Joseph May Poet Rhyme

Eternal Teardrops

In the valley of death, dry bones gather dust
  Scattering  memories of the bereft
   Carrying them away with the wind's gust
    Blowing sorrow into tears
      Of sadness, which is too much to bear,
       Feelings of despair are all that's left
         As silver glinted dreams turn to rust

               A sea of sadness in its dismal plight
            Flows through the painful emptiness of the heart
             Until the coming of the starless night;
         In the darkness, they slumber still
       Yielding to eternity's will
     These two worlds, so far apart
   One in the spirit, eternal teardrops, the other's rite
                                    -
 8-9-18
 Rhyme Time 6 - Verses Of Metaphors Contest
 Sponsor: Laura Loo

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Sheri Fresonke Harper September 12, 2018 at 8:15 PM lovely sadness in this metaphor filled poem, Joesph

Beautiful Scars September 11, 2018 at 5:56 AM beautifully expressed dear Joseph, lovely rhythm and rhyme- love the layout too...thank you for your participation and congratulations on your placement...:)-luloo Joseph May September 11, 2018 at 12:57 PM Thank yuo for my placement Luloo

Susan Gentry August 22, 2018 at 10:33 AM Amazing and beautiful.

Winged Warrior August 21, 2018 at 12:31 AM Superb writing my friend...very well executed Joseph...best for a fantastic win...love & light...^WW^

Nette Onclaud August 18, 2018 at 7:24 PM what a heartfelt write written with much depth and mood, joseph... hugggs

Silent One August 17, 2018 at 3:06 PM Great use of metaphor Joseph..

Janice Canerdy August 14, 2018 at 3:57 PM Excellent, very moving, Joseph! Janice

Pashang Salehi August 11, 2018 at 5:51 PM Crying is cleansing. There's a reason for tears, happiness, sadness, and loneliness.

Susan Ashley August 10, 2018 at 6:49 PM Your sorrowful poem is a woeful and metaphoric beauty, Joseph. Poignant emotions are powerfully and artistically expressed in your wondrous piece. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich August 10, 2018 at 5:28 PM Splendid poetry, Joseph. I find these kinds of challenges so much more inspiring than others at Soup. I just love writing with metaphors as you did here.

Heidi Sands August 10, 2018 at 11:09 AM Very well written Joseph! Good luck in the contest :)

Vijay Pandit August 10, 2018 at 7:25 AM You captured the emotions well in this poem. Great lines such as: Feelings of despair are all that's left.. As silver glinted dreams turn to rust. Best for a win, Joseph.

Anisha Dutta August 9, 2018 at 10:27 PM EXCELLENT All the best