Eternal Teardrops

In the valley of death, dry bones gather dust
  Scattering  memories of the bereft
   Carrying them away with the wind's gust
    Blowing sorrow into tears
      Of sadness, which is too much to bear,
       Feelings of despair are all that's left
         As silver glinted dreams turn to rust

               A sea of sadness in its dismal plight
            Flows through the painful emptiness of the heart
             Until the coming of the starless night;
         In the darkness, they slumber still
       Yielding to eternity's will
     These two worlds, so far apart
   One in the spirit, eternal teardrops, the other's rite
                                    -
 8-9-18
 Rhyme Time 6 - Verses Of Metaphors Contest
 Sponsor: Laura Loo

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Date: 9/12/2018 8:15:00 PM
lovely sadness in this metaphor filled poem, Joesph
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Date: 9/11/2018 5:56:00 AM
beautifully expressed dear Joseph, lovely rhythm and rhyme- love the layout too...thank you for your participation and congratulations on your placement...:)-luloo
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Date: 9/11/2018 12:57:00 PM
Thank yuo for my placement Luloo
Date: 8/22/2018 10:33:00 AM
Amazing and beautiful.
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Date: 8/21/2018 12:31:00 AM
Superb writing my friend...very well executed Joseph...best for a fantastic win...love & light...^WW^
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Date: 8/18/2018 7:24:00 PM
what a heartfelt write written with much depth and mood, joseph... hugggs
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Date: 8/17/2018 3:06:00 PM
Great use of metaphor Joseph..
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Date: 8/14/2018 3:57:00 PM
Excellent, very moving, Joseph! Janice
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Date: 8/11/2018 5:51:00 PM
Crying is cleansing. There's a reason for tears, happiness, sadness, and loneliness.
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Date: 8/10/2018 6:49:00 PM
Your sorrowful poem is a woeful and metaphoric beauty, Joseph. Poignant emotions are powerfully and artistically expressed in your wondrous piece. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan
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Date: 8/10/2018 5:28:00 PM
Splendid poetry, Joseph. I find these kinds of challenges so much more inspiring than others at Soup. I just love writing with metaphors as you did here.
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Date: 8/10/2018 11:09:00 AM
Very well written Joseph! Good luck in the contest :)
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Date: 8/10/2018 7:25:00 AM
You captured the emotions well in this poem. Great lines such as: Feelings of despair are all that's left.. As silver glinted dreams turn to rust. Best for a win, Joseph.
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Date: 8/9/2018 10:27:00 PM
EXCELLENT All the best
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