Emptiness

When we met you literally swept me off my feet, You were a pleasant surprise and a treasured gift. I felt in my heart of hearts that we were destined to meet. But just like the season’s change so did our relationship. You went from a loving man to a narcissist very fast. The only person that you truly loved was yourself alone. Our story won’t have a good ending and it will not last. As I lay next to you I feel so broken and utter emptiness. Contest: E Words Challenge Sponsor: Constance La France 02/11/2023

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Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 3/26/2023 6:06:00 AM

Alexis, this is quite sad but it's written with good imagery and insightfulness too. Blessings,Gordon

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 3/26/2023 5:32:00 AM

This is so sad because I instinctively feel that you are a loving giving person and always will be, not like the selfish man who used his pretense on you and beguiled you into thinking that he was a someone who loved you, who was not in reality who you had accepted into your heart and life, and subsequently broke your heart and had to face up to who he really was, a narcissist. Very well penned Alexis, my life long friend. Hugs and love Jennifer.

Alexis Y.
Date: 3/27/2023 11:50:00 AM

Hi Jenny, I appreciate you stopping by to leave such a heartfelt comment. When I saw that he was a narcissist, I eventually moved on. He couldn't love because he was only in love with himself. I will visit you soon my dear friend from across the pond. Hugs and love to you too;-) Alexis

Joanna Daniel

Date: 3/23/2023 7:09:00 AM

Hi Alexis, this is a haunting poem, hope you are doing well, long time, no see:)

Alexis Y.
Date: 3/23/2023 7:54:00 AM

Hi Jo, I appreciate that you stopped by. I am doing well. Thanks for asking. How are you doing? I hope you are doing well as well. Have a nice day:-) Alexis

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 2/12/2023 12:37:00 PM

A lovely yet sad write. Good Luck. Have a blessed day writing away......................

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/11/2023 9:11:00 AM

From a delightful beginning to emptiness --some relationships go from bloom to decay. Lovely poem, Alexis.

Stephan McBride

Date: 2/11/2023 8:04:00 AM

Christ spirit is the only true marriage which can fill one with love and mold one into a new living being , to become the man or woman which God wants us to be, to start seeking treasures within and not from worldly things, then we have this love within which we wish all would seek.but I can see this world in a whole rejects this as did I before Christ showed me different: ) May God bless, comfort, guide and fill you with His peace, love, spirit and joy in abundance: )

Alexis Y.
Date: 3/23/2023 7:52:00 AM

Hi Stephan, I agree with your comment. Thanks for stoping by and leaving such a comment. Have a nice day:-) Alexis