Escaping the Medusa

This Medusa had no power to turn us into stone
but when she ran aground over Poseidon's throne
his anger stirred, and into the sea the crew was flung.
On a raft urgently built of salvaged timbers we clung.
A hundred and more escaped before the frigate sunk
and after four days adrift, our number had shrunk.

With naught but salted sea to sate our massive thirst
I vowed not to give in. I swore I'd not be the first
to yield to temptation and drink myself to death
though feverish from the intensity of the sun's breath.
On the eighth day, hunger turned men into savages,
feasting on flesh in a moment of rapacious ravages.

Bloated bodies bobbled like apples off Africa's coast.
I contemplated my fate to become what I dreaded most-
being tossed off the raft, into a shark's clamping jaws.
To survive, no one had agreed to abide by man's laws.
I'll not forget the look of fear in the eyes of others,
sailors who once proudly called themselves 'brothers.'

Each of us clutched and clawed for an inch of the raft.
The feeble ones cackled as though they'd gone daft.
Arms and legs entangled among the living and dead,
as an alabaster corpse pillowed a sun-blistered head.
The demented swam away, flailing arms in roiling waves
until they perished in the depths of their turbid graves.

Alas the day, two weeks in, a ship sighted on the horizon.
Fifteen survivors with charred skin, lean and wizened
rescued from death's grip in a morbid human experience.
Men who'd given up on hoping for a timely deliverance,
their bodies emaciated, and their clothing, threadbare,
destined to relive the catastrophe in gruesome nightmare.


August 4th 2022
2022 Marathon mile 11 Contest
Sponsor: Mark Toney

NOTE: In June 1816, the French frigate Medusa, ran aground off the coast of Senegal. Because of a shortage of lifeboats, some 150 survivors embarked on a raft and were decimated by starvation during a 13-day ordeal, which descended into murder and cannibalism. Only a handful remained when they were rescued at sea.

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Date: 8/17/2022 10:37:00 PM
WOW Lin, you have told this heartbreaking story with such vivid imagery to obtain empathy from the reader. This is beyond Excellent writing. I believe I would’ve had to give a tie for the trophy. This is simply spectacular and I am putting it into my faves. Congratulations on your Second place win. Blessings xxoo
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Date: 8/18/2022 5:19:00 AM
Thanks so much for liking this one, Connie. It made me happy to read how much you thought of my poem to think it deserved a higher placement. That is my reward, and I do appreciate you.
Date: 8/16/2022 10:34:00 PM
Lin, a chilling telling of a lesser-known historical tragedy. Your capable hands have masterfully rendered this account into a gripping and heartrending drama. Excellent work and congrats for your continued success in the marathon. So glad you decided to keep running! Blessings ~ John
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Date: 8/18/2022 5:18:00 AM
Hello John, and I am so happy for your visit. Reading your comments always encourages me, and for that I truly appreciate you as a poet and friend. Thank you! If I'm not mistaken, congratulations are due to you as well. Nicely done.
Date: 8/14/2022 10:06:00 AM
Dear Lin, your dramatic and dynamic imagery brings me to the center of this harrowing scene. A tragedy brought to life through the expression of your spellbinding pen. Your amazing narrative honors the people aboard the Medusa. You are an enchanting storyteller! Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 8/15/2022 10:31:00 AM
Your gracious comments are serving to encourage me, Susan. I appreciate every kind compliment you offer. Thanks so very much. I haven't commented on anyone's poem from Mile 11, but please know I'm not surprised that yours was there. Well done, my poetic friend.
Date: 8/12/2022 10:29:00 AM
A very dramatic narrative, Lin. Writing in the first person made it even more palpable. A horrible 13-day ordeal reducing men to savages. It reminds me of the deadly sinking of the USS Indianapolis during WW2 in 1945. The 5-day ordeal of the Indianapolis survivors remains the worst maritime disaster in U.S. naval history. Congratulations on your second-place podium finish on Mile 11 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 12 has already started!
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Date: 8/13/2022 5:02:00 PM
Thank you for appreciating these lines for a placement in Mile 11, Mark.
Date: 12/14/2021 10:57:00 AM
I had never heard of this wreck before, Lin. You have done an awesome job of telling the story. Truly gifted writing! Poetry at its best!
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Date: 12/17/2021 12:28:00 PM
It was a terrible experience for those poor men, women, and the captain's child. Gruesome way to have to survive. Thank you, Milt.
Date: 12/14/2021 6:13:00 AM
You have given us a truly great poem composed on the tragic loss of live and the darkened depths to which humans wil descend when in such dire circumstances. Built into our DNA is the survival instinct, and in that fear of death many will sink to the hideous act of cannibalism to survive. Great poetry-- that reveals how people will react in the gravest of circumstances.
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Date: 12/14/2021 6:37:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Robert. No hissing snakes in this one. lol The blame was placed on the shoulders of the commander of the vessel, new to his appointment. He, his wife and child were all lost.
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Date: 12/14/2021 6:16:00 AM
The title got me. I thought the new poem was going to be on the Medusa of mythological fame and delightfully found that it was on an actual historic case.. A VERY SAD AND DARK REALITY NO LESS.. A FAV...
Date: 12/14/2021 6:02:00 AM
I was waiting for this one Lin and I wasn't disappointed, absolutely brilliant, my kind of poetry. I love historical poems especially nautical ones. You put a lot of effort into this one. Tom
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Date: 12/14/2021 6:36:00 AM
I thought you might find it to your liking, Tom, because you've given so many wonderfully related historical writes based on fact to the poets here. Thank you so very kindly.
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