Vijay Pandit Poet Couplet

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December 26, 2023
Placed 1st: Anacreontic Couplets Contest
Seven Syllables Per Line (HMS.com)
Sponsor: Silent One

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Entertainer-Anacreontic Couplets

Charmed by her exotic glance
She enchants a sexy dance
In costumed display of art
Strumming rhythms of joyful heart
Choreographing slow grooves
In graceful, musical moves
As gestures paint passion themes
And song of love stokes their dreams
When desires-enamored spree
Hypnotized in tunes of glee

But look closely, watch her sigh
Hear the bawl of tearless cry
When crowds deceitful extol
Exhibit of anguished soul
As smiles aesthetic hide pain
And feigned visage cries disdain

Cheer for her to turn the page
For she longs to leave this cage
Leave realms inebriated
Of drunk notions, ill-fated

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Kim Rodrigues January 3, 2024 at 7:16 PM What looks beautiful and enticing often has a dark side. Congratulations, Vijay, on your win!

Susan Ashley January 1, 2024 at 6:11 PM Dear Vijay, the artistry of your poetic pen paints a stunning and woeful portrait of a caged "entertainer". The anguish is palpable, and so is one's hope for her to turn the page. Congratulations for your excellent win in Silent One's contest. Warmest wishes for a happy new year, my friend.. ~Susan

Silent One January 1, 2024 at 10:56 AM You did this one so well, it rhymes and flows and in point with the form.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Silent One January 1, 2024 at 10:56 AM You did this one so well, it rhymes and flows and in point with the form.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Sotto Poet January 1, 2024 at 9:20 AM Vijay, your remarkable poem is full of beauty and emotional depth. The juxtaposition of a concealed sorrow beneath a seemingly brilliant grin evokes a profound sense of melancholy. The atmosphere, rhythm, vivid imagery, and carefully chosen words in the poem all work together to create a sublime and profoundly powerful masterpiece. The anguish of isolation is depicted masterfully, with lyrics expressing a wide spectrum of emotions. May you be blessed. Splendid year 2024

Evelyn Judy Buehler December 30, 2023 at 2:06 PM This poem is an awesome contest contender, with its beauty and raw emotion, Vijay. So sad when a smile covers sadness. This is a fave for me. Best wishes for a win. :)

Sara Kendrick December 30, 2023 at 5:32 AM Reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Joseph P. DiMino December 29, 2023 at 4:20 AM "Strumming rhythms of joyful heart Choreographing slow grooves In graceful, musical moves" Lovely, enchanting poetry. This poem makes me feel young again, reminded of dance and righteous singing...and the not so pleasant hangovers...therefore older I feel but wiser. The heartache of isolation. You cover the gantlet of emotions with this one. Great writing! Blessings my friend. Have a Very Happy New Year.

William Kelii Kekaula December 28, 2023 at 1:53 AM Oh, Vijay, yours will surely make a joyful noise with the contest 'quiet' sponsor, I'm sure of it. A brilliant teasing that startles a lulled envisioning. Tour-de-France mon ami, at midway the racecars are crashing. Methinks they took the wrong turn at the vineyards of Chardonnay. Lol, much enjoyed Fave my friend. Aloha, William Vijay Pandit December 29, 2023 at 11:47 AM You are so very kind, my friend. Much appreciate your insights and certainly your FAVE. Many thanks, William.

Suzanne Delaney December 27, 2023 at 6:53 PM This paints a captivating picture of an entertainer. Sometimes we forget the human inside the glitz and how they have to act and perform the same thing over and over. Excellent entry for the contest. SuZ Vijay Pandit December 29, 2023 at 11:45 AM Many thanks SuZ--much appreciate.

Janice Canerdy December 27, 2023 at 3:51 PM Vijay, this vivid description of a tortured lady yearning to escape her circumstances is so moving. Janice Vijay Pandit December 29, 2023 at 11:45 AM Much appreciate your visit, Janice--many thanks.

Andrea Dietrich December 27, 2023 at 9:56 AM Reminds me of the girls in the guilded cages that were sung about in late 1800's. Great job with this challenge. Vijay Pandit December 29, 2023 at 11:44 AM Thank you Andrea--much appreciate.

Daniel Henry Rodgers December 27, 2023 at 8:28 AM Vijay, your poem is a captivating plethora of sensuality and hidden sorrows. It dances with enchantment, portraying a costumed display of art that strums the strings of a joyful heart. The skilled moves, painted with passion, tell a story of love and dreams. Yet, your keen observations reveal a poignant duality—beneath the dance, a tearless cry and anguished soul. We cheer for her liberation from a cage of illusions, a journey away from inebriated realms towards a destiny less ill-fated. -Daniel Vijay Pandit December 29, 2023 at 11:44 AM Much appreciate your visit and comments, Daniel. Many thanks for your kind remarks.

Brandy Nicole December 26, 2023 at 7:24 PM ' She longs to leave this cage, cheer for her to turn the page. ' Yes, even the strong stand behind words that glitter, in order to hide the pain. Sometimes, opening another chapter, turning the page, helps in many ways. Your thoughts are deep and powerful, yet, there's hope within. My best to you, Vijay. Hugs, Brandy Vijay Pandit December 27, 2023 at 9:15 AM Yes--turning the page helps. Your thoughts always resonate with me my friend. Much appreciate, Brandy. Many thanks. Hugs to you as well.

The Situation December 26, 2023 at 6:17 PM I knew when I saw the name it would be something I'd enjoy. I love the rhyming NOT the story telling. Good work. Vijay Pandit December 27, 2023 at 9:14 AM Thank you for stopping by. Much appreciate--many thanks.

Bill Baker December 26, 2023 at 5:33 PM Excellent entry for the contest, Vijay. Well written to form and you've woven your usual wisdom into the layers within your words. It reminds me of an old song, "Katy's Clown" the story of my teen years. Everyone wanted me at their party because I was outgoing, entertaining, and fun; but always went home alone. Sad but true. The dancer smiles, it's their job. Behind the mask is often pain and sadness. Good luck in the contest, my friend. Bill Oops! I forgot to mention, a FAV for my list. Vijay Pandit December 27, 2023 at 9:13 AM Not familiar with the song, but I will look it up. Always went home alone--that tugs the heart, my friend. Somehow I think of you as the heart of the party. Much appreciate your kindness and goodwill, Bill. I appreciate your insights, my friend--and of course your FAVE. Many thanks.

Judy Ball December 26, 2023 at 3:38 PM Hmmmmm Sounds like an exotic dancer who wants to find a better job. Nicely done. You encourage the reader to walk a mile in her shoes before judging. Well done. God Bless, JB Vijay Pandit December 27, 2023 at 9:07 AM Yes indeed! Thank you Judy--much appreciate your visit and comments.

Mystic Rose Rose December 26, 2023 at 3:00 PM This is very well done Vijay, you excel in many forms gl with this one Vijay Pandit December 27, 2023 at 9:06 AM Thank you my friend. Much appreciate your visit, Vienna.

Tom Cunningham December 26, 2023 at 10:21 AM Sadly many find themselves in this 'cage' seeing it as the only way to survive but longing for an alternative. Best of luck in the contest Vijay. Tom Vijay Pandit December 26, 2023 at 12:38 PM Yes indeed--they feel trapped. I wanted to offer a glimmer of hope in the ending lines. Much appreciate, Tom. Many thanks.

Jay Narain December 26, 2023 at 9:38 AM Nice poem. Realistic description of an entertainer. Vijay Pandit December 26, 2023 at 12:36 PM Thank you Jay--much appreciate.

Richard Lamoureux December 26, 2023 at 8:47 AM I’m not familiar with the form but I like the result. Well done, good luck in the contest. Vijay Pandit December 26, 2023 at 12:36 PM So kind of you, Richard. Much appreciate you stopping by. Many thanks.

Heidi Sands December 26, 2023 at 8:45 AM This is an excellent rhyme. The lines, but look closely, watch her sigh, hear the bawl of tearless cry ...wow ..it grips me in the turn of the poem. Well done :) Vijay Pandit December 26, 2023 at 12:35 PM Glad you liked the poem, my friend. Much appreciate your supportive comments, as always, Heidi. Many thanks for being there.

Hiya Sharma December 26, 2023 at 4:44 AM Oh my, this is a poignant and soul stirring write with vivid hues of evocative emotions, melancholic atmosphere and sombre wordplay just us the second part began.. The first part is so full of mystical imageries, describing her glory with utmost fascination.. But all the shimmers turned to ashes as the anguish behind her smile reflected in those words... That's heart-aching.. How she longs to fly away from this cage and spread her wings..That ending really hits hard and is so powerful..Love this Vijay Pandit December 26, 2023 at 12:34 PM I am in debt of your generous feedback, Hiya. Your kindness resonates in every word. Much appreciate your visit and your FAVE--so special coming from a gifted poet! Many thanks. Hiya Sharma December 26, 2023 at 4:45 AM A FAV for me.. deeply resonating!

Ink Empress December 26, 2023 at 4:41 AM Whoa! I am in awe of your ability to rhyme in such an effortless manner dear vijay! Ah you’ve done this form so well in a theme that silent one would really love. I am loving the flow of this and the depth of your lines throughout too, especially “ Choreographing slow grooves In graceful, musical moves“ so exquisite and so captivating. “ As smiles aesthetic hide pain And feigned visage cries disdain“ the depth in those lines truly is impeccable and so soul stirring’ and the ending resonates.FAVE Vijay Pandit December 26, 2023 at 12:29 PM So wonderful to hear that from you, my friend. You amaze me with your goodwill thoughts, as I read your feedback, to so many I visit, here on Soup. Much appreciate your presence on my page, your kind feedback, your FAVE. Many thanks for being there, Ink.