Chamonique Knowles Poet Free verse

Fail

what do you do
when you refuse to give up
but the world has already given up on you?
do you continue on this endless cycle of failure
and disappointment
or do you just stop trying
stop running
stop looking forward
sit in one spot
stare at the ground
and let the world eat you up
until you're nothing more
than a dream that once was
a candle that once burned
a bird that never learned to fly

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Jessica Woolum November 10, 2011 at 7:17 AM Never give up. Life is horrid at times. And other times it is such a precious gift. Don't let anyone have the power to make you give up. You seem like a strong individual. Don't let anyone push you around. I made that mistake once. ;)

Caroline Cécile Delacroix February 15, 2011 at 8:46 PM You can ever, ever give up. Giving up would be your failure. Let the grace of you take the lead of your life. The journey is your own, it is not governed by the world, and it doesn't end with this life. Your tears here, will become pearls later on, not only for you, but for those who will come after you. Your poem is very well written and your pain and query is felt deeply. Thanks for sharing. Caroline.

Dr.Ram Mehta February 15, 2011 at 5:28 AM A fine expression on fail, Chamonique

Robert Pettit February 14, 2011 at 9:51 PM Nice simple wording makes this entry easy to read and understand. In your twelfth line, "your" should correctly be either "you're" or "you are". Everything else looks fine.