Ephemeral Existence

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Poetic Form: Monorhyme

Inspired: 2023 November 05

*10th Place*
NO 1257 NEW POEM ONLY
Contest Judged: 2023 November 13
Sponsored by: Brian Strand

Image: Why is My Lavender Dying? by Gardenwisper.com

Pin de Wlsghk en ?? en 2023 | Lineas decorativas, Marcos para texto, Dibujos de labios

Revelry peculiars the incandescent cavalcade making purple flowers loosen touch of its aide as nothing hides in place of spotlight charade for velvety leathers surrender every escapade useful issues from its lifeline withering in trade salient rise o'er frayed sins the earth weighed.

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 11/21/2023 12:39:00 PM

Oh, William, your use of original words in this monorhyme just makes my toes tingle, hoa'aloha! No tired, overused words for you! You search for deeper meaning and more artistic expression through your majestic words - cavalcade, charade, escapade! This is a "salient" gem. Blessings! Mahalo! Hau'oli ho'omaikai'i!

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/21/2023 4:01:00 PM

Aloha, Sam of the hour and e'ermore. I'm glad of its self-worth as Brian's interprets of that to be. Mahalo for your exceptional courtesies you've expressed. I am blessed, hoa'aloha nui. A hu'i hou, William

Sotto Poet

Date: 11/6/2023 5:01:00 AM

The poem you have crafted exhibits a remarkable finesse. Your utilization of captivating imagery and playful elements succeeds in illuminating pleasant reflections on the transitory nature of our being. Particularly, the final line, which elegantly captures the prominence of overcoming our faults amidst the burdens of life, is skillfully articulated. Appreciate your comment on my page.

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/6/2023 8:17:00 AM

A gracious welcome, my friend, as it is always a newness that entertains my eyes in the scope of your talented quill! Again, I am forever appreciative of your visits and illuminating commentaries, Lasaad! Aloha always, William