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5/6/2025 for Emotional Shrapnel Poetry Contest sponsored by Sara Jama

Pile Up self-perceived failure, blame guilt, disappointment, shame Pressure unexpressed, unfulfilled needs expectations nobody heeds Perilous Pitch consider this - you are much bigger someone small can be the trigger Pyrotechnics An explosion, shrapnel sent wounds the nearby innocent Peace at Last great, now you have relief you now have peace, however brief Pain shrapnel cuts deep, like a knife imbeds itself, there's pain for life

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Date: 5/17/2025 5:46:00 PM
Congratulations on placing in my contest. I enjoyed your unique take on my prompt. I like the brief shortened stanzas that each have a deep impact. Pyrotechnics and Pain were my favourite stanzas. Thank you for writing.
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David Crandall
Date: 5/18/2025 10:39:00 AM
Thanks Sara, thanks for having the contest - I enjoyed it!
Date: 5/13/2025 4:27:00 AM
I like the metaphor here... it's so true, that heartbreak is like shrapnel... never fully healed and causing pain even as it tries. Wonderfully emotional piece! Xo
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David Crandall
Date: 5/13/2025 8:20:00 AM
Thanks Crystol!
Date: 5/7/2025 5:44:00 PM
weaving these slices of life experiences into one mantle of imagery is defining...very nice, david
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David Crandall
Date: 5/7/2025 7:41:00 PM
Thanks Nette!
Date: 5/6/2025 7:54:00 PM
You chose a very creative and unique approach to this one. Third , fourth and last verse were my favorites.
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David Crandall
Date: 5/7/2025 3:01:00 PM
Thanks Andrea!

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