Elegy

Death has the victory today
My love is carried away
Breath is no longer his stay
My sorrow is deep like the sky
Loss is deep festering wound this way

My precious love took my heart
Now I will make a new start
Half existing, vision swimming

to be completed...
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Knop Avatar
August 14, 2010 at 4:41 AM
Well written start, Doris! When will you finish the write? Wish you a nice weekend and thank you for your ongoing kind comments!...Gert
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August 13, 2010 at 6:20 PM
You're off to a great start, Doris. Please let me know when it's finished! Love, Carolyn
A  Avatar
August 13, 2010 at 6:03 PM
An enjoyemment so far, DORIS! lv~SKAT
Chachere Avatar
August 13, 2010 at 4:37 PM
sad, almost as if someone would go that way, because they don't know any where else to go. but to wait for it all to be over ~Always&Forever Lynette
Brown Avatar
August 13, 2010 at 9:21 AM
Another day of reading the many diverse poems here at the Soup. I enjoyed reading yours today Doris. Have a wonderful weekend. I need to see if I can find some inspiration this weekend. Love, Carol
A   Avatar
August 12, 2010 at 9:42 PM
Like your mom I will wait for the finish my self. have a nice one Doris,..p.d.
Mehta Avatar
August 12, 2010 at 9:01 PM
Thanks for supporting my contest, Doris
Freeman Avatar
August 12, 2010 at 8:01 PM
Cool Elegy Doris, I just have not gotten into one yet. I may try one later, it contest is still open. Agape, Moses
Sweetheart Avatar
August 12, 2010 at 4:13 PM
OH ..my entry is "Metamorphosis" ...it was written by me as part of the eulogy when my Mom died last Thanksgiving Day ...
Sweetheart Avatar
August 12, 2010 at 4:12 PM
So far it reads like a winner Doris... great opening verse ..good luck in the contest and let me know when completed so I can return to read..luv..
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August 12, 2010 at 3:52 PM
Looking forward to the finish..Mom
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