Dust From the Past

Looking back again, back into the past, 
it was written in sand, all those questions we asked
on those last days of summer, something was wrong
as the leaves started turning, and shadows grew long

There was dust on the tables, and the clutter remained
where never before, .... had it not been restrained
You were known for your grace, now your pride was at risk
Quickly swept, polished fine, brushed away with a whisk

This just wasn't you, having bricks without mortar
You were never unkempt ...now a life out of order?
You would never have allowed such things out of place
Something so small, would have been your disgrace

There was something to blame, something was strange
Even small tasks, we noticed, had changed
Another piece of a puzzle, fell into place
Your trace of bewilderment, when a name was erased

Your memory lost, and a world gone absurd ...
Then, once it was you....alone and disturbed 
Lost and afraid, but mostly confused
Forgetting the day, many things you would lose,
or someone you loved, so much undefined
shoved back to blind spaces, your words couldn't find

Dust motes collected where never before,
would settle, make home, in your mind evermore
Without any warning, without any sound
until you were gone, and the years fell around

Dreams that you had, were drawn in the sand
into the traces of dust of a far away land

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Inspired by Isaiah Zerbst's Contest: "Pick a Title"
10/31/14

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 12/9/2014 2:22:00 PM
How sad when you visit and find someone not quite keeping up; dust will pile upon us all I think, very lovely Carrie. Thanks for visiting.
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Date: 11/16/2014 2:57:00 PM
Congratulations on another brilliant win Carrie.
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Date: 11/14/2014 5:48:00 PM
Excellent write Carrie. Profound treatment of a very sad and painful experience.
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Date: 11/14/2014 3:33:00 PM
Such a beautiful heartfelt write. So sad when this happens to anyone, and sadder still to those we love. Been there on more than one occasion. Congrats on your win!!
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Date: 11/14/2014 2:35:00 PM
Carrie, your poem is exquisite and expressed so well, even though the images are sad. Congratulations on your top place win. 7+Fav Sandra
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Date: 11/14/2014 2:18:00 PM
I love this , Carrie. We just watched this decline in a very good friend...forgot her own children. So sad. You did a superb job!
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Date: 11/14/2014 4:46:00 AM
This is exceptional Carrie congrats on win hugs
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Date: 11/14/2014 2:47:00 AM
so moving a write - mum has dementia - how I can relate to this - many congrats on your win:-)hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/13/2014 9:40:00 PM
A Huge Congratulations on amending your original piece and acing first place!
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Date: 11/4/2014 7:36:00 PM
Very nice poem! I loved it! But didn't the contest say it had to rhyme? Thanks, Sneha
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Sneha Rv
Date: 11/5/2014 4:30:00 AM
Very nice!I am sure you will win!
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Carrie Richards
Date: 11/4/2014 8:33:00 PM
Thank you again, Sneha........I"ve revised it to rhyme.....Hoping it works ! You are most kind !
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Sneha Rv
Date: 11/4/2014 7:50:00 PM
Oh! That's alright! I'm so glad I could tell you - But this poem was wonderful!
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Carrie Richards
Date: 11/4/2014 7:45:00 PM
Akk !! You are right, Sneha....Thank you so much for alerting me !! I missed, and overlooked that part of the contest rules Oh dear......I will have to remove this one from the contest, and re-think !! thank you.....you are the first one who noticed ! I'm grateful ! Hugs !
Date: 11/3/2014 2:30:00 PM
This poem is so moving Carrie and a wonderful entry for the contest. So sad the thought of losing the memories! Beautifully written and a winner for sure.
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Date: 11/1/2014 1:25:00 PM
Love it Carrie :)
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Carrie Richards
Date: 11/1/2014 2:30:00 PM
Dear Kash, ... You have been missed !! So often you came to my rescue, when I messed up my words/forms/spelling.... but it is such a pleasure to see you here, and I hope you continue to write, on the other website.... I've also missed your wonderful gift of poetry! Thanks for stopping by and keep up your good work ! :)
Date: 11/1/2014 11:08:00 AM
"Dust motes collected where never before would settle, make home, in your mind evermore" brilliant Carrie. This dust is gold dust Carrie, I bet. Adding it to my fav. God bless. love xxxxx RAJAT
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Carrie Richards
Date: 11/1/2014 2:31:00 PM
Than you so much !! Your kind words made me smile today! God Bless to you too!!
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