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Embers and Snowflakes

The flames had long died down
But embers lingered on
Till persistent snowflakes fell
And the last remnants of hope
Slowly fizzled out.

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Contest: A January Stunner
Sponsor: Line Gauthier
Placed 3rd

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Angela Crabtree Date: 1/26/2021 2:22:00 PM A lot of images in your words, Paul. Wonderful poem :) Login to Reply

L. J. Carber Date: 3/18/2018 10:10:00 AM This is quite lovely, in its unrequited sadness-- the symbolism made me think of long ago loves that were lost (owing to my own failures usually.) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2018 3:11:00 PM Thank you for your lovely and candid comments, L.J. Pleased to make your acquaintance. Regards // paul

Gregory Richard Barden Date: 3/18/2018 3:02:00 AM Heartfelt congratulations on your well-deserved win, Paul - blessings and best wishes to you, friend! :-) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2018 8:46:00 AM Your congrats are most welcome, Greg:) Thank you and best regards // paul

Eve Roper Date: 3/17/2018 7:05:00 PM Paul,well done and enjoyed reading.. Congratulations on your win! Hugs ~`* Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2018 8:46:00 AM Thank you, Eve. Wishing you a blessed Sunday:) Hugs // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 3/17/2018 2:09:00 PM - Congratulations on your winning poem, Paul :) - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/17/2018 3:24:00 PM Many thanks, Anne-Lise:) May you too have a lovely weekend:) Hugs // paul

Line Gauthier Date: 3/17/2018 10:06:00 AM A short and sweet poem dense with imagery and emotion. Well done, Paul. Congrats. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/17/2018 3:23:00 PM So pleased that you liked it, Line:) Thank you! Have a lovely weekend. Regards // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 1/30/2018 5:31:00 PM Hello Paul, this poem is beautifully written. I can see the flames slowly dying out as I read this poem.Regards Darlene De Beaulieu. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/31/2018 3:33:00 PM Thank you for reading and enjoying, Darlene. Regards // paul

Sneha Rv Date: 1/30/2018 10:03:00 AM How meaningful in just five lines, it is also beautiful in the literal sense :) I wish this had placed, but it is nice that it is among best new poems :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/31/2018 3:32:00 PM Thank you, Sneha...love your honest comments:) Best regards // paul

Eileen Manassian Date: 1/28/2018 1:04:00 AM I think it's stupendous. I wonder how you did with this sponsor. I had no luck on the Klimt contest. Hugs, dear. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/28/2018 11:59:00 AM Thank you dear Eileen. Pleased to have you stopping by. With some sponsors I have no luck, but at least I make use of their inspiration! Hugs // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 1/24/2018 2:12:00 AM creatively poignant in thought Paul.. =') trying to write again though, thanks for the drop by! smiles and hugs! ~olive_eloi Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/24/2018 1:32:00 PM Thank you for stopping by, Olive_eloi :) It's been a long time...and you have been missed! This poem was inspired by a friend who was having problems in her love relationship....Keep well. Hugs & smiles // paul

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/16/2018 4:31:00 PM Sorry the spark didn't ignite. I too have had a lack of ignition in several contests of late. Either way I personally am a fan of your piece. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/18/2018 3:52:00 PM No problem, Richard; tastes differ, and that is something positive. Thank you for coming back with words of encouragement. Regards // paul

Keith O.J. Hunt Date: 1/13/2018 3:38:00 PM Only one poet could paint a picture this way --- Paul Callus. Just brilliant Paul;-) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/16/2018 1:41:00 PM You are too kind, Keith! Thank you! Best regards // paul

Jack Horne Date: 1/13/2018 2:16:00 PM this is such a clever write - love it Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/16/2018 1:36:00 PM Thank you, Jack. Hope you're keeping well and active, my friend. Regards // paul

Sara Kendrick Date: 1/12/2018 2:16:00 PM Wow!! At least a double meaning within these lines..Great work..Reads like winning material to me..Sara Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/16/2018 1:34:00 PM Thank you for the 'wow' and the rest of the comments, Sara. A pleasure to have you stopping by. Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud Date: 1/12/2018 10:25:00 AM such a sensitive, pensive writes so remarkably quilled, paul... short but eich in meaning.. huggs Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/16/2018 1:28:00 PM Thank you, Nette...I love your rich comments:) Hugs // paul Nette Onclaud Date: 1/12/2018 10:25:00 AM * rich in meaning*

Harry Horsman Date: 1/11/2018 5:07:00 PM Love this Paul, kind of reminds me, how life could end.... Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/16/2018 1:20:00 PM Thank you, Harry; your version is also plausible. Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/11/2018 10:06:00 AM A clever and poignant write. I believe this will spark Anthony’s interest. Good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/16/2018 1:10:00 PM Thank you, Richard. Unfortunately that spark never materialized:) Regards // paul

Poet Destroyer A Date: 1/9/2018 10:58:00 PM Hello Paul, i will always enjoy your poems, :) a deep write ..... the painting of an open SNOWFLAKE, ready to end a burning desire of what was. You have such of way, of painting a saddening end. Always a pleasure to read. Linda Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/11/2018 9:51:00 AM Welcome back, Linda:) The silence has been deafening!! Thank you for stopping by with awesome comments. Hope life is treating you well:) Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/7/2018 6:41:00 PM This was really nice, Paul. I did not even make an effort for this particular contest! I have not ever won with that judge. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/8/2018 7:49:00 AM Thank you, Andrea. As to the judge, I did get a 12th and an HM :) Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 1/7/2018 2:17:00 PM - Excellent completed poem Paul, I enjoy reading it - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/7/2018 2:58:00 PM Hi Anne-Lise:) Thank you for reading and commenting so positively. Hope you have enjoyed your weekend. Hugs // paul

Maria Williams Date: 1/7/2018 3:50:00 AM You articulated the ebbing romance to the final demise of love with so much finesse and brought the complete picture in only such a few lines. All the best for the contest - I'm going to FAVE this too...Maria Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/7/2018 2:56:00 PM Many thanks for the lovely feedback and the fav, Maria. I thought I'd come across all your visits today, but this proves me wrong:) So, a double 'thank you' is in order! ~ Best regards // paul

Chris Hagy Date: 1/6/2018 8:24:00 PM So beautiful and deep Paul... it is sad when hope fizzles out :(... and sometimes it is replaced with new hope :) Have a great day :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/7/2018 2:45:00 PM After having read your latest poem and the short info about your book "The private wars" I can see added sense in your comment above. Thank you for stopping by, Chris. Warm regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 1/6/2018 7:11:00 PM Oh Paul, you have the ability to impress with such few words. I think that is why you are such a master at haiku. This is awesome! : ) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/7/2018 1:45:00 PM You are so very kind, Connie:) Thank you. Debbie started me on the short forms, and I'm still learning. Regards // paul

Elaine George Date: 1/6/2018 10:28:00 AM What a beautiful and vivid image you paint with these words, Paul. Thank you for sharing. Sincerely, Elaine Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/7/2018 1:25:00 PM Thank you, Elaine. A pleasure to see your name adorn my page:) Kind regards // paul

Silent One Date: 1/6/2018 9:59:00 AM You always say so much with so little words.. you know how to pack a punch, thats a great cliche for you lol Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/7/2018 1:18:00 PM Thank you, S-1. Talking of clichés, your contest filled up too quickly! Regards // paul

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