Wilma Neels Poet Verse

'exhale'

realization hit me
it was never about him
the controls were in my hand
reverie was mine   

I had to take it
try and alter the ending 
starting with my heart
my thoughts became mine again 
I could finally exhale 

(Dodoitsu & Tanka)

Inspired by Russell’s Sivey’s contest:
“A Mesh of Forms”
Written by Wilma Neels

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Kim Merryman April 10, 2012 at 2:39 PM Wilma, congrats on your win with this wonderful write! Love, Kim

Carol Sunshine Brown April 10, 2012 at 12:10 PM Congratulations on your super win in Russell's "A Mesh Of Forms" contest Wilma. Love, Carol

Deborah Burch April 9, 2012 at 11:47 PM Fabulous Wilma!!! Congratulations on your well deserved win my friend...such beautiful flow...big huggsss,love deb

Joyce Johnson April 9, 2012 at 6:59 PM Very nicely said. Congratulations on a great win. Love, Joyce

Olusegun Arowolo April 9, 2012 at 5:29 PM Wonderful and nice piece,Wilma....Hmm..touchy...Congrats on your win...

Sara Kendrick April 9, 2012 at 1:58 PM Congrats on your win..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart April 9, 2012 at 8:46 AM congrats Wilma on a superb win for this eloquent mesh of forms ..so well written ..luv.. so enjoyed..

Joann Grisetti March 20, 2012 at 11:57 AM Good luck n the contest. A thoughtful poem with deep meanings.

Elizabeth Wesley March 18, 2012 at 2:50 PM Meshed beautifully Wilma; an emotion that begs to be felt by the reader. All the best in the contest!

Michael J. Falotico March 18, 2012 at 7:09 AM You have written pure art here... Fav it is my dear muse... luv n hugs Michael

Harry Horsman March 14, 2012 at 4:47 PM again such wondrous feeling one recieve when reading you inspiring poems. harry. good luck.

Kabuteng P.Ink K. March 11, 2012 at 10:29 PM Hi Missy, very cool how you combined these two forms, way to go for you :)-- I love what you say here, caught myself just holding my breath here-- then just letting it all out....breathe, breathe, breathe, yes sometimes we just have to realize this--- mwahugs

Debra Squyres March 11, 2012 at 7:56 PM Enjoyed reading your poem this evening. Two forms I've never tried. hmmmmm

Andrea Dietrich March 11, 2012 at 5:30 PM Now about your poem, this is just WONDERFUL. I sure hope I can do as well. You have melded the two forms with an awesome idea and the ending is stunning.

Andrea Dietrich March 11, 2012 at 5:29 PM first, about the girl"friend" I have to tell you, she was the leader of the clique and everyone did what she wanted. she just didn't want me in with her group, but it is such a small thing looking back on it. I have gained so many friendships of great value since the sixth grade!!

Prince Ekpemandu March 11, 2012 at 3:07 PM Nice piece.l°? hope ?† does well in Ð_???° contest.