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* This is a rather intricate form I created called a “Torridelle” - I hope you enjoy it! *

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my Angel, fallen ...

            gossamer linen, violet lace
                window-dressing body, pressing
                 goddess of unblemished grace
                beckoning - urge reckoning
            clasp me, push me ... down with you.

     close, to see my eyes in yours
 heart of darkness, warm and artless
measured with our carnal cores
 fallowed - soon, unhallowed
     pull me, draw me ... down with you.

            savor sweet, your taste is mine
                greedy swallows, fill my hollows
                 faultless form, engorged supine
                whetted - blade unfettered
            cut me, rend me ... down with you.

     pity, fawn to take me in
 I, the frozen quarry chosen
bartered virtue, ceded sin
 merging - madness surging
     gather me, wrench me ... down with you.

            each dynamic sates a thirst
                a darkened oath devours both
                 raptured screams yet unrehearsed
                spasm - plunging chasm
            drench me, drown me ... down with you.

     painted nails to flay my frame
 stripes of lust, a jealous trust
lesions roused for fervor's flame
 unversed - do your worst
     stain me, rake me ... down with you.

            feral places, once denied
                cognate parts to blackened hearts
                 souls and selves we can't divide
                twisted - double-fisted
            grind me, burn me ... down with you.

     sing to me a siren's wail
 rip the rhyme from all sublime
watch the frenzied portions flail
 disguised - hell, improvised
     smite me, drag me ... down with you.

            all in, My Angel ... fallen
                so sweetly, and
                 so deeply
                down.
            with.

     you.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2021



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Date: 4/19/2021 9:53:00 PM
Love the writing in your concrete poem. Congratulations!
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Date: 4/19/2021 9:29:00 PM
A brilliant poem Gregory. I can almost hear the haunting music that matches its fury. Have a great week my friend. It is so nice to be back reading poetry again. Blessings xxoo
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Date: 4/15/2021 1:51:00 PM
A wonderfully written poem, "hell - improvised smit me, drag me.... down with you" WOW Congrats on your win David Holmes
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Date: 4/14/2021 1:56:00 PM
Wow! Greg this is powerfully sensual! Beautifully, lyrically written! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M
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Date: 4/13/2021 5:27:00 PM
Oh my ! This is deep, dark and passionate, all at the same time. *drown me, so sweetly and so deeply, down with you* Mmm, yes ! I really like this. Such a breathtaking mood your words create. Your sensual poetry is HOT ! ! I am placing this in my favorites. Because.. :) Brandy
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Date: 4/13/2021 3:04:00 AM
Greg, a dark and captivating poem!
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Date: 4/12/2021 8:31:00 PM
wow, the repeating idea at the end of each stanza really drives this type of poem. Wonderfully sensual and eloquent, Greg.
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