Eclipsed

Sparse lashes span aged lids,
framing an eye that catches light
like the clearest glass.
The softest liquid sheen - of tears?
But the eye stares blankly
without expression. 
No crinkle of joy, no distention of fear,
yet the pupil dilates, eclipsing the iris. 
Snuffing out the moon.
And there, the faintest reflection...
watching, waiting.  
He stares down Death itself
with no sign of fear.

*Inspired by Escher's "Eye"
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 3/25/2013 4:06:00 PM
Well written..Splendid!Congrats on your superb win ,Heather....
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Date: 3/25/2013 2:40:00 PM
wow, when did you post THIS one, Heather? I had never seen it, And it's so well crafted! Also I see that you won a contest with it recently. BIG congrats, sweetie.
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Date: 3/25/2013 10:19:00 AM
Congrats, Heather! I wrote about the eye too, but yours is much better...can I be jealous?..haha
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Date: 3/23/2013 12:29:00 PM
HEATHER, congratulations with your awesome and wonderful poem. Always~ Linda
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Date: 3/22/2013 7:00:00 PM
Simply true! great entry Heather. Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 3/11/2013 8:01:00 PM
Escher... an illusion in an illusion in an illusion Like your work Rick
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Date: 3/8/2013 8:54:00 AM
Heather...another great write! You are so good with words! :) Good luck! The pupil eclipsing the iris...wow!
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Date: 3/8/2013 6:40:00 AM
Nicely done poet. Excellent!!!! Hey you should check out a young poet name Margherita Russo
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Date: 3/7/2013 6:10:00 PM
Wonderful Heather..good luck...
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Date: 3/7/2013 12:43:00 PM
Heather I just love this and Escher, very well done...David
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Date: 3/7/2013 11:03:00 AM
Oh yeah, this is a great one for the contest....Im not sure what to make of it...so I've not written one yet.
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