Paul Callus Poet Verse

Embers and Snowflakes

The flames had long died down
But embers lingered on
Till persistent snowflakes fell
And the last remnants of hope
Slowly fizzled out.

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Contest: A January Stunner
Sponsor: Line Gauthier
Placed 3rd

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Angela Crabtree January 26, 2021 at 2:22 PM A lot of images in your words, Paul. Wonderful poem :)

L. J. Carber March 18, 2018 at 10:10 AM This is quite lovely, in its unrequited sadness-- the symbolism made me think of long ago loves that were lost (owing to my own failures usually.) Paul Callus March 18, 2018 at 3:11 PM Thank you for your lovely and candid comments, L.J. Pleased to make your acquaintance. Regards // paul

Gregory Richard Barden March 18, 2018 at 3:02 AM Heartfelt congratulations on your well-deserved win, Paul - blessings and best wishes to you, friend! :-) Paul Callus March 18, 2018 at 8:46 AM Your congrats are most welcome, Greg:) Thank you and best regards // paul

Eve Roper March 17, 2018 at 7:05 PM Paul,well done and enjoyed reading.. Congratulations on your win! Hugs ~`* Paul Callus March 18, 2018 at 8:46 AM Thank you, Eve. Wishing you a blessed Sunday:) Hugs // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen March 17, 2018 at 2:09 PM - Congratulations on your winning poem, Paul :) - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus March 17, 2018 at 3:24 PM Many thanks, Anne-Lise:) May you too have a lovely weekend:) Hugs // paul

Line Gauthier March 17, 2018 at 10:06 AM A short and sweet poem dense with imagery and emotion. Well done, Paul. Congrats. Paul Callus March 17, 2018 at 3:23 PM So pleased that you liked it, Line:) Thank you! Have a lovely weekend. Regards // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu January 30, 2018 at 5:31 PM Hello Paul, this poem is beautifully written. I can see the flames slowly dying out as I read this poem.Regards Darlene De Beaulieu. Paul Callus January 31, 2018 at 3:33 PM Thank you for reading and enjoying, Darlene. Regards // paul

Sneha Rv January 30, 2018 at 10:03 AM How meaningful in just five lines, it is also beautiful in the literal sense :) I wish this had placed, but it is nice that it is among best new poems :) Paul Callus January 31, 2018 at 3:32 PM Thank you, Sneha...love your honest comments:) Best regards // paul

Eileen Manassian January 28, 2018 at 1:04 AM I think it's stupendous. I wonder how you did with this sponsor. I had no luck on the Klimt contest. Hugs, dear. Paul Callus January 28, 2018 at 11:59 AM Thank you dear Eileen. Pleased to have you stopping by. With some sponsors I have no luck, but at least I make use of their inspiration! Hugs // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser January 24, 2018 at 2:12 AM creatively poignant in thought Paul.. =') trying to write again though, thanks for the drop by! smiles and hugs! ~olive_eloi Paul Callus January 24, 2018 at 1:32 PM Thank you for stopping by, Olive_eloi :) It's been a long time...and you have been missed! This poem was inspired by a friend who was having problems in her love relationship....Keep well. Hugs & smiles // paul

Richard Lamoureux January 16, 2018 at 4:31 PM Sorry the spark didn't ignite. I too have had a lack of ignition in several contests of late. Either way I personally am a fan of your piece. Paul Callus January 18, 2018 at 3:52 PM No problem, Richard; tastes differ, and that is something positive. Thank you for coming back with words of encouragement. Regards // paul

Keith O.J. Hunt January 13, 2018 at 3:38 PM Only one poet could paint a picture this way --- Paul Callus. Just brilliant Paul;-) Paul Callus January 16, 2018 at 1:41 PM You are too kind, Keith! Thank you! Best regards // paul

Jack Horne January 13, 2018 at 2:16 PM this is such a clever write - love it Paul Callus January 16, 2018 at 1:36 PM Thank you, Jack. Hope you're keeping well and active, my friend. Regards // paul

Sara Kendrick January 12, 2018 at 2:16 PM Wow!! At least a double meaning within these lines..Great work..Reads like winning material to me..Sara Paul Callus January 16, 2018 at 1:34 PM Thank you for the 'wow' and the rest of the comments, Sara. A pleasure to have you stopping by. Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud January 12, 2018 at 10:25 AM such a sensitive, pensive writes so remarkably quilled, paul... short but eich in meaning.. huggs Paul Callus January 16, 2018 at 1:28 PM Thank you, Nette...I love your rich comments:) Hugs // paul Nette Onclaud January 12, 2018 at 10:25 AM * rich in meaning*

Harry Horsman January 11, 2018 at 5:07 PM Love this Paul, kind of reminds me, how life could end.... Paul Callus January 16, 2018 at 1:20 PM Thank you, Harry; your version is also plausible. Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux January 11, 2018 at 10:06 AM A clever and poignant write. I believe this will spark Anthony’s interest. Good luck in the contest. Paul Callus January 16, 2018 at 1:10 PM Thank you, Richard. Unfortunately that spark never materialized:) Regards // paul

Poet Destroyer A January 9, 2018 at 10:58 PM Hello Paul, i will always enjoy your poems, :) a deep write ..... the painting of an open SNOWFLAKE, ready to end a burning desire of what was. You have such of way, of painting a saddening end. Always a pleasure to read. Linda Paul Callus January 11, 2018 at 9:51 AM Welcome back, Linda:) The silence has been deafening!! Thank you for stopping by with awesome comments. Hope life is treating you well:) Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich January 7, 2018 at 6:41 PM This was really nice, Paul. I did not even make an effort for this particular contest! I have not ever won with that judge. Paul Callus January 8, 2018 at 7:49 AM Thank you, Andrea. As to the judge, I did get a 12th and an HM :) Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen January 7, 2018 at 2:17 PM - Excellent completed poem Paul, I enjoy reading it - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus January 7, 2018 at 2:58 PM Hi Anne-Lise:) Thank you for reading and commenting so positively. Hope you have enjoyed your weekend. Hugs // paul

Maria Williams January 7, 2018 at 3:50 AM You articulated the ebbing romance to the final demise of love with so much finesse and brought the complete picture in only such a few lines. All the best for the contest - I'm going to FAVE this too...Maria Paul Callus January 7, 2018 at 2:56 PM Many thanks for the lovely feedback and the fav, Maria. I thought I'd come across all your visits today, but this proves me wrong:) So, a double 'thank you' is in order! ~ Best regards // paul

Chris Hagy January 6, 2018 at 8:24 PM So beautiful and deep Paul... it is sad when hope fizzles out :(... and sometimes it is replaced with new hope :) Have a great day :) Paul Callus January 7, 2018 at 2:45 PM After having read your latest poem and the short info about your book "The private wars" I can see added sense in your comment above. Thank you for stopping by, Chris. Warm regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong January 6, 2018 at 7:11 PM Oh Paul, you have the ability to impress with such few words. I think that is why you are such a master at haiku. This is awesome! : ) Paul Callus January 7, 2018 at 1:45 PM You are so very kind, Connie:) Thank you. Debbie started me on the short forms, and I'm still learning. Regards // paul

Elaine George January 6, 2018 at 10:28 AM What a beautiful and vivid image you paint with these words, Paul. Thank you for sharing. Sincerely, Elaine Paul Callus January 7, 2018 at 1:25 PM Thank you, Elaine. A pleasure to see your name adorn my page:) Kind regards // paul

Silent One January 6, 2018 at 9:59 AM You always say so much with so little words.. you know how to pack a punch, thats a great cliche for you lol Paul Callus January 7, 2018 at 1:18 PM Thank you, S-1. Talking of clichés, your contest filled up too quickly! Regards // paul

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