fall

fall counts past time warm sun dies
seed sown last year new life cries
breath comes breath leaves old clocks stop
glow bugs now light - how time flies

autumnjueju

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David Crandall

March 28, 2026 at 2:39 PM

Nice job - congratulations!

Terry Miller

March 30, 2026 at 1:32 AM

Thank you David

Sam Kauffman

March 27, 2026 at 10:54 AM

Terry, there is such a sense of death and revival in your lines, the work of the seasons and your glow bugs! Congrats, cheers and blessings!

Terry Miller

March 30, 2026 at 1:32 AM

Thanks Sam

Tania Kitchin

March 26, 2026 at 1:04 PM

Terry, nicely done. Love the last line. Congratulations on your winning placement.

Terry Miller

March 30, 2026 at 1:33 AM

Thank you Tania

Ghairo Daniels

March 26, 2026 at 2:53 AM

Well done on placement in contest, Terry. I like how you’ve integrated & commented on time in the poem. I can almost feel the counting, then the light. So much that the two inter-leading seasons teach us. Hav a beautiful day. X.

Terry Miller

March 30, 2026 at 1:33 AM

Thank you so much