Emotional Shrapnel

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5/6/2025 for Emotional Shrapnel Poetry Contest sponsored by Sara Jama

Pile Up
self-perceived failure, blame
guilt, disappointment, shame

Pressure
unexpressed, unfulfilled needs
expectations nobody heeds

Perilous Pitch
consider this - you are much bigger
someone small can be the trigger

Pyrotechnics
An explosion, shrapnel sent
wounds the nearby innocent

Peace at Last
great, now you have relief
you now have peace, however brief

Pain
shrapnel cuts deep, like a knife
imbeds itself, there's pain for life

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Sara Jama

Date: 5/17/2025 5:46:00 PM

Congratulations on placing in my contest. I enjoyed your unique take on my prompt. I like the brief shortened stanzas that each have a deep impact. Pyrotechnics and Pain were my favourite stanzas. Thank you for writing.

David Crandall
Date: 5/18/2025 10:39:00 AM

Thanks Sara, thanks for having the contest - I enjoyed it!

Crystol Woods

Date: 5/13/2025 4:27:00 AM

I like the metaphor here... it's so true, that heartbreak is like shrapnel... never fully healed and causing pain even as it tries. Wonderfully emotional piece! Xo

David Crandall
Date: 5/13/2025 8:20:00 AM

Thanks Crystol!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/7/2025 5:44:00 PM

weaving these slices of life experiences into one mantle of imagery is defining...very nice, david

David Crandall
Date: 5/7/2025 7:41:00 PM

Thanks Nette!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/6/2025 7:54:00 PM

You chose a very creative and unique approach to this one. Third , fourth and last verse were my favorites.

David Crandall
Date: 5/7/2025 3:01:00 PM

Thanks Andrea!