Eight Word Challenge- Losses of My Life

Looking outside my sill at the stardust waiting to fall,
   I see Cashmere, my ivory horse, ready to leave the stall.   
I remember the days when simplicity was all I knew, 
   when I would consider my good intentions in all I say and do. 
      For there is no greater love than the love I had with you. 

      Emptiness fills my essence and days no longer bring joy, 
   and to know it all started with the loss of our little boy. 
I can’t find relief knowing I brought you such pain,
   filled my soul with the damage of anger and disdain. 
     Now only engravings of sadness seem to remain. 

     We were building a future filled with happy reminiscing,
   now your gentle embrace is all I seem to be missing. 
As I consider why you left I see now I was at fault,
   and can comprehend why your adoration came to a halt. 
        In between the warmth and cold I was definitely caught. 

     I knew no boundaries with my anguish and woe, 
   and caused you such misery making it hard to let go. 
I now see atonement for me will not be obtained, 
  I know why your fondness diminished and refrained. 
     The ceasing of gratitude; no respect can be contained. 

     
     Please forgive me with sympathy, so very sorry am I, 
     I just can’t get over these losses no matter how hard I try. 


Eight Word Challenge Poetry Contest
Robert Haigh
March 1, 2018
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Roper Avatar
March 15, 2018 at 9:25 PM
Wonderful imagery in your poem, Laura , and written very well using the required words. Congratulations on your win! Hugs ~`*
Tripp Avatar
March 15, 2018 at 8:14 PM
Congratulations, Laura, on such a touching and emotionally composed write.
Haight Avatar
March 15, 2018 at 7:40 PM
Beautiful and so moving, Laura. Congratulations on your placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
Sinha-Roy Avatar
March 15, 2018 at 1:10 AM
Congratulations, Laura on your win with such a touching poem.
Barden Avatar
March 14, 2018 at 11:46 PM
I so relate to this melancholy and moving write, Luloo - in so many ways. Sincere congratulations on your well-deserved win, - blessings, and keep up the great work, friend! :-)
Wigley Avatar
March 14, 2018 at 9:07 PM
Lovely and very moving, Laura. Congrats! Viv x
Gauthier Avatar
March 14, 2018 at 4:04 PM
Back with well deserved congrats, Laura. Well done.
Poteet Avatar
March 14, 2018 at 2:14 PM
Excellent, Laura. Your 5 line stanzas are rhymed nicely and the ending couplet set off as it is concludes your sadness very well. May I add my accolades to those below for your winning piece.
Leiser Avatar
March 14, 2018 at 1:49 PM
Lovely pen, sad and moving, Laura..congrats:)
Dietrich Avatar
March 1, 2018 at 8:13 PM
It's really cool how you took off with the ivory horse image and turned this into a sad poem of loss, Laura. You are very creative. This is sure to do well in the contest.
Dietrich Avatar
March 1, 2018 at 8:13 PM
thanks for the favorite rhyming poem contest.
Gauthier Avatar
March 1, 2018 at 3:14 PM
I love how your poem starts with "I remember the days when simplicity was all I knew" then unveils the deepest details of a grieving soul. Extremely touching. Well done, Laura.
Scars Avatar
March 1, 2018 at 6:14 PM
thank you sweet Line ;)-luloo
One Avatar
March 1, 2018 at 7:03 AM
You wrote a touching and emotive poem Laura, some great lines in this poem.. I am sure it will do very well..
Scars Avatar
March 1, 2018 at 6:14 PM
many thanks dear friend :)-lulooo
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