gloomy world.
Sibanda Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 2:48 AM
Richard, this piece is simply enjoyable.
Lamoureux Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 8:04 AM
Thanks Ndaba.
Dietrich Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 12:55 AM
hey, I think you GOT It. I should know. Coincidentally I was working on my own Balassi stanza on the ride home from my trip this week to see my son's family . I finished it today and will post it later. Yours has much more work put into it and I am sure Dr. RAm will be very pleased!!
Lamoureux Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 8:05 AM
Thanks, I look forward to reading yours.
Harrell Avatar
November 29, 2013 at 11:04 PM
You did a good job, Rick. It sounds a little sad but has resilient spirit with new life written all over it. I like it. Enjoyed!
Lamoureux Avatar
November 29, 2013 at 11:18 PM
I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Thanks Toquyen.
Ekechukwu Avatar
November 29, 2013 at 10:55 PM
A very good poem,kudos to u for your attempt. In life we attempt to do the unimagineable. Hope u had a nice day. My birthday is on d 1st of dec. Love alwaz, Based On Belief
Lamoureux Avatar
November 29, 2013 at 11:17 PM
Happy Birthday, I hope it is unimaginably perfect! Thanks for commenting.
Adams Avatar
November 29, 2013 at 10:29 PM
I am not familiar with the form but I think the poem is awesome....good luck in the contest!
Lamoureux Avatar
November 29, 2013 at 10:35 PM
Thanks Sandra, your picture makes me think of Andy Warhol's art work.
Dunn Avatar
November 29, 2013 at 9:02 PM
Nice visual enjoyed your write it's wonderful it makes me think of the delicate rose blossoming into a beauty women. thank you for this write and also for your comment on poem i made the change to current. cheri
Lamoureux Avatar
November 29, 2013 at 10:34 PM
Great, I didn't want anything to distract from your artistry. Thanks for commenting on my poem.
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