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Etched Humanity Premiere Contest Winner

Written: April 24, 2024
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Tread of life
      a strand of hair
           disassociation
desolation    devastation     
floribunda      flapdoodle
                   constantly hearing 
Voices... 
             whispering 
                    screaming,
spread their 
             ivory wings, 
                               fly
                         in  velveteen 
                              sky

Constantly...
                     berating, 
                         damaging 
                              disparaging
mentally...

unseen torment 
                 pretending
                        drowning in 
                              unfillable      chasm
Trauma... 
           suppressing 
                        swallowing 
existence
                   dripping with shadows...

When casting spells 
             seeking peace 
                           amid war
                                turn off TVs 
            keep radios hushed
                             lure of 
                       loathy 
                 illusion

draped in earthy 
                   petrichor shade
splendidly 
               sculpted from 
                                   stardust
bereft of insignia or emblem...

Opus headline
           in magnetic bowl
                          shredded
                  with a spark
burned in full 
anoint ash 
          on forehead 
                                  As Peace Symbol

Then
    with a broken gun 
                on windowsill
                             east-facing muzzle 
           align seven shots
heart-shaped trigger guard
                shadows shouldn't touch

Then

stir three dove wings 
                            into hot milk
must be flawless
           add three plastic 
                  army men 
                          whirlwind
                                       madness
let it cool down &
stir with 
              olive branch

Dump sharp knife out
             sun-facing blade
                      back spell your name 
                                  five times
                      then step inside &
                                   close the door
etched in 
          immortal art 
                      of humanity.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024




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Date: 4/29/2024 5:56:00 PM
Wow I nearly missed another masterpiece! Congratulations on your trophy win!
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Date: 4/28/2024 9:46:00 AM
Dear Lasaad, your unique combination of imageries seamlessly blend elements of the surreal with the real as you capture what it is to be human with your trademark poetic finesse. Beautiful, captivating master strokes of artistry from your deep, rich, golden pen creates a gem of awe-inspiring verse. Congratulations for your well deserved trophy win! Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 4/27/2024 8:14:00 PM
Wow Sotto! That's really something! I like Howard's word, "towering" to describe it. Congrats on your win! "Dripping with shadows"
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Date: 4/27/2024 1:18:00 PM
An incredible write from a very detailed post. Congratulations
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Date: 4/27/2024 10:06:00 AM
Dear Sotto, Your majestic magnum opus shines, sparkles and gleams in a whirlpool of towering intelligence and top-of-the-range observations. An embarrassment of riches that are anything but embarrassing abound. I think you rock too. Congrats on your outright first placement. I cherish your generous comments on my work. Best regards Howard
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Date: 4/27/2024 9:25:00 AM
Whole hearted congratulations on a well deserved win for this amazing poem SP. You never fail to amaze with your innovative creations, and wonderfully worded poetry. A true credit to your wonderful Talent my friend.
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Date: 4/27/2024 11:28:00 AM
Thank you so much, dear Wendy, my heartfelt congratulations to you as well for the outstanding poem and winning placement.
Date: 4/25/2024 9:05:00 AM
Hello Sotto, Wow, you really dig deep into the raw complexities of human existence, navigating the tumultuous terrain of despair and hope. I love how you unraveled the intricacies of emotional turmoil and the search for inner peace amidst chaos. Your words express a haunting beauty, reflecting the resilience of the human spirit in the face of adversity. Sotto, What a powerful exploration of the human condition, etched in timeless artistry. - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 4/25/2024 5:21:00 AM
A symphony of emotions resonate in this artistic creation, my friend. Your poetic talents are splendidly on display invoking sights and sounds emanating from poetic heart. You always craft a winner, Lasaad.
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Date: 4/25/2024 4:46:00 AM
- I alternated between "high and low" in your poem today, Las...lots of metaphorical devices...very nicely done...love the shape... :) - hugs
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