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Famous Last Line

When He Kissed Me   (Original Poem)

What a good night kiss! I think I've fallen in love.

Each time you take my hand and pull me close to you, 
there's a trembling in my heart. I hope you feel it, too. 
Something in me responded to the warmth of that kiss.
So gentle; I felt like a flower caressed by morning mist. 

The touch of your lips on mine. Oh, the memory lingers. 
Love the way you hold my hand and entwine our fingers. 
It must be love! I want to sing words of passion's song. 
Stay wrapped in your arms and dance all night long. 

My dream tonight will be so sweet, for I will be with you. 
And by the time night is over and the sky has turned blue, 
I will have confessed my love with each whispered breath. 
A love to pale the brightest diamond; to last beyond death.
 
If love is meant to be, meet me in the black velvet sky. 
Close your eyes, take my hand, and away we will fly 
through the light of golden stars and silver moonbeams. 
Good night, Darling. I love you. I'll see you in my dream. 
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His Kisses Still Make Me Tremble   (Revisited)

"Good night, Darling. I love you. I'll see you in my dream."
Years ago I said those words; you still make my eyes gleam.
They sparkle with love for you that grows deeper every day.
No longer must I dream of you. You're in my arms to stay.

Each time you kiss me now I'm reminded of our first.
When you gently touch my lips you quench my thirst.
There's still a trembling in my heart when I look at you
from a bud in my dream, our love blossomed and grew.

I'm no longer alone when the morning sun begins to shine.
Waking next to you makes me grateful that you're mine.
I whisper in soft breath, "Good morning to you, my love,"
then we sing passion's song as tenderly as cooing doves.

That we were meant to be together, I knew from our first kiss,
and when we've both grown old, I will smile when I reminisce
about the sweet moment I found a love that will never die.
Darling, we will always soar together in the black velvet sky.


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 2.29.2016   <>  Famous Last Line Contest by Laura Loo

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 3/18/2016 8:27:00 PM
Congratulations, Lin, on Laura’s Famous Last Line Contest win! The picture though in that scene she doesn't like him. Hug Eve
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Date: 3/17/2016 11:25:00 PM
What sweet thoughts. Congratlations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/18/2016 6:34:00 AM
Thank you, Joyce.
Date: 3/17/2016 11:19:00 PM
Congrats for the two extraordinary Love Poems and to win. Anisha D
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/18/2016 6:34:00 AM
Thanks, Anisha.
Date: 3/17/2016 7:55:00 PM
Hi Lin, Congratulations on your win in the contest. I enjoyed both the reads Lin. I hadn't read the first also so this was double joy for me. A couple of special writes in my book, going into my faves....MIKE.
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/17/2016 9:56:00 PM
Thank you so much, Mike, for liking both of these. I could watch that kiss many times over. lol You're most generous to place it in your faves.
Date: 3/17/2016 5:40:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Lin :)
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/17/2016 9:55:00 PM
Thank you very much, Laura, and bigger congrats to you.
Date: 3/17/2016 11:47:00 AM
Lin, I am always a sucker for love poems and sensuous poems, I loved this and thank you for being a part of my contest, congrats on your placement :)-luloo *smiles*
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/17/2016 9:54:00 PM
Thanks for liking this one so well, Luloo... Hugs to you.
Date: 3/2/2016 6:05:00 PM
Very romantic, Peaches. You make it seem so easy. Your poems have such a smooth flow. Of course being in love probably helps, right? Good luck friend:)
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/2/2016 6:28:00 PM
Not my memories. Well maybe so since most of my stuff is a little darker. Love ya, Peaches:)
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/2/2016 6:09:00 PM
Thanks, Danny. I suppose being in love helps, but some of us rely on memories.
Date: 3/1/2016 2:39:00 AM
They really tie in together, the old and the new. The second is like an extension of the old, but also a remembrance of it ... "we will always soar together in the black velvet sky." A very sincere and passionate pen from you, my friend. I hope it places well.
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/1/2016 3:15:00 AM
You're very kind with your remarks, Tim, and I thank you.
Date: 2/29/2016 8:33:00 AM
- So beautiful Lin, both of them !!! - Who wrote the original poem ? - Luck in contest, I wish you a lovely new week :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 2/29/2016 8:45:00 AM
- Sorry, I read rarely contest proposal Lin :) - Wonderful and beautiful ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/29/2016 8:39:00 AM
Oh so sorry I called you Jan. Forgiveness please? Hugs Anne-Lise
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/29/2016 8:37:00 AM
I wrote the original. It's for a contest in which we had to use a poem we previously entered in a contest, and use the last line of it as the first line in a new poem - read Laura's stipulations. Thanks for liking them both, Jan.
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