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inhale, exhale, exhale, and repeat the wheeze this is your universe, and this is your life allow me to cough, and I'll allow you to wheeze just calm down, and we'll both admit a BREATHE as soon as you can, unwind and SIGH of relief inhale, exhale, exhale, and repeat the wheeze shake, sniff, and gasp for the best of reprise i had hoped my soul would be pure, not afraid of strife allow me to relax, and I'll allow you to wheeze i am aware that on this planet, our time squeeze the sight of us living in UTTER darkness scares herself inhale, exhale, exhale, and repeat the wheeze pain, as blood winced, had me GASP on the knees lighted up a few at least can WHISPER to the wife allow me to cough, and I'll allow you to wheeze if you miss me, you will always be able to wheeze i MURMUR you've given me a fresh life Inhale, exhale, exhale, and repeat the wheeze allow me to relax a bit, and I'll allow you to wheeze Written April 29, 2021 Writing Prompt - Breathe - Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Constance La France

Date: 5/11/2021 5:16:00 PM

Las, congratulations on your win in my Writing Prompt - Breathe - Challenge with your wonderfully penned poem, well done, peace _Constance

Sotto Poet
Date: 5/11/2021 6:55:00 PM

Thanks dearest Constance for the well picked contest subject and for your help and my placement, best regards warm hugs and love//Las

Ricky Muse

Date: 5/3/2021 4:18:00 PM

There is a river of rhythm in this poem. Very nice.

Sotto Poet
Date: 5/11/2021 6:56:00 PM

Thanks Ricky appreciate your nice feedback, have a wonderful evening

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 4/30/2021 7:43:00 PM

So impressive and deep, with a nice rhythm and flow. Best of wishes for the contest, Lasaad. Evelyn

Sotto Poet
Date: 5/1/2021 1:20:00 AM

Thanks for the kind words Evelyn. Have a blessed day hugs and regards

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 4/30/2021 12:10:00 PM

Nice pen Lasaad, good imagery and nice insightfulness too. Take care, Gordon

Sotto Poet
Date: 4/30/2021 2:10:00 PM

Thank you so much, Gordon; I really appreciate such feedback from a talented poet, have a great evening, best regards

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 4/30/2021 6:54:00 AM

Profound poem, beautifully written, my friend, Lasaad! Blessings.

Sotto Poet
Date: 4/30/2021 8:39:00 AM

Thanks, Dear Demetrios, I appreciate your reading and kind words, Blessings, and regards

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 4/29/2021 10:43:00 PM

Great contrasts in this poem A great villanelle. Consider reading the conditions if this is for a contest. No date for example.

Sotto Poet
Date: 4/30/2021 1:36:00 AM

Thanks Victor Appreciate you reading and commenting, I did finish the contest requirements Have a great day my friend

Alexis Y.

Date: 4/29/2021 9:46:00 PM

Hi Lasaad, You used the six words to write a good Villanelle. Each stanza stands alone as well, in your well-written piece. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Sotto Poet
Date: 4/30/2021 1:37:00 AM

Hi Alexis and thanks for the kind words, appreciate your feedback Have a great gay my friend Alexis