Emptiness Camouflaging Along With Feelings

After a business tour 
I returned to empty home
Wife and kids had been away
enjoying holiday at her mothers home 

Everything was same
TV, Fridge, Oven, Music System 
accepting my operating command as before
bed, sofa, reclining chair all comforting my body

Missing was the vivacious vibrancy  
of laughter, arguments, silence, love and affection
Walls, curtains, photo frames, flower vases staring at me 
Tongue and ears  jobless, eyes doubling up for speech and sound  

No one to offer glass of water or cup of tea
Breakfast awaiting preparation by me, and eaten too
Lunch and Dinner from menu delivered by hotel waiter
Nightime no one to kiss goodbye, bother for next day wishes

Learned, not that uninhabited homes only haunt
Clamour of near and dear ones is what actually counts
Amidst noise decibels we try to squeeze out some solitude
Like fools among living souls we often seek silence of graveyard  
 
Telephone bell rings
wife and kids indicate early arrival
Suddenly the empty home turns into lively fair 
staring walls joyous on early prospect of  baby hands caress  

Emptiness camouflaging along with feelings 
Haunting brick and mortar springing into lively atmosphere 
Hated apartment while alone, fool was I to blame innocent structure
Learnt, futile to be in heaven after leaving, create heaven where one is living 

(Entry for Members Contest – Empty Apartment by Matt Caliri )

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 11/26/2010 11:38:00 PM
That last line summed this wonderful poem perfectly, Hitendra--beautiful thoughts you've put into Matt's challenge :)-- wish you the best in the contest --nikko :)
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Date: 11/26/2010 11:11:00 AM
This is truly an outstanding entry for the contest, Hitendra. Coming home to an empty place isn't fun. I've gotten used to it over the years. But I love the way your heart soars with happiness when you learn your family is coming home early. I hope to see your poem in the winners' circle! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/25/2010 10:14:00 PM
that last part really sums it up, Hitendra. Create Heaven where one is living. I hope you will always do that for your wonderful family. They sound awesome from your vivid description given in this poem. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 11/25/2010 8:40:00 AM
This is so wonderful I can hardly describe the joy in reading it Hitendra.. a lovely expression of the value of family and the emptiness of that home without their presence..good luck in the contest..this one is sure to please Matt to a top spot ..luv.. H.T. Day to u..
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Date: 11/25/2010 5:47:00 AM
Good write for the contest...your words are foeme perfect...always Michael
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Date: 11/25/2010 3:51:00 AM
Excellent read and an excellent entry for the contest. Best wishes
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Date: 11/25/2010 3:36:00 AM
Written with creativity and expressiveness..Reads like a winners' circle work..Thanks for letting me know that I placed in the Halloween contest..Sara
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