Embers Burned to Ash

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"Good morning," she softly whispered, thinking he'd spoken at her side. Then, Truly closed her eyes hoping to dream of him again. Sleep refused her desire to return to him in his rose garden. She tossed and turned, reached for the pillow that should be cradling his head. Frustrated, Truly rose and sat on the cold hearth, stirring embers to give life to the fire. Staring into the flames, she recalled his affectionate words as he held her hand when they'd walked in the snow. She tried to hold her tears in check, but her emotions would not be denied. Moonlight shown on her through the window, but she refused to look at it, for it only brought back memories of what they'd once shared. snowflakes in the night stirred memories in her heart ~ embers burned to ash

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Daniel Caplin

Date: 5/13/2025 1:36:00 PM

As always Lin, so beautifully written and heartfelt, a reality in your dreams until you wake, and the sadness of realising it's what your heart craves, desires and misses, sleep refuses you the one place you Truly want to be, it's a heartbreaking reality for so many of us and a fave for me also. Danny

Lin Lane
Date: 5/13/2025 1:44:00 PM

Another wound to the heart, another tear falls down a cheek, another snow globe cracked. Hearts can be greedy and want what they have no claim to. Thank you for seeing through Truly's eyes, Danny.

Jan Allison

Date: 5/13/2025 1:30:00 PM

such a romantic piece Lin, I can feel the longing in Truly's heart. I got a lump in my throat reading the final 3 lines! hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 5/13/2025 1:42:00 PM

Those were the easiest to write... I felt them. Thank you, Jan.

Ink Empress

Date: 5/13/2025 8:21:00 AM

This is such an evocative and heartfelt haibun! I love the softness and elegance that flows throughout your well woven lines! And the haiku at the end is so touching and soul stirring! Its a beautiful line youv started your haibun with “ Good morning," she softly whispered, thinking he'd spoken at her side. Then, Truly closed her eyes hoping to dream of him again” iv had those moments! Such a romantic and one that flows with timeless love! Pleasure reading! Sending you light always dear linnersz

Lin Lane
Date: 5/13/2025 11:29:00 AM

Dear Ink, your appreciation of this writing is important to me. Thank you for feeling what I felt when creating these lines... the grieving for what once was beautiful.

John Lawless

Date: 5/13/2025 5:13:00 AM

a softly sad Haibun, garnished with a very poignant haiku. Beautifully written Lin, had me sniffing back an emotion. I shall add this to my FAVES...

Lin Lane
Date: 5/13/2025 5:32:00 AM

Thank you very much for the sniffing, the kind comments and the fave. I appreciate your thoughts, as ever, John.