Duplex

Duplex Dead End I loved each day the sun shone on this world. I was the one that you chose for your girl. I wore your ring upon a string of gold around my neck. Nosegay roses pressed in pages keepsakes young girls collect. Until one day you asked if you could take out my best friend. So, with these words my love for you came to a quick dead end. 12/7/16 Duplex Jan Allison

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Joanna Daniel

Date: 12/16/2016 8:01:00 AM

A really sad tale, more so as it has been your personal experience:( congratulations on top win:)

Janis Thompson
Date: 12/16/2016 2:29:00 PM

Thanks, Blessings.

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/11/2016 5:21:00 AM

Hi Janis, I found this to a sad and heartbreaking story. Congratulations on your win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis

Janis Thompson
Date: 12/12/2016 2:11:00 PM

Thanks, Alexis. Great contest.

Darren White

Date: 12/11/2016 12:09:00 AM

Your poem flows freely, as a beautiful sad story. Congratulations!

Janis Thompson
Date: 12/12/2016 2:13:00 PM

It is a true story for me Darren. It happened in my senior year of high school, my first romance. It's been downhill ever since. lol Thanks.

Jan Allison

Date: 12/10/2016 6:50:00 PM

such a beautiful flow to your lines Janis - this really was perfect for what I was looking for in the contest where it wasn't obvious just 2 syllables were being used:-):-) Many congrats on your top spot:-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Thompson
Date: 12/12/2016 2:16:00 PM

Actually, Jan, like I was telling Darren, this really happened to me in my senior year of high school. I was torn apart. Thanks for the catharsis.

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe

Date: 12/8/2016 11:12:00 PM

great simplistic story Janis - very well written - All the best, Regards, Mark

Janis Thompson
Date: 12/9/2016 4:13:00 PM

Thanks, Mark.

Sandra Haight

Date: 12/8/2016 7:43:00 PM

Very sad but a wonderfully written 'duplex' poem, Janis. Your little story flows so smoothly, and I agree with Agnes, there is no choppiness in your two-syllable sentences! Best wishes for the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Janis Thompson
Date: 12/9/2016 4:15:00 PM

Thanks, Sandra. Contests are turning out rather poorly at the moment. Hugubac, Janis.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/8/2016 3:06:00 PM

Creative use of the word Duplex..I enjoyed reading your work..Thanks for all the visits to my page..Sara

Janis Thompson
Date: 12/9/2016 4:16:00 PM

Your welcome, Sara. I shall return.

Agnes Krampe

Date: 12/8/2016 1:09:00 PM

I like how you made your poem and story flow, one barely notices the two-syllable-per-line format. Good luck on the contest. Agnes

Janis Thompson
Date: 12/9/2016 4:17:00 PM

Thanks, Agnes. Same to you.

Chris Green

Date: 12/8/2016 7:42:00 AM

Now that was way too sad and heartbreaking but you wrote it so well that I will look past that aspect of the poem and say, beautifully done Janis This should do well in the contest.

Janis Thompson
Date: 12/9/2016 4:19:00 PM

Thanks for your comments Chris. I am so glad you stopped by. I truly appreciate your well wishes for the contest. Blessings, Janis.

Probir Gupta

Date: 12/8/2016 6:26:00 AM

Beautiful flow ... the black polca dot in the end is also good ... best wishes

Janis Thompson
Date: 12/9/2016 4:20:00 PM

Thanks, Probir.