Dysfunctional Inner Peace

The scorpions creeping out from words slowly, acutely framing
where judgement claims the higher position unconditionally 
lone vulture hanging over its unsuspecting prey ready to pounce 
once so blind ambitions reverberates back as unqualified honours least deserved 

Pompous narcissistic elements with nonsensical fruitless talent 
held within egotism where fools of choice becomes one’s ability 
under total admiration publicly declared in lonely self-centeredness 
becomes a sterile reflection back to oneself blinded by arrogance 

As friends become nemesis’s unnamed obstacles of your vainglorious rise
Sounding echos reverberates a never ending recording of undeserving self-pride
knowing more than all of what is right claiming the false prize for me, me, me
It matters not that lonely superiority must accept the great divide 

False praise their claims attention that inflames your senses unjustly wise 
crying regrets a prize is a prize nothing to be gained under the sun or moon 
striving after winds have blown a gale force within hidden torment 
the wreckage that's left after such destruction can only be found wanting 


a co written piece in unrhymed quatrains by Donna Loughman and Liam McDaid
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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De Beaulieu Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 1:52 PM
Hello Donna and Liam you both did a good job writing this poem.Have a nice day my friend.
De Beaulieu Avatar
October 24, 2021 at 10:43 AM
Welcome to Poetry soup. enjoy ytour day my friend.
Bateman Avatar
February 18, 2018 at 5:52 AM
Hello Donna, A truly great co-write here by you and Liam!! The imagery of this Quatrain is all-powerful and wondrously done. A FAVE!! Cheers and Best Wishes, Gary
Loughman Avatar
February 20, 2018 at 3:17 PM
Gary, Thank you so much for your comment...especially for the fave! Have a very blessed week my friend:-)
Andresen Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 12:36 PM
- Dear Donna - A wonderful writing of you and Liam - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Loughman Avatar
February 17, 2018 at 5:01 AM
Thank you Anne-Lise! Have a blessed weekend:-)
Mcdaid Avatar
February 14, 2018 at 9:28 AM
truly a pleasure mixing ink with you on this donna i think it sings out in its contents wishing you a blessed week pal
Loughman Avatar
February 17, 2018 at 5:02 AM
Liam, thank you..as always it’s an honor to write with you my friend:-)
Lee Sr. Avatar
February 13, 2018 at 5:14 PM
Brilliant!! Top shout outs, keep on typing up those verses. Creative wonder of wonders... James
Loughman Avatar
February 13, 2018 at 6:44 PM
Hi James, you are too kind my friend:-) Thank you so much for commenting! Have a blessed week! Donna
One Avatar
February 10, 2018 at 8:11 AM
Great collaboration, you and Liam wrote this very well..
Loughman Avatar
February 13, 2018 at 6:43 PM
Thank you Silent One! Writing with Liam is always a pleasure. Thank you again for commenting:-) Have a blessed week! Donna
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