Envisioning Dawn On Winter's Stream

(Looking back, I rather miss December now!!)

Envisioning Dawn on Winter's Stream

Rising up midst tall, thin, frosted trees,
December Dawn has cast herself onto
a wintry stream so silent and so still,
and at this wondrous time – so icy blue!

I picture Dawn a goddess as her lips 
dip into winter’s stream as if to drink
sweetly from it; my mind sips this scene
of Dawn’s mouth on the water – smiling pink!

Now fully risen, Dawn reveals her gown -
the light of sun shimmering like beads
dripping down to warm the frigid stream.
She beams with satisfaction; day proceeds.

April 8, 2020 
for Chantelle Anne Cooke's  'Serenity In Scenes Of Mother Nature ' Contest
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Horsman Avatar
April 19, 2020 at 12:19 AM
Oh, this is back to your very best, Andrea. Number one in my contest,,Stay Safe, Harry
Kauffman Avatar
April 11, 2020 at 7:15 PM
Andrea, back to say congratulations on your win!
Mossburg Avatar
April 10, 2020 at 1:47 PM
Beautiful, well crafted work of word art. One of my favorite subjects to read and write about.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 8:56 PM
Congratulations, Andrea! Oh yes, Winter’s cold but this season’s colder! Let us wake up from this nightmarish thing!
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 5:53 PM
Congratulations on your third place podium win with this enchanting poem Andrea! So serene and lovely! xxoo
Watt Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 4:56 PM
Just noticed your podium win with this GREAT write of dawn, Congratulations, my nature-loving friend!
Dietrich Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 5:08 PM
what?? I better go see what you are talking about!!
Koplin Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 4:26 PM
Wow. That was fantastic. I wish I could write like you do. Such vivid imagery.
Dietrich Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 4:48 PM
Lots of poets here write like this, but thanks for the compliment, Mark.
Kauffman Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 4:13 PM
Really lovely and gentle as the dawn. Like John I love the personification of dawn - especially as she smiles "with satisfaction." Good luck in the contest with this gem. One of my favorites from your pen!
Dietrich Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 4:16 PM
thanks so much, Sam. I left a note in Soupmail for you.
Horne Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 2:20 PM
Love this beautiful write, my friend
Watt Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 2:11 PM
Beautiful personification of the goddess Dawn. I love "the light of sun shimmering like beads". Did you use "beams" in the final line as a sly reference to sunbeams? Another wonderful seasonal write.
Dietrich Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 3:28 PM
yes, my friend. Glad you took note of that. It's about as "clever" as I can get. Sure can't write surreal like some people do.
Michael Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 2:09 PM
Dawn is alive...You captured her in words...Nice one
Leffanta Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 1:00 PM
Pretty picture indeed, but why didn't the cold freeze COVID-19? Aloha! Rico
Zola-Zaba Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 12:58 PM
An exquisite mental image you painted with this one.Best wishes!
Pandit Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 6:59 AM
Very pleasant look back--enjoyed the read, Andrea.
Lawless Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 6:16 AM
It may be December befor we get out of the house.....nicely done with great visual impact
Somadas Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 3:47 AM
Fantastic imagery of long gone december dawn.. Great rhyme.. Good luck in the contest Andrea..
Dietrich Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 9:23 AM
thanks, Jenish!
Laurie Avatar
April 8, 2020 at 8:57 PM
Hello Andrea … nice picture poem Andrea. Personally I'm not a fan of winter, but we don't have the magical effect of snow, just cold and rain - thank you Andrea - Lindsay
Dietrich Avatar
April 9, 2020 at 9:23 AM
I'm not a fan of it either!!
Faulkner Avatar
April 8, 2020 at 7:41 PM
December dawn, so delicate and dreamy, a very pretty picture you have drawn, Andrea!
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