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Excess

Eating sugary foods
each day is known to cause 
enamel damage; so 
ensure you brush your teeth!
Eroded teeth can give
excruciating pain …
extraction could follow!


Pleiades E contest
Sponsored by Kim Merryman
Checked with how many syllables

09~17~16

bodycandycarefoodpainverse

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Andrea Dietrich

September 25, 2016 at 8:07 PM

VERY cleverly done, Jan. ME LIKES> Congratulations. HA the caption is EEE an EXCESS of E's

Jan Allison

September 26, 2016 at 12:41 PM

ha ha ha I love captchas that are topical to the poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Francis J Grasso

September 23, 2016 at 8:21 AM

Good one, Jan! Congratulations! ...Fran

Jan Allison

September 23, 2016 at 4:29 PM

May thanks Francis:-) hugs Jan xx

Sunita U.D Palawon

September 23, 2016 at 5:37 AM

Such an educative poem..I think this is appropriate for kids in classroom. (a sure gift to your dentist...ha ha ha)Love it!:)Congrats.

Jan Allison

September 23, 2016 at 4:29 PM

I will give her a copy for the dental surgery notice board:-) hugs jan xx

Kai Michael Neumann

September 22, 2016 at 2:39 PM

How to get kids hooked on brushing: if they brush well, we will read them poetry... Good stuff, Kai

Jan Allison

September 22, 2016 at 2:47 PM

Thanks Kia:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

September 22, 2016 at 2:28 PM

You are right, Jan, but then dentists would be out of a job:) I like the smooth flow of your Pleiades; I believe that this form needs to flow freely, otherwise it flops. Well done and congratulations! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

September 22, 2016 at 2:46 PM

I've posted 2 for the 'f' pleiades but the contest isn't posted yet - but I couldn't resist lol:-) hugs jan xx

Laura Leiser

September 22, 2016 at 1:31 PM

Ha! This is so true, Jan! Congrats on your win :)

Jan Allison

September 22, 2016 at 2:45 PM

Thanks Laura:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

September 22, 2016 at 12:19 PM

- I think it's a nice thing to do, to congratulate all one by one - in the contest I participate in - As a little "thank you for the match" regards ..... - Some I have read before and others not - It will always take some time, a long list of winners - But for me it is common courtesy and a pleasure to congratulate you Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison

September 22, 2016 at 12:36 PM

I try to do the same especially if I have participated in the contest but do put a general congrats on the page if the sponsor does a blog - got a lot of catching up to do today:-) love your emerald poem I love green:-) hugs jan xx

Sara Chansarkar

September 22, 2016 at 9:13 AM

haha,I hate dentists too:)Congrats Jan!

Jan Allison

September 22, 2016 at 12:37 PM

It doesn't bother me now but I used to be terrified!:-) hugs jan xx

Beautiful Scars

September 22, 2016 at 8:47 AM

Jan I know this feeling all too well! congratulations on your placement in the contest :)-luloo

Jan Allison

September 22, 2016 at 12:37 PM

Thanks LuLoo:-) hugs jan xx

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe

September 22, 2016 at 12:01 AM

A good lesson for my 6 year old daughter that's for sure - well deserved place Jan Regards, Mark

Jan Allison

September 22, 2016 at 2:22 AM

Thanks Mark:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe

September 21, 2016 at 10:50 PM

Coming back to say Congrats, Jan! Agnes

Jan Allison

September 22, 2016 at 2:21 AM

Thanks Agnes:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

September 21, 2016 at 6:49 PM

What a great commercial this would make to help people take better care of their teeth, Jan! Love it, and congrats on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison

September 21, 2016 at 6:51 PM

I will have to take a copy down to the dentist:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

September 21, 2016 at 6:35 PM

Congrats on a fine win Jan

Jan Allison

September 21, 2016 at 6:50 PM

Thanks Jospeh:-) hugs jan xx

Kim Merryman

September 21, 2016 at 5:38 PM

Jan, very wise advice in your cute, light-hearted write! Congrats on your 3rd place win! Blessings!

Jan Allison

September 21, 2016 at 5:44 PM

Thanks so much Kim I have such fun writing this form I have another 'e' poem to post some time:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe

September 18, 2016 at 4:05 PM

This one had me chuckle. We should pair this up with my Dessert pleiades; they would complement each other well ;) Good luck with the contest. Agnes

Jan Allison

September 18, 2016 at 5:44 PM

Thanks Agnes:-) hugs Jan xx

Ritu Saheb

September 18, 2016 at 3:49 PM

Adorable. And then, one must use Sensodyne.

Jan Allison

September 18, 2016 at 3:51 PM

LOL yes it is highly recommended:-) :-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

September 18, 2016 at 2:42 PM

- A great one, Jan ! - I wish you luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison

September 18, 2016 at 2:48 PM

Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Supraja Kannan

September 17, 2016 at 10:09 PM

Nice advise... Good luck with the contest...

Jan Allison

September 18, 2016 at 11:51 AM

Thanks Supraja:-) hugs Jan xx

Old Man Emu

September 17, 2016 at 6:45 PM

Great advise Jan, good luck with the contest.

Jan Allison

September 17, 2016 at 6:51 PM

Thanks so much Craig:-) hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian

September 17, 2016 at 12:27 PM

Yes....preach on! Good one, dear. Good luck in the contest.

Jan Allison

September 17, 2016 at 12:28 PM

Thanks Eileen - I hope its advice not preaching lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

September 17, 2016 at 11:07 AM

Very good Pleiades Jan...best wishes..

Jan Allison

September 17, 2016 at 11:56 AM

Thanks Joseph I really enjoy this form - have written another E poem too:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

September 17, 2016 at 8:58 AM

Good one Jan... excuse me while I go brush my teeth

Jan Allison

September 17, 2016 at 9:19 AM

LOL Tim:-) hugs Jan xx

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