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Swift nibbles, tentative licks small diamonds of broken moonlight on ebony waves symphony playing with my toes Silent yellow light quick curious pouting lips and bites, silvery little fishes around my legs A wish to push far into the black seduction, to sleep there evermore To kiss a final poem, disintegrate into filaments and atoms join and surrender *** April 21, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 4/28/2017 3:33:00 PM

Very evocative poem, Darren. Visions of night pleasure. Absolutely sensuous, as Maureen said. Stunning work. You prick the heart w/your words. Well done, my friend. Love always

Darren White
Date: 4/28/2017 11:31:00 PM

Yes :) Thank you Freddie, real happy you like this one!

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 4/22/2017 1:09:00 PM

Beautiful write Darren, and beautiful pairing. It is a very sensuous poetic passing you have painted with your words, of death or perhaps la petite mort.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/22/2017 1:33:00 PM

I read this one to Brad, he found it sexy ;)

Darren White
Date: 4/22/2017 1:16:00 PM

Thank you mo. And yes, I agree :)

Tim Smith

Date: 4/21/2017 10:42:00 AM

To be as one with the beauty rolling in upon you... release and be free...Even if it is in death...Love this my friend.....Now off to get ice cream for the numb mouth girl : )

Darren White
Date: 4/21/2017 10:46:00 AM

The numb mouth girl was brave and deserves that :) Thank you, my friend, for liking my poem.

Maria Williams

Date: 4/21/2017 9:51:00 AM

Lovely imagery Darren, right down to the ripple pattern you have created with the words. The music you have chosen is a perfect accompaniment to suit the poetry.

Darren White
Date: 4/21/2017 10:47:00 AM

Yes, I love the music too, it took a while before I found the music I thought was perfect. Thank you Maria :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/21/2017 9:02:00 AM

I appreciate you searching out my poem. I wrote another piece called "Dark Lover" which might lend more to what you felt writing your piece. This is a fine piece of writing you have here Darren. Worthy of several 7s

Darren White
Date: 4/21/2017 9:20:00 AM

Yes, I found it, and commented... Thank you so much, also for the 7 :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/21/2017 8:30:00 AM

I felt the hypnotic pull of the water as I read this piece. I wrote a piece titled "Your Ocean" I think you would appreciate it.

Darren White
Date: 4/21/2017 8:38:00 AM

Exactly! That is how I experience the sea. Always, but especially at night. I will go read your poem, thank you Richard :)

Chris Green

Date: 4/21/2017 7:16:00 AM

Absolutely enchanting my friend. This poem takes me to another place, allowing me to feel the comfort and peace offered by the sea and the night sky. The quiet and serene moments that give us time to reflect. This was gorgeous.

Darren White
Date: 4/21/2017 7:30:00 AM

Thank you Chris, I added music to it now :) And yes, that was absolutely what I intended, I never wanted to scare anyone.

Casarah Nance

Date: 4/21/2017 6:44:00 AM

brilliant descriptions, very pleasing to read, like riding a wave of sensory. :)

Darren White
Date: 4/21/2017 6:47:00 AM

Yeah, isn't it? It makes me calm, this image in my mind. Thanks :)

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 4/21/2017 5:10:00 AM

"Symphony playing with my toes" Darren how amazed I am at your ability to contemplate with serenity, peace, and love death itself. That reminded me of a very poignant scene out of 'Soylent Green' where Edward G. Robinson (Sol) is euthanized. He was dying of terminal cancer and passed shortly after the movie was finished. Amitiés

Darren White
Date: 4/21/2017 5:14:00 AM

Aw, I am young, but I love Soylent Green :) I don't know what it is Anne-Marie, but when you have been close to dying, it's not so frightening anymore. I just have to be more aware of the fact that this is not the case for everyone.....

Jan Allison

Date: 4/21/2017 5:03:00 AM

dark and deep but so so s beautiful and I love the way you formatted it like ripples on the sea.. I think this is one of your 'bestest' ever! Into my faves:-) hugs jan xx

Darren White
Date: 4/21/2017 5:15:00 AM

Really Jan? Thank you SOOOO much, also for the fav! I was afraid this would be too dark for you :) HUGS xx

Miraj Raha

Date: 4/21/2017 3:59:00 AM

This is how i would like to pass away, looking at the ebony waves and kissing the final poem. Just brilliant Darren.

Darren White
Date: 4/21/2017 4:24:00 AM

Yeah, exactly. Thank you :)

White Wolf

Date: 4/21/2017 3:26:00 AM

I love the feel and MOTION of this one, curiously though, I don't find it dark at all but strikingly beautiful instead! And I adore the image you selected!

Darren White
Date: 4/21/2017 3:29:00 AM

I am really happy you don't find it too dark :)