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Echoes of War

There beneath the dome of ashen sky Nary a hint tonight of her favorite stars And motion above of cumulus clouds Neither does thunder, nor pleads aloud. Restless, voiceless she poignantly recalls Spark that evoked from doting heart As under the olive tree he knelt down, Before his vows got muffled by bombs. There she heard how nothingness sounds: As houses burned, buildings collapsed, Bodies were scattered for miles long In mangled, shattered voices of chaos When vacant disgust muzzled the town-- Neither did anywhere church bells ring Nor did the minarets make prayer calls; Gone were the cries from mother's arms And footsteps of hunger buzzing in shops And heartbeats of lovers strolling for joy And laughs of the youths playing with ball. And there she still lingers in echoes of war-- Why didn't her verses compose a ballad? Why didn't her love strum strings of guitar? And why oh why, so soon did her music stop? August 31, 2019 Placed 1st: Silence poetry contest by Silent One Placed 3rd: Strand choice 8 contest by Brian Strand

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Date: 3/11/2022 6:43:00 AM
When voices of chaos are heard and echoes of war ring louder, all music will stop! Only in peace, love can survive. When the dirge of love sounds, all music will come to a halt ! Powerfully and poignantly delineated.... Vijay!
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Date: 1/28/2020 6:43:00 PM
Vijay here to congratulate you on your win!;)
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Date: 1/28/2020 6:23:00 PM
This is such a great poem, Vijay!:-) Congratulations on your well deserved win!
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Date: 10/4/2019 9:47:00 PM
This was truly exceptional. War is such an overwhelming subject, you handled with pros...full of feeling and emotion easy to understand. Congratulations on your win. you deserve it. I did not know when I picked it to read, it was a WINNER.. so that tells you I loved it all by itself... winner is just extra whipped cream on the cake. Ann
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Date: 9/10/2019 12:17:00 PM
An amazing interpretation of how war really effects people. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 9/10/2019 2:05:00 PM
Thank you, MLK..much appreciate.
Date: 9/7/2019 8:20:00 AM
Congratulations for your great win Vijay :)
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Date: 9/9/2019 9:00:00 AM
Thank you Heidi..much appreciate, as always.
Date: 9/6/2019 10:12:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, this is so poignant-
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Date: 9/6/2019 12:44:00 PM
Thank you Michelle..much appreciate.
Date: 9/6/2019 5:43:00 AM
- Congratulations on your 1st place win, Vijay :) - hugs and happy weekend // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/6/2019 8:38:00 AM
Glad to share the stage with you..much appreciate, Anne-Lise.
Date: 9/5/2019 5:35:00 PM
Congratulations on your deserving win with your heartfelt poem.
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Date: 9/6/2019 8:37:00 AM
Thank you Jeanne--much appreciate.
Date: 9/5/2019 4:32:00 PM
I knew this one would be on top, it was so powerful and realistic...it lingered, congrats my friend on your first place win :) hugs
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Date: 9/6/2019 8:36:00 AM
Much appreciate Sandra...many thanks.
Date: 9/5/2019 3:04:00 PM
Horrific reality of life and you expressed it so vividly.. congratulations on first place in the contest..
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Date: 9/5/2019 4:16:00 PM
So true..much appreciate SO--many thanks.
Date: 9/5/2019 12:51:00 PM
ah such a rude interruption of a proposal. I love your take on the silence theme. Silence in the aftermath. well done dear vijay.
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Date: 9/5/2019 4:16:00 PM
Happy to see you here, Becca. Much appreciate your kind remarks..many thanks.
Date: 9/5/2019 11:10:00 AM
The night is described perfect for the scene, the image of the surrounds so vividly described. There is no voice or music after a war between countries or for that matter in a broken home where there is violence. My husband just cringed when he thought back on the sights of war and the destruction not only the city, but the humans. He hated the time and just couldn’t understand why. Then come to the states and were hated because of what happen overseas. You have created a great canvas , good luck in the contest this will score very high, Vijay.
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Date: 9/5/2019 4:15:00 PM
So very kind of you to write such a detailed comment..much appreciate you visit and kind thoughts. You are so right about the evils of wars. Many thanks, Eve.
Date: 9/4/2019 5:18:00 AM
a kind of silence which stirs, vijay... beautiful!..huggs
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Date: 9/4/2019 7:25:00 AM
Many thanks Nette--much appreciate.
Date: 9/3/2019 1:19:00 PM
A touching poetry written with much talent. Do you know more about the causes of war in Pakistani? Thanks for your kind visit. Meanwhile, I also, saw on net a Pakistani young man (famous since he was 16), with much talent, Poet of Hearts.
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Date: 9/4/2019 7:25:00 AM
Much appreciate Ovidiu..no more insight on Pakistan..than what I read in the media. Many thanks.
Date: 9/3/2019 7:37:00 AM
war always leaves the scars of suffering beautifully painted your piece vijay i pray you have a blessed week
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Date: 9/3/2019 12:55:00 PM
So true Liam..much appreciate your visit and comments..many thanks. All the best.
Date: 9/3/2019 7:20:00 AM
The ravages of war leave echoes of sadness...Well written Vijay
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Date: 9/3/2019 12:54:00 PM
Much appreciate Joseph--many thanks.
Date: 9/2/2019 9:13:00 AM
A very clever poem Vijay, sad. Unrelentlessly the bombs fell and silenced so many people, chaos and destruction everywhere - the echoes of war, the day when the music stopped! There will forever be war, man is greedy and cares not of the devastating results. Good luck in the contest my friend. Hugs, Jennifer.wend?
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Date: 9/2/2019 12:33:00 PM
So true what you say about endless wars. Much appreciate your visit and comments, Jennifer..many many thanks.
Date: 9/1/2019 11:45:00 PM
A very haunting poem, Vijay, expertly crafted.
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Date: 9/2/2019 12:32:00 PM
Haunting for sure..much appreciate Lawrence--many thanks, my friend.
Date: 9/1/2019 6:26:00 PM
wow, Vijay, this is magnificent how you were inspired by his contest. I think you followed the rule and did not use the forbidden words. I sure hope so because this deserves a TOP place!!! fave.
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Date: 9/2/2019 12:31:00 PM
Yes--no forbidden words. Thank you for the good wishes Andrea. Always appreciate your visit and comments..many thanks. And a FAVE from you is a treasure.
Date: 9/1/2019 5:45:00 PM
- Echoes of war will always ring in their ears - a deep and meaningful writing, Vijay - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/2/2019 12:30:00 PM
So true about wars, Anne-Lise. Much appreciate your feedback..many thanks.
Date: 9/1/2019 1:08:00 PM
How cruel the echoes of war are! Yet, how skillfully you have crafted the sound of "nothingness" and the artistic beauty of "Echoes Of War"! So challenging! You have made us see and feel the chaos of a bitter war.. the "vows muffled by bombs"! With every Verse, dear Vijay, you are allowing your avid reader to reach higher levels of impressive beauty while reading your wonderful and impressive poetry! A great work worthy of honourable placement! A FAV! My warmest wishes and regards. Blessings.
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Date: 9/2/2019 12:29:00 PM
So kind of you, as always, Besma. A delight to read your analysis and feedback. Much appreciate..many thanks. And special thanks for the FAVE.
Date: 9/1/2019 12:00:00 PM
powerful, well expressed images, excellent entry for the contest, well done my friend :) hugs
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Date: 9/2/2019 12:26:00 PM
Thank you Sandy..so kind of you--much appreciate.
Date: 9/1/2019 5:53:00 AM
The day the music died...only echoes of war... Well done
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Date: 9/2/2019 12:26:00 PM
Indeed the music died--much appreciate Arturo..many thanks.
Date: 8/31/2019 6:37:00 PM
Well written for the contest Vijay! The line ,... there she heard how nothingness sounds ...is powerful. I felt like I stopped and felt that moment , as I was reading. :)
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Date: 9/2/2019 12:25:00 PM
Glad you found the words appealing..always a pleasure..much appreciate..many thanks, Heidi.
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