Erosion

my mind is an erosion of cliffsides
along the sandy shores where 
winds blow away and erode the 
layers of once-prominent facades 
which proudly faced the tempermental
forces of nature until the years of
strife weakened its very structure 
to a crumbling pile of rock and soil
at the bottom of an uneven pile 
damaging all in its path of destruction
which encourages an alluvial gush
when the rains arrive adding to the
muddy wasteland leaving a chaotic 
scene of despair for hopelessness
in which there is no turning back to 
what was once and to cleanup the 
mess of the rumble and roar of nature's 
attack on my abode of self which resides
at the bottom of a cliff all broken up
waiting for the tide to sweep me away

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 5/13/2020 6:39:00 PM
Sonia, excellent, congratulations on your win in Brian's contest _Constance
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Sonia Walker
Date: 5/13/2020 8:37:00 PM
Constance, thank you for your kind words. Hugs, Sonia.
Date: 5/13/2020 11:22:00 AM
Sonia, congratulations on your winning placement. It is so difficult to keep an extended metaphor focused with imagery. You did an excellent job in your pensive write. Hugs my friend.
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Date: 5/13/2020 12:08:00 PM
Sam, your encouraging words have added sunshine to my day. Thank you for your thoughtful review and congratulations. Hugs, Sonia.
Date: 4/1/2020 7:57:00 AM
A wonderful allusion to the mental condition of the mind. Especially when left in the tempest of our current state of being. Stay safe and Congratulations on you podium win. JC Hwakens
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Date: 4/1/2020 9:51:00 AM
JC, thank you for your sincere comment and congratulations. ~ Sonia
Date: 10/26/2017 5:31:00 PM
Sonia, what a perfect example of enjambment! I am happy to see this gem high on the winning list! Congratulations ! : )
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Date: 10/26/2017 7:15:00 PM
Connie, thank you for your congratulations. Hugs, Sonia
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