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Exotic Dancer

E very movement she makes X rated O nly a teen T hrust from her home I n retribution she C lads herself in scant attire D ances seductively to please A ny man who will boost her self esteem, but N ever C hooses to E xit with those who gaze longingly R emains a temptress beyond reach

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Robert Pettit

Date: 11/29/2011 12:27:00 PM

This one caught my eye because I have submitted an entry with the same title. I see yours is an acrostic, and a well-written one at that. You have made all the pieces of the puzzle fit together nicely here.

Rp Kumari

Date: 6/1/2010 5:40:00 AM

EXCELLENT STUFF!!!! LOVE IT

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/30/2010 6:03:00 AM

Interesting thoughts that you have penned in this one...Sad that teens end up in the sex business for whatever the reason for them ending up there...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara

Sue Mason

Date: 5/29/2010 6:08:00 PM

... and makes a lot of money in the process ... LOL ... excellent write ... love Acrostics and you really captured this one!!

Destiny Orschell

Date: 5/27/2010 7:25:00 PM

Amazing poem, Carolyn. I love reading it. Love, Destiny

Nitesh Aggarwal

Date: 5/26/2010 2:29:00 AM

Amazingly well written.

Ashley Yates

Date: 5/24/2010 12:01:00 AM

How sad and so lonely. Wonderfully written! Ashley

Danny Nunn

Date: 5/23/2010 5:08:00 PM

A sad way to make a living, and the bills are very high and not the bills we worry about..good write..thanks on You Can,,,for me was just a simple poem, the ABCABC is the way I write all my poems, just come easy for me that way..Danny

Susan Mills

Date: 5/22/2010 2:55:00 PM

I wonder how true this is but you seemed to have captured the perception of many of a dancing seductress. It's kinda out of my realm but I liked visiting your poem today. Very creative poem that stretches the imagination. Have a great day, Susan

James Fraser

Date: 5/22/2010 12:52:00 PM

Terrific Acrostic Carolyn, good luck in Jared's contest with this piece >> James

Michael Jordan

Date: 5/21/2010 11:34:00 AM

Carolyn, This poem means a great deal to me. I was once very in love with an exotic dancer named "Twila" - We were together from 79-81 - She worked at the Sha-na-na Club in Phoenix, Arizona. No I didn't meat her at the club I met her in the laundry room at our apt. building - Thank you for the memory recall - God Bless, mj

John Loving Iii

Date: 5/20/2010 11:08:00 AM

Eve after the temptation was forced to leave the garden. after her innocence was lost the free ride was over. IT'S a job! step out of gods law and you step out of his protection. obey your parents.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/20/2010 9:23:00 AM

Just saw your comment on Scarlett's poem.. just to let u know its for Jared ..not James.. as they are old college honeys who found each other on Soup.. how lovely ...LUV in bloom..its catchy.. I am back with Ron.. OMG...luv.. Linda-Marie..

Joe Flach

Date: 5/20/2010 8:25:00 AM

Wow - very nice! Is this a portrait of the artist? lol Very creative. Well done. Worth every bit of the dollar I tucked in. Carolyn, thanks so much for your comments on so many of my poems, I do appreciate the feedback. Joe

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 5/20/2010 12:47:00 AM

I like it, Carolyn. You have addressed an unfortunate social dilemma with great insight. A temptress beyond reach is especially meaningful. Teens thrust from home do have it rough...God forbid. Lovingly, Dane

Buffy Fooksss Aka Lynette C.

Date: 5/19/2010 4:59:00 PM

SEXXY GRL ALREADY.KEWL WRITE.HEHEE THANKS bUfFy

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/19/2010 4:55:00 PM

VERY good one about a dancer, CArolyn. I also forsee a great win for THIS one! LUv, andrea

Lynette Chachere

Date: 5/19/2010 4:09:00 PM

a great write. i love the meaning. thats good she never exits with those gaze too long.smart&precocious. beautiful poem. a talent from anywhere should never be forgotten. -Always&Forever Lynette

Ian Roulston

Date: 5/19/2010 3:50:00 PM

Wow, very well written. You really are a wonderful poet. Thanks for all your kind comments. Ian

Edward Orozco

Date: 5/19/2010 11:26:00 AM

wow love this piece! =)

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/19/2010 10:25:00 AM

This does indeed look like a winner for the contest Carolyn. I wish you the best. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/19/2010 9:29:00 AM

Wonderful entry for Jared's contest... this will certainly appeal to him... just saying "hi" while sunning on the beach...luv.. Linda-Marie..

James Peranteau

Date: 5/19/2010 9:18:00 AM

Great Acrostic Carolyn ! Though I'm sure, its hard to believe of a man...I've never fancied this extreme style of Dancing, yet I have seen a few times in my younger days its performances. Great job ! james

Chuck Keys

Date: 5/19/2010 9:17:00 AM

and the dancer ultimately leads a sad life. sadly in my youth, i may have seen her and not understood her pain. well stated, thank you, chuck

Gert W. Knop

Date: 5/19/2010 9:00:00 AM

ne could even see this dancer with closed eyes, Carolyn! Nicely written and thank you for your kind comments...Wish you every success in the contest...Love, Gert