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Etched Humanity Premiere Contest Winner

Written: April 24, 2024 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Tread of life a strand of hair disassociation desolation devastation floribunda flapdoodle constantly hearing Voices... whispering screaming, spread their ivory wings, fly in velveteen sky Constantly... berating, damaging disparaging mentally... unseen torment pretending drowning in unfillable chasm Trauma... suppressing swallowing existence dripping with shadows... When casting spells seeking peace amid war turn off TVs keep radios hushed lure of loathy illusion draped in earthy petrichor shade splendidly sculpted from stardust bereft of insignia or emblem... Opus headline in magnetic bowl shredded with a spark burned in full anoint ash  on forehead  As Peace Symbol Then with a broken gun on windowsill east-facing muzzle align seven shots heart-shaped trigger guard shadows shouldn't touch Then stir three dove wings into hot milk must be flawless add three plastic army men whirlwind madness let it cool down & stir with olive branch Dump sharp knife out sun-facing blade back spell your name five times then step inside & close the door etched in immortal art of humanity.

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Date: 4/29/2024 5:56:00 PM
Wow I nearly missed another masterpiece! Congratulations on your trophy win!
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Date: 4/28/2024 9:46:00 AM
Dear Lasaad, your unique combination of imageries seamlessly blend elements of the surreal with the real as you capture what it is to be human with your trademark poetic finesse. Beautiful, captivating master strokes of artistry from your deep, rich, golden pen creates a gem of awe-inspiring verse. Congratulations for your well deserved trophy win! Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 4/27/2024 8:14:00 PM
Wow Sotto! That's really something! I like Howard's word, "towering" to describe it. Congrats on your win! "Dripping with shadows"
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Date: 4/27/2024 1:18:00 PM
An incredible write from a very detailed post. Congratulations
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Date: 4/27/2024 10:06:00 AM
Dear Sotto, Your majestic magnum opus shines, sparkles and gleams in a whirlpool of towering intelligence and top-of-the-range observations. An embarrassment of riches that are anything but embarrassing abound. I think you rock too. Congrats on your outright first placement. I cherish your generous comments on my work. Best regards Howard
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Date: 4/27/2024 9:25:00 AM
Whole hearted congratulations on a well deserved win for this amazing poem SP. You never fail to amaze with your innovative creations, and wonderfully worded poetry. A true credit to your wonderful Talent my friend.
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Date: 4/27/2024 11:28:00 AM
Thank you so much, dear Wendy, my heartfelt congratulations to you as well for the outstanding poem and winning placement.
Date: 4/25/2024 9:05:00 AM
Hello Sotto, Wow, you really dig deep into the raw complexities of human existence, navigating the tumultuous terrain of despair and hope. I love how you unraveled the intricacies of emotional turmoil and the search for inner peace amidst chaos. Your words express a haunting beauty, reflecting the resilience of the human spirit in the face of adversity. Sotto, What a powerful exploration of the human condition, etched in timeless artistry. - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 4/25/2024 5:45:00 AM
At first glance, I thought this poem 'looked' disjointed and inharmonious. But as I read, I knew I was reading something harmonious and magnificently created. The metaphors were brilliant. With all sincerity, your poem left me breathless. What a creative mind you have. Have a pleasant day, your poet friend in Texas, Sara
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Date: 4/25/2024 5:21:00 AM
A symphony of emotions resonate in this artistic creation, my friend. Your poetic talents are splendidly on display invoking sights and sounds emanating from poetic heart. You always craft a winner, Lasaad.
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Date: 4/25/2024 4:46:00 AM
- I alternated between "high and low" in your poem today, Las...lots of metaphorical devices...very nicely done...love the shape... :) - hugs
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