Fallen Love

Im bold but im not that old, Im young but i havent got stung. But in his arms i feel as though i have been strung, I can the words at the tip of my tongue. Falling out,Filling the air all about, Even though my head is filled with all this doubt. Might aswell take a chance, And savor this last dance. Im bold and still not that old, Still young, Now i have been stung.

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J.W. Earnings

Date: 7/2/2014 4:32:00 PM

This poem reminded me of a pop song (a famous one) - I forget what the song's named. Anyways, well-penned/typed out poem. Beautiful work. Will read more from you. I wish people would comment more on your work. You're a genius at writing and more. Shine on and write on! -DWB :) - my initials -PS: You rock! Rating this a 6. The grammar needs a little more work, but a very fine job you did.

Ettie Christian-Bowling
Date: 7/3/2014 12:22:00 PM

Thank you its okay I don't have to have alot of people comment on my poems in just glad you do:)-Love Ettie