Elegy

Death has the victory today
My love is carried away
Breath is no longer his stay
My sorrow is deep like the sky
Loss is deep festering wound this way

My precious love took my heart
Now I will make a new start
Half existing, vision swimming

to be completed...
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 8/14/2010 4:41:00 AM
Well written start, Doris! When will you finish the write? Wish you a nice weekend and thank you for your ongoing kind comments!...Gert
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Date: 8/13/2010 6:20:00 PM
You're off to a great start, Doris. Please let me know when it's finished! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 8/13/2010 6:03:00 PM
An enjoyemment so far, DORIS! lv~SKAT
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Date: 8/13/2010 4:37:00 PM
sad, almost as if someone would go that way, because they don't know any where else to go. but to wait for it all to be over ~Always&Forever Lynette
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Date: 8/13/2010 9:21:00 AM
Another day of reading the many diverse poems here at the Soup. I enjoyed reading yours today Doris. Have a wonderful weekend. I need to see if I can find some inspiration this weekend. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/12/2010 9:42:00 PM
Like your mom I will wait for the finish my self. have a nice one Doris,..p.d.
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Date: 8/12/2010 9:01:00 PM
Thanks for supporting my contest, Doris
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Date: 8/12/2010 8:01:00 PM
Cool Elegy Doris, I just have not gotten into one yet. I may try one later, it contest is still open. Agape, Moses
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Date: 8/12/2010 4:13:00 PM
OH ..my entry is "Metamorphosis" ...it was written by me as part of the eulogy when my Mom died last Thanksgiving Day ...
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Date: 8/12/2010 4:12:00 PM
So far it reads like a winner Doris... great opening verse ..good luck in the contest and let me know when completed so I can return to read..luv..
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Date: 8/12/2010 3:52:00 PM
Looking forward to the finish..Mom
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