Suzanne Delaney Poet Roundel

Fall From Grace a Roundel

Before the beginning of time when Chaos ruled Hell and Night
Into the depths of this Cosmos, a Paradise, perfectly placed.
Above this darkness, a heaven drawn forth in a burst of light
Before the beginning of time

From the Garden of Eden, henceforth, Adam and Eve were disgraced
Lo!  A fallen angel  changed himself to a serpent in Eve’s sight
Banished, they fled before God to a wilderness, forever displaced.

Forbidden fruit had shown them the difference of wrong from right.
In Pandemonia,  Demons conspired, sin and death be interlaced.
God sacrificed his Son to save them  - from Hell's eternal plight.
Before the beginning of time

Suzanne Delaney

For Suzette Crous
Roundel Competition

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Debbie Duncan April 21, 2017 at 4:02 PM Wow, this is good telling. The first poem I posted on poetrysoup was Fall From Grace :)

Timothy Hicks March 1, 2016 at 2:25 AM You re-tell the biblical narrative with musical cadence and effortless rhyme ... excellent choice of refrain, as it's a "beyond our comprehension" sort of thought. I've never heard of roundel before, but I've written rondeau and rondel, and I can see the similarities. It seems like every form of French poetry I've heard of uses heavy repetition and only A and B for the rhyme scheme. Suzanne Delaney March 7, 2016 at 11:49 AM Hi Tim: that's the wonder of being here. This was the first time I tried this form myself. It is amazing to discover and try all the different forms and where they lead you and most of all to have encouragement from friends like you. Hugs, SuZ

Paul Schneiter February 9, 2016 at 4:23 PM Exceptionally deep and exceptionally thought-provoking. Every line intrigues me. Wonderful! Suzanne Delaney March 7, 2016 at 11:53 AM A late, late reply to your kind comment. Hope you are well. SuZ

Andrea Dietrich August 4, 2015 at 6:45 PM I clicked on your best poems and saw this oldie but goodie that I responded to back in 2013. You did so well with this poetry form. I can't say I did this kind before, but it is so similar to Rondeau, which I have written many of. Suzanne Delaney March 7, 2016 at 11:52 AM Hi Andrea: I see I never replied to your comment. Before they started email notifications I think a lot of times I used to just visit the poet because you wondered if they ever saw your responses. That feature has helped a lot with feedback and interaction. Hugs, SuZ

Debbie Duncan July 23, 2015 at 10:39 PM Title caught my eye, because I have one called Fall From Grace, first poem I ever posted on here :) I do like the way you wrote this . Suzanne Delaney July 24, 2015 at 1:05 PM Hi Debbie: I will check out your poem of the same title. Hugs, SuZ

Abdulhafeez Oyewole May 14, 2013 at 3:41 AM Well written pen. Full of biblical facts. Many congrats on your grand win in the challenge. Suzanne Delaney March 7, 2016 at 11:55 AM Hi Abdul. I appreciate your comment. Sorry for the late reply. Hope you are well. SuZ

Len Gasun May 13, 2013 at 5:09 PM You did it extraordinarily well my dear friend Suz! I love this so much! MY HEARTY CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved super win! I'll fave this one. Thank you so much for sharing and your heartfelt congratulations as well. Have a grace-filled day! love lots, Leonora Suzanne Delaney March 7, 2016 at 11:58 AM Hi Leonora: just so you know I appreciate your well loved comments. Hugs SuZ

Tim Ryerson May 13, 2013 at 11:42 AM I don't have a clue as to how to write a Roundel...This is flawlessly done. I was so spell-bound by the name 'Pandemonia' that I went on the internet to look it up to see if it was the actual name of a place and found no such name, which tells me it came straight from that mind of yours...Awesome - Tim Suzanne Delaney March 7, 2016 at 11:59 AM Hey Tim: Long ago you commented but how special to find it now and read with full appreciation. Loved, always. SuZ Tim Ryerson May 13, 2013 at 11:45 AM Also, the personification of 'Chaos' - wow...

Poet Destroyer A May 11, 2013 at 10:33 PM Suzanne, CONGRATULATIONS on your awesome win. Take care and enjoy the blessings of today and tomorrow. LUV*LINDA

Delysia Hendricks May 11, 2013 at 4:20 PM Congratulations for taking top honors in Suzette's contest. Well done, Suz. :-)

Connie Gildersleeve May 11, 2013 at 12:51 PM Fabulous write and congratulations on your win. Warm Smiles, Connie

Judy Konos May 11, 2013 at 9:10 AM Beautiful.....

Joseph May May 11, 2013 at 8:42 AM great write and win Suzanne.....big congrats

Seren Roberts May 11, 2013 at 1:03 AM Congrats Suzanne ...Seren

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire May 2, 2013 at 4:06 PM Dear Xegrakio POETESS, S-N, S u Z, I had to look up Roundel, but I did not find the form. I see by the refrain "Before the beginning of time" that it is sort of a half Villanelle. Is the Pharse anything like "After the end of Eternity"?? I do not know Suzette that well so I wish YOU a Good Talent WIN.I LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR S-P, Loyal Liege...HG Same P.S. as last comment. LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER...Harry

Abdulhafeez Oyewole April 28, 2013 at 7:58 AM This is really a charming write.... Good luck on the contest.... Thanks for stopping by~A.O

Richard Lamoureux April 28, 2013 at 7:30 AM It gives new meaning to start the beginning with the end in mind. A wonderful tribute to our Amazing God and Savior.

Sheri Fresonke Harper April 26, 2013 at 7:42 PM Excellent poem Suzanne, you tried this, it should do very well in the contest.

Andrea Dietrich April 26, 2013 at 5:23 PM I'm glad to see someone do that contest of Su's. I feel bad I have not even tried it yet! You did well, my friend. Great topic you chose for a roundel!

Christine Phillips April 26, 2013 at 11:01 AM I like the repetative use of "Before the beginning of time" very nice Suzanne Delaney April 26, 2013 at 11:03 AM Thanks Christine This was a real challenge and took a lot of re-writes. Glad you like the refrain. Suz Suzanne Delaney April 26, 2013 at 11:02 AM Thanks Sara: Lovely to see you. Suz

Sara Kendrick April 26, 2013 at 5:16 AM Great work that speaks of your faith..Reads like winning material to me..Enjoyed reading this morn..Thanks for stopping by..Sara