Even the Angels Wept

The day you died you took me with you,
The way you lied shook me black and blue.

The sorrow you felt, I sure felt it too,
The tomorrow dreams won’t come true.

All the good hello's turned into dying goodbye's,
All the to’s and fro’s burned holes in my eyes.

You thought you were so sly, but I always knew,
You fought so hard to die and knew I needed you.

Depressing mornings and nights of pure hell,
Lessening of warnings and sights when you fell.

Deprivation of your soul saving wonder,
Trepidation of your whole wavering thunder.

Heavy-hearted moments with stitches on your wrists,
Broken-hearted atonement with twitches on your fists.

Unheard thoughts engraved in your soul,
The third day I tried to save you...you lost control.

Forgiveness with a burden held on my left shoulder,
Impulsiveness when you're hurting, (I couldn't hold her). 

     
     Bleeding and burning and 
                                     living and dying....
                 Needing and turning and
                                           giving and crying....


It's been five long years since I’ve rested and slept,
I try to smile but in my dreams even the angels wept.



Date Written: May 1, 2016
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Chaganti Avatar
February 2, 2017 at 2:21 AM
Very touching... Kudos on the fabulous win, Laura... :)
Scars Avatar
February 4, 2017 at 1:14 PM
thank you Shilpa :)-luloo
Hamilton Avatar
February 1, 2017 at 9:18 PM
Congrats 35/40 well done nice win!
Scars Avatar
February 4, 2017 at 1:13 PM
Thank you dear John! I am honored to share a first place! God bless :)-luloo
Day Avatar
June 9, 2016 at 5:37 PM
You shared loss flawlessly - Congrats on your win in the "Any Poem You Ever Penned" poetry contest. I enjoyed your work - Jesse
Grahamburglar Avatar
May 11, 2016 at 1:34 PM
Hey, stopping back by to say congrats on your contest win...I can't say that I'm surprised, this is excellent. -G
Scars Avatar
May 11, 2016 at 8:52 PM
many thanks, have a great night :)-luloo
La France Avatar
May 8, 2016 at 2:02 AM
Congrats on your great win with your beautifully penned poem
Scars Avatar
May 8, 2016 at 12:54 PM
many thanks Broken Wings :)-luloo
Kimathi Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 6:37 PM
A sad piece indeed. Sorry about that Laura. Congrats for your top placement in the contest.
Scars Avatar
May 8, 2016 at 12:54 PM
thank you Teddy :)-luloo
Carmack Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 6:29 PM
Congrats on taking second place. I am sorry to read below this is about your sister's passing.
Scars Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 6:32 PM
thank you Rob very much, it's funny I just read your Slovakia poem a few seconds ago, and I look at my comments and you commented on mine! too funny..thank you again have a great night :)-luloo
Haight Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 2:44 PM
Congratulations, dear Luloo, on your fine 2nd Place win in this Premiere Contest for your lovely, but so very sad poem. Hugs, Sandra
Scars Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 4:44 PM
awww you are so sweet Sandra! Many thanks again! :)-luloo
Daniel Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 10:35 AM
Congratulations Laura:) I told you this would win:) I love the way you made it rhyme:) Sorry about your sister:)
Scars Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 1:09 PM
thank you Jo for always being so sweet :)-luloo
Raven Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 9:20 AM
Hi Luloo, Firstly, congratulations both for the POTD and for your second place win in the contest. This is such a sad write Luloo, you have bared your heart and the pain flows forth. This is an excellent write. Whether in pain or joy, your heart does sing. Your sister smiles on you. This is a seven and into my faves. Hugs....Mike. XX
Scars Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 10:18 AM
awww..thank you Mike, you are very sweet, as always :)-luloo
Roper Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 8:50 AM
Congratulations on your win, Laura. I know your sister is with you and feels your aching hearrt
Scars Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 10:16 AM
thank you sweet lady :)-luloo
Smith Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 7:56 AM
Back to congratulate you again...
Scars Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 10:16 AM
thank you Charlie :)-luloo
Palli Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 7:06 AM
Congrats this heart wrenching poem. Could feel the devastating loss. So sorry you lots your sister.
Scars Avatar
May 7, 2016 at 10:14 AM
thank you Susan :)-luloo
Lawless Avatar
May 6, 2016 at 9:07 PM
Laura, there are, to me, so many intermingled interpretations to this poem. I had to read it several times and each read led me to another plausible conclusion. Great job on the theme and thanks for entering the contest.
Scars Avatar
May 6, 2016 at 10:31 PM
Thank you John so much. I loved writing this, which may be scary? Haha but honestly, this may be my fave poem I've ever written about my sisters death. I am utterly honored and thank you so much. Have a great night many thanks-luloo:)
Hamilton Avatar
May 6, 2016 at 7:20 AM
One of your best Laura, you do this theme very well, I love couplets so the form really combined well with your emotional write. Congrats on POTD
Scars Avatar
May 6, 2016 at 7:44 AM
thank you John, very much, you are always so kind..:)-luloo
Ashe Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 9:47 PM
Congrats on POTD! Quite a write!
Scars Avatar
May 4, 2016 at 10:16 AM
thank youWalter :)-luloo
Canerdy Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 12:56 PM
A 7 for sure, Luloo. Lovely and heart-wrenching. Congrats on POTD. Janice
Scars Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 1:06 PM
awww thank you Janice :)-luloo
Andresen Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 12:54 PM
- Congratulation on your p.o.t.d., Laura - // Anne-Lise :)
Scars Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 1:05 PM
thank you Anne-Lise! I was shocked! :)-luloo
Smith Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 11:21 AM
Great entry, great accolade as POTD, congratulations Luloo...
Scars Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 12:14 PM
Thank you Charlie :)-luloo
Dutta Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 11:13 AM
Wonderful Couplet, well chosen for poem of the day. Congrats
Scars Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 11:18 AM
Thank you sweet Anisha! You are always so sweet: )-luloo
Haight Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 9:03 AM
Oh so sad, Laura, but so beautifully expressed with such deep emotion. So worthy of Poem Of The Day honor. Hugs, Sandra
Scars Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 11:17 AM
Awwww thank you sweet lady Sandra: )-luloo
Dalei Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 8:54 AM
Wow--------superb. A brilliant couplet. I was captivated from beginning to end.Congratulation for POTD..........//:)hugs
Scars Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 11:16 AM
Many thanks Manmath:)-luloo
Daniel Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 12:42 AM
I like this poem. Just touches my heart:) A fave and a 7:) Sure to win:)Good luck:)
Scars Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 11:14 AM
Thank you Jo!-:) -Luloo
Makama Avatar
May 2, 2016 at 1:57 PM
This is awesome... Thank you so much for this wonderful share
Scars Avatar
May 2, 2016 at 3:45 PM
thank you Funom have a blessed night :)-luloo
Cheema Avatar
May 2, 2016 at 4:37 AM
Painfully and emotionally written of lost love! I wonder how long it takes to get over being abused and mistreated? Good luck!
Scars Avatar
May 2, 2016 at 12:28 PM
many thanks Balveen:)-luloo
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