Evening Star

In the breath of summer,
The time was midnight;
With stars in their circuits,
Shining high with their light.
Still brighter the moon,
Midst planets like knaves;
Shines bright in the sky,
Reflecting on waves.
I looked at her smile,
So remote in the sky;
Wearing her shroud,
Above clouds passing by.
And I turned to you,
My dear evening star;
More lovely you be,
Than heaven's lights are.
So shall your light shine,
As I stand and admire,
But your glow's not for me,
With your cold distant fire.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 6/22/2012 8:30:00 PM
I hope you're still there... what a sumptuous tribute to our Evening Star. Beautiful imagery and phrasing, as always! Love, Keith :)
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Date: 8/24/2011 1:26:00 AM
Elizabeth, VERY lovely, thought provoking poem and I believe we're kindred spirits. Your thoughts on my poem "The WORD" were deeply and sincerely appreciated as I was wondering why it didn't receive a few more comments. But alas, "Your junk may be my treasure." Such is life and glad we can apprecaite one anothers poetic style. Thanks again, Terry Martin
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Date: 8/11/2011 1:50:00 PM
That is so cute-sy for a rhyme! I like it, just for the pleasure of poetry! And for that reason it too.....can be a favorite poem. But, it is so light, the next time, can't you do something new! Laugh,, Ha,Ha.....Love your work. Keep the write-up! Your friend in the pen/G.FIELDS
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Date: 7/24/2011 6:47:00 PM
Beautiful, and I have to agree with the comment about excellent use of personification. Love the imagery as well.
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Date: 7/21/2011 7:07:00 PM
Wow I will always look up and see the star differently, through your eyes :-) MORE GIRLFRIEND!!
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Date: 7/21/2011 4:46:00 PM
Beautiful verse here my friend. Really good rhyme and rhythm. God Bless, JB
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Date: 7/21/2011 5:47:00 AM
Very good poetic personification here. An enjoyable read. Love, Robert.
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