Fall

Fall

Trees wounded by color's brilliant army--
sadly I view nature bleed
ichor, orange and red.

Beneath my feet, earth shivers and cries out,
do not succumb, loved Summer;
she sighs one last sweet breath.

© June 15, 2014, Faye Lanham Gibson

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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 6/29/2014 6:41:00 PM

beautiful imagery plus great waves of feelings you arouse..!! CONGRATULATIONS FAYE... !

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/29/2014 3:52:00 PM

hauntingly beautiful, fay.. sweet congrats and huggs!

Donna Jones

Date: 6/29/2014 1:05:00 PM

This really comes to life! Congratulations on a fine win...

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 6/29/2014 11:18:00 AM

Hi Faye, this is such a beautifully descriptive write! Huge congratulations to you on your great win! Warmest regards.

Arlene Smith

Date: 6/29/2014 9:03:00 AM

congrats on a great win, Faye. Beuitiful images of Fall. Hugs... Arlene

Mohan Chutani

Date: 6/29/2014 6:58:00 AM

Lovely kimos of fall Faye. Congrats for the fine win. Mohan

Paul Callus

Date: 6/29/2014 6:10:00 AM

Hi Faye,,,this is so lovely and yet so sad! Pity for that extra 'and' in 1st Kimo; would even have sounded better without it!:) Congratulations! // paul

Elaine George

Date: 6/29/2014 6:09:00 AM

Wow!!! so creative...a personified kimo. Many congrats on your win, Faye. Elaine

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/28/2014 10:51:00 PM

Oh, Faye, this is yours? this would have been in top three except that you had one too many syllables in line three. It is a really easy fix. Just remove the "an" I don't think the word ichor even requires an article. The second one you wrote was absolutely stunning and it could have stood alone as a top winner. congratulations.

Faye Gibson
Date: 6/29/2014 9:50:00 PM