Eight Mile Ryme Bubble Bath Battle

Eight Mile Rhyme Bubble Bath Battle

You want to love me don’t you
Why won’t you
My words will soak into you just like I told you
Do you feel my flow?
I’m soft rhyming iridescent sultry slow
I’ll drown you with the sensual letters I know
Feel that bubbling inside of you grow
I love that red glow
you try not to let your pleasure show
even though I can feel you vibrate from head to toe

I’ll listen to what you say
But responding is child play
Your words are duller than bath water grey
Me, I shape shift like kneaded clay
slip slide inside of you every way
Baby try to rapid repeat like me  
let that passionate prose spray
Bubble bounce onto me
Slinky Ricky Rhyme Time’s here to stay

I’m domesticated wild
in the groove dialed
No one’s more intricately freestyled
pushing up against surfaces travertine tiled
Screams overtaking the radio dial
I’ll be far down below near 8 mile
This white rapper is never tongue tied
Sit back and enjoy it for a while
As my textured tongue 
dexterity is applied

That smell you’re smelling 
That isn’t burnt toast 
That’s you having a stroke
It’s not terminal you’re not going to croak
I’m the elixir for things that used to be broke
But them lame words you’ve got
All of them dissipate like smoke
They tickle a bit in my throat
but not enough to cause me to choke
I’m relaxing in this word bath
climatically enjoying my soak
rightly writing every pen stroke

Woman get yourself into my tub
I’m not just playing “Rub a Dub Dub”
What I’ve got is too big to tug
My vocabulary is a drain swirling tornado 
much more potent than any drug
Out from under you I won’t pull the rug
Although my ego is supersized
I ‘m not smug
when the word play is over
I’ll comfort you with a towel and a hug!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Chiri Avatar
August 30, 2019 at 5:17 AM
Hahaha! Oh wow I remember this did! Lol! See had me almost starting to rap! Haha! Wow Rick this takes me back to day when I hangin with Nick and oooo lol let me stop because I was ready to bust out with a flow! Lol! This has me smiling all the way through Rick I really enjoyed this!;)
Lamoureux Avatar
August 30, 2019 at 9:20 AM
Thanks Brenda, this was a fun one to write
Ravidas Avatar
July 4, 2019 at 11:53 AM
These slinky rhymes vibrate from head to toe, and that is why my lips are saying wow) Nicely done, Richard. The word play never ends. J'aime. Congrats, by the way.
Dietrich Avatar
July 5, 2018 at 2:41 PM
I see this was a winner. Congratulations, Richard.
Raven Avatar
July 4, 2018 at 8:55 AM
Hi Richard, back for one of your fun writes. I always enjoyed reading them. Looks like big belated congratulations are for this wonderful piece. It sings on with a quick-fire beat. Love the rap, love the humour. Have a wonderful Wednesday. Your friend always....Mike.
Gentry Avatar
June 24, 2018 at 9:32 AM
Congratulations on your win! :)
Gauthier Avatar
June 24, 2018 at 6:13 AM
That is quite the invitation, Richard. You'll have lineups out your bathroom door. LOL Congrats on your win with this fun poem.
Lamoureux Avatar
June 24, 2018 at 7:48 AM
Thanks Line!
Canerdy Avatar
June 23, 2018 at 7:57 PM
Congratulations on your win, Richard! Janice
Lamoureux Avatar
June 24, 2018 at 7:50 AM
Thanks Janice.
Sietesantos Avatar
June 23, 2018 at 7:01 AM
Swinging back, Richard, with big congratulations on your win! This gets a fave from me! Love it! Hugs. Pandita
Lamoureux Avatar
June 23, 2018 at 8:06 AM
Hi Pandita, it was a fun one to write. I’m pleased you enjoyed it.
Nance Avatar
June 16, 2018 at 6:35 PM
Oh my goodness this made me frickin' smile. i love it. you got some mad skillz my friend x
Lamoureux Avatar
June 16, 2018 at 8:17 PM
Ha ha, thanks!
Hinshaw Avatar
June 8, 2018 at 7:40 PM
Another masterpiece from the Master of Verse - a delightful read! Thx for dropping by the Campfire (Tales) - you are always welcome - Bob
Lamoureux Avatar
June 16, 2018 at 9:06 AM
Thanks Robert.
Williams Avatar
June 6, 2018 at 6:37 AM
Omg I cant stop laughing at Harry's comment, because I was thinking exactly the same about my boring baths. Richard, this up tempo quick beat poem of yours has Winner stamped all over it. Thoroughly enjoyed from beginning to end....Maria hugs
Lamoureux Avatar
June 6, 2018 at 8:43 AM
Your response has brought me a big smile. Thanks for your visits this morning Maria.
Horsman Avatar
June 6, 2018 at 5:03 AM
wow my bath times are not like this, no wonder mine are so boring,,,,brilliant to read and to shout out loud too,
Lamoureux Avatar
June 6, 2018 at 8:45 AM
Ha ha, all you have to do is add bubbles and the right partner.
De Beaulieu Avatar
June 3, 2018 at 6:59 PM
Hello Richard, Wow! This is a super poem. i have read it several times. I have enjoyed this poem. I smiled while reading your poem. have a nice day my friend.
Lamoureux Avatar
June 6, 2018 at 8:47 AM
You as well Darlene, thanks for reading it several times.:0)
Sietesantos Avatar
June 2, 2018 at 10:15 AM
OMG, Richard - I am super impressed - this is such a remarkable rap! A couple years ago, I used to drive my younger son to cypher rap sessions where they did freestyle battles and it was amazing to witness so much talent. You got it, my friend! This is definitely a top winner! Peace out. Pandita
Lamoureux Avatar
June 6, 2018 at 8:48 AM
So sorry I missed this great comment. I’m pleased you enjoyed my playful words.
Riabi Dziri Avatar
May 30, 2018 at 6:53 PM
An adept pen, a great flair for word craft! Clever twists! Amazingly delightful. I enjoyed reading your poem. Thank you for sharing, stay blessed.
Lamoureux Avatar
May 30, 2018 at 7:17 PM
Thanks Besma, just me enjoying a bit of silliness. Blessings to you as well.
Vaso Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 8:57 PM
Hah!!!! Loved this, you had me a bit worried at "Rub a Dub Dub" was hoping there wouldn't be 3 men in that tub! I find this very sweet like a love poem as well!
Lamoureux Avatar
May 30, 2018 at 5:28 PM
Thanks Arthur, only one woman in my tub.;0)
Messina Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 3:07 PM
Who says we can't rap..lol Well done with this humorous write...Best of luck in the contest Richard
Lamoureux Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 4:06 PM
Thanks Charles, I had fun splashing around with this form.
Gentry Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 10:58 AM
Goodness!!! Big sigh... not at all what I expected. Lol. Clever, intriguing word play... rub a dub dub HOT! :)
Lamoureux Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 12:44 PM
;0) thanks Susan.
Manassian Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 8:23 AM
Ummmmmm... Ok. That's quite the word play. I'd delve into that tub without delay... hey hey hey!
Lamoureux Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 8:26 AM
I thought I would take this Rap battle in a slightly different direction.:0)
Malik Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 6:53 AM
Loved it :)
Lamoureux Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 8:32 AM
Thanks Yazmin.
Allison Avatar
May 28, 2018 at 3:28 PM
Fab rap and i love your humour - just going to relax in my bubble bath and see if i get inspired to write but think this contest is beyond me:-) good luck and give your lovely 'mama bear' a HUGE hug from me:-) hugs jan xx
Lamoureux Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 8:23 AM
Thanks, coming from the queen of Comedy that is a great compliment. Thanks for the visit Jan.
Roper Avatar
May 28, 2018 at 3:22 PM
Great rapping Richard, and a little humor... I know I am not even going to attempt this..Thank you so very much for your encouraging compliment on my poem “From Now On”. Hugs Eve
Lamoureux Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 8:24 AM
My pleasure Eve.
George   Avatar
May 28, 2018 at 2:43 PM
Thank you for sharing this delightful poem, Richard. Sure to top the winners list. Elaine
Lamoureux Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 7:54 AM
Ha ha, I hope so. Thanks for the visit.
Dietrich Avatar
May 28, 2018 at 2:32 PM
haha, white wrapper and what you have to tug. Those were just a few that made me chuckle. So well done, Richard. This is one I probably won't even be attempting.
Lamoureux Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 7:49 AM
I’m sure you would do a great job.
Cunningham Avatar
May 28, 2018 at 12:53 PM
You've done a brilliant job of this Richard. You mightn't look like a rapper but boy you can write it. Good luck. Tom
Lamoureux Avatar
May 28, 2018 at 1:11 PM
Thanks Tom, it was a fun one to write.
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