Eternal Teardrops

Like the grey storm clouds forming overhead,
          and the raindrops seeking a place to fall;
     the darkness of life continues to spread.
               I could use a friend to lend a shoulder;
               to ease the pain beginning to smolder.
          Someone to catch teardrops before the squall,
     and put an end to my storm clouds instead.

Just like a wildfire spreading uncontained,
          my sadness is raging out of control,
     and eternal teardrops fall unrestrained.
               I could use a hero to lend a hand
               to regain control and sorrow remand.
          Someone to listen and gently console,
     and put an end to teardrops unmaintained.



August 12, 2018
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Scars Avatar
September 11, 2018 at 6:00 AM
that last line really got to me, amazing poem dear John, great rhythm and rhyme...thank you for your participation and congratulations on your placement...:)-luloo
Gondolf Avatar
September 11, 2018 at 9:45 AM
Thank you so much sweet Luloo, I appreciate it and thanks for hosting this wonderful contest. John
Fisher Avatar
August 16, 2018 at 8:46 AM
This is fantastic John. A very emotional and relatable write. Haley
Gondolf Avatar
August 16, 2018 at 8:59 AM
Thank you, Haley, we have all had our personal storms in life but with the help of our friends we always manage to find the rainbows. John
Dietrich Avatar
August 13, 2018 at 3:16 PM
You did very well with her challenge to us. I think I did only one stanza but I enjoyed the challenge. I love this kind of contest and what it brings out in us!
Gondolf Avatar
August 13, 2018 at 3:40 PM
Thank you, Andrea. For me this seemed like a strange rhyme scheme; I felt like the seventh line was just hanging out and didn't belong. I look forward to reading yours. John
Horsman Avatar
August 13, 2018 at 6:22 AM
Your hero John, is your poetry, in it brings so much joy, for the reader.
Gondolf Avatar
August 13, 2018 at 6:25 AM
Harry, thanks for the wonderful comment, it means a lot, I appreciate it. John
Nicole Avatar
August 12, 2018 at 6:25 PM
Sometimes, tears need to caress the heart, as they often soothe and cleanse the soul. Tears are invisible in the rain, and mine have fallen many times like this. When there is someone near, to lean upon- to hold you so close, it is very comforting indeed. Your thoughts curl ever so tenderly around me. ~ Brandy
Gondolf Avatar
August 12, 2018 at 7:30 PM
Thank you, Brandy, I always appreciate hearing your thoughts on love and life, I will ponder them. I’m glad that my thoughts tenderly spoke to you. John
Sands Avatar
August 12, 2018 at 8:55 AM
Very well written John. I am sure many can relate to this , as you have expressed exactly how it can be sometimes. I hope all is well. Good luck in the contest :)
Gondolf Avatar
August 12, 2018 at 9:03 AM
Thank you so much, Heidi, I appreciate it. All is well :) John
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