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what do you do when you refuse to give up but the world has already given up on you? do you continue on this endless cycle of failure and disappointment or do you just stop trying stop running stop looking forward sit in one spot stare at the ground and let the world eat you up until you're nothing more than a dream that once was a candle that once burned a bird that never learned to fly

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 11/10/2011 7:17:00 AM
Never give up. Life is horrid at times. And other times it is such a precious gift. Don't let anyone have the power to make you give up. You seem like a strong individual. Don't let anyone push you around. I made that mistake once. ;)
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Date: 2/15/2011 8:46:00 PM
You can ever, ever give up. Giving up would be your failure. Let the grace of you take the lead of your life. The journey is your own, it is not governed by the world, and it doesn't end with this life. Your tears here, will become pearls later on, not only for you, but for those who will come after you. Your poem is very well written and your pain and query is felt deeply. Thanks for sharing. Caroline.
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Date: 2/15/2011 5:28:00 AM
A fine expression on fail, Chamonique
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Date: 2/14/2011 9:51:00 PM
Nice simple wording makes this entry easy to read and understand. In your twelfth line, "your" should correctly be either "you're" or "you are". Everything else looks fine.
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