William Kelii Kekaula Poet Personification

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Poetic Form: Personification

Inspired: 2023 October 14

 

*1st Place*
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Contest Judged: 2023 October 20
Sponsored by: Eve Roper

 

Image: Mud, Modernity, and Melancholia by Brunn Rasmussen (Painting by Dane artist: Laurits Andersen Ring - An old woman from Lille Naestved knitting)

Dyed-In-The-Wool

Beguiled risks sensitive alterations
that redesigned unknots and cutup trice
as the fresh teases through the looking glass
exposing timepiece resemblance glossed spilled.
Bemused forgives absence, mindful at hand,
tenuously gripping the rolled spent yarn
that edges fingertips loosely as threads
answer questionable finds, stitch-by-stitch.
Period accentuates the sensed thence
for the bestilled entangled narrative
plots exclamation points of those foregone
chapters ... period midst frames of escape.
Styled room for maneuvering that spirals
at a loss now hangs overhead ticking ...
mockery behold guardians of greens
that grow within disoriented poise.
Blue compliments presence expressed squarely
drafting the voiceless lucid residue
that nurtured former brush and forever
sealed a dream sweeter than a Danish roll.

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Silent One October 21, 2023 at 8:02 AM An excellence choice of words for this poem.. Congratulations on your win,, William Kelii Kekaula October 23, 2023 at 3:02 PM Mahalo, Silent One, for extending your kind consideration, my friend. Aloha, William

Paula Goldsmith October 21, 2023 at 7:59 AM Congratulations on your win. A wonderful write for the painting. Have a blessed day/weekend writing away.......... William Kelii Kekaula October 23, 2023 at 3:00 PM Mahalo, Paula, for being a beautiful soul! My cares and blessings to you as well, my friend! Aloha, William

Sotto Poet October 21, 2023 at 5:48 AM Dear Williams. Your literary rendition of this lovely sight is breathtaking. It's wonderful that you were able to capture the original artwork's subtle moods and precise skill. You've built an enticing and spanning setting in your special way that will stay with the reader. Please accept my heartfelt congratulations on your well-deserved win William Kelii Kekaula October 23, 2023 at 2:54 PM I am appreciative, Lasaad, of your genuine insightfulness. You exhibit a unique style that defines you. I am truly honored, my friend! Aloha, William

Eve Roper October 20, 2023 at 10:39 PM William, thank you for taking part in the contest. Congratulations on your win, great description and mood of the painting. I like the line,” as threads answer questionable finds, stitch-by-stitch. God bless William Kelii Kekaula October 23, 2023 at 2:46 PM I am still baffled, Eve, by those phrases' manifestations. Nonetheless, I am truly honored by the placement and your endearing considerations! Aloha, William

Anisha Dutta October 20, 2023 at 9:44 PM Excellent poetic presentation through your unique verse. Every reader will be whelmed. BIG CONGRATS TO WIN TOP. BLESSINGS. William Kelii Kekaula October 23, 2023 at 2:41 PM I am grateful, Anisha, for your warm share and noted laudations! Aloha, William

Susan Ashley October 19, 2023 at 9:53 AM Dear William, your poetic interpretation of this painting is beautifully expressed through the vivid yet pensive mood of your verse. I especially admire "forever sealed a dream sweeter than a Danish roll" -wow! such a great finale! Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan William Kelii Kekaula October 19, 2023 at 10:25 AM Ah! Spotlighting the Dane artist reflecting on his native land. Susan, I am delighted in your edifying words that uplift beyond the moment! A heartfelt thanks, my friend! Aloha, William

Andrea Dietrich October 15, 2023 at 1:52 AM Love the way you wrote about this picture. It sure is an interesting one! William Kelii Kekaula October 15, 2023 at 4:20 AM Aloha, Andrea! I'm indeed grateful as always for your giving spirit, my friend. Mahalo, William