Audrey Haick Poet Terza Rima

False Pride

I have fallen in deep with pride tonight       
My good intention used against me             
I’m beguiled by ego’s pompous might         

Dismissed was true grace; now I see          
When clouded judgment led me onto           
The reefs below and turbulent sea            

‘Take a moment... maybe turn and run!         
From false pride, you must disengage          
Heed your conscience or come undone         

Hear my words, do not become enraged                                                           
Endless is haunting of conscience, near dead   
In this I implore you, with me, engage!'              

What you choose this night determines tomorrow..                                                             
Turn about my friend; turn away from sorrow'.                                                                      

~*~
7/18/13
For Craig's "Terza Rima Sonnet Contest"
(My first attempt at this and I'm afraid it's far from perfect) 
Thanks to the friends who gave me much needed help...still revising.

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Mustapha Mohammed September 3, 2013 at 3:27 AM A really powerful write my friend. Well done.

Richard Lamoureux July 22, 2013 at 7:08 AM You have done a wonderful job. You should be proud of this fine poem. It would not be false pride.

Eileen Manassian July 22, 2013 at 2:57 AM Good for you, Annalise...The message of this write is so powerful. Wonderful advice. :) I haven't attempted one of these either....I hope I can get something going soon. Thanks for your visit to my work. Your comment is most appreciated. Hugs

Jack Horne July 20, 2013 at 10:10 AM lovely write, my friend, and such a strong message here

Lucilla Carrillo July 19, 2013 at 8:53 PM This is a great poem and I think it will do very good in the contest.... Lucilla

Joseph May July 18, 2013 at 11:58 AM great write Annalise....best wishes

Jack Ellison July 18, 2013 at 9:50 AM DO NOT APOLOGIZE my dear sweet Annalise... this was a great write! "What you choose this night determines tomorrow"... great thought! Love ya! Great big huggs, Jack xoxoxox

Poet Tacito July 18, 2013 at 9:47 AM Damn right! Fair play. Fantastic lines!

Toquyen Harrell July 18, 2013 at 7:28 AM Great one, Annalise! We all have to be careful with that. You did a great job :). Good luck in the contest.

Nikola Žilic July 18, 2013 at 7:06 AM powerful, thoughtful, very good write.

Tim Ryerson July 18, 2013 at 5:50 AM 'Turn about my friend; turn away from the sorrow'...WOW, perfect ending line for this little gem Annalise and with your first attempt at this form you knocked it out of the park! - Tim