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Eternal Breath-Win

Eternal Breath Hardly could I see you through my watery eyes Holding you in my arms never to let you go As your existence dribbled to the ground There was no light, no air and no sound What all could I see, was just you. A death rattle took your last breath At very moment, without dying, I was dead. I see you in every facet of a single crystal In a single flower I see you in each petal I change my stance to see you in each tree With outstretched arms of the branches In all life I find you hiding and thriving I have lost myself to the fading dreams As snowflake melts in the summer sun I am nothing but a stranger in my own house +++++ Date : 10-11-13 Dr. Ram Mehta First Place Win Contest: Eternal Breath by Gail Angel Doyle

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Date: 12/4/2013 12:04:00 PM
simply divine
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Date: 11/30/2013 6:50:00 PM
So emotional. Such a sense of longing. Congrats, Dr. Ram Mehta!
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Date: 11/30/2013 6:51:00 PM
I'm adding this to my favs. : )
Date: 11/30/2013 8:03:00 AM
Fantastic! Wonderful expressions of a love that lingers on bringing beauty. Congrats on a well deserved win.
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Date: 11/27/2013 5:59:00 PM
A beautifully expressed poem, Dr. Ram! Very heartfelt and genuine! Terrific work! Congratulations on your win!...Thank you for the kind congrats on my poem.
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Date: 11/27/2013 6:56:00 AM
don't be lost Dr Ram such a sad poem. Congrats on your win. Robert
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Date: 11/27/2013 4:03:00 AM
many congrats on your top spot ram I found this very sad xx
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Date: 11/26/2013 11:02:00 PM
many congratss
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Date: 11/26/2013 8:09:00 PM
Congratulations Dr on this wonderful winning poem..missing a loved one....
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Date: 11/26/2013 5:22:00 PM
Dr Ram, that is awesome how everyone got a first place... Now that's a fun loving way of saying. Back Off all you haters, it's my contest and I do and enjoy what I want. Love Gail, for that.... Every poem I read was beautiful so far.... ~Hugs & Congratulations with your "Eternal Breath" awesome win... Always ~ LINDA
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Date: 11/26/2013 5:15:00 PM
Congrats on your win Dr. Ram, what a heartfelt poem, I can feel the sadness here :) wishing you a wonderful day there, hug, Yanny
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Date: 11/26/2013 2:36:00 PM
- Eternal Breath Contest: Sponsored by: Gail Angel Doyle - A contest that was at least for me a deep theme. - CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR WINNING POEM, VERY SKILLED WRITTEN!! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/11/2013 10:56:00 AM
Lovely people become part of our heart and their absence leaves a hole that cannot be filled. This is a heartfelt and tender write.
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Date: 11/11/2013 9:02:00 AM
Very moving and emotional. Evokes a lasting memory of love
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Date: 11/11/2013 4:54:00 AM
Beauty of expressions engulfing the heart!
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Date: 11/11/2013 2:09:00 AM
A wonderful and heartfelt poem ! thanks for visiting my page ( poem ) .Good luck in contest ! ....Saanvi : )
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Date: 11/11/2013 12:31:00 AM
So very deep..so profound these words.So sad yet very beautiful.
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Date: 11/10/2013 6:14:00 PM
Thank you for the congrads on my win cher
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Date: 11/10/2013 9:53:00 AM
wow, Ram, this is powerful poetry and SO GOOD. A FAVE!!!
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