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Duplex

An Honest Man

Christmas
Eve and
he is
rushing
home with
gifts for
his wife
in bad
traffic.

He texts
“Dying
to get
home.” Then
nothing.

His wife,
not far
away,
and some
minutes
later,
can hear
sirens.

He was
always
true to
his word.

For Jan's Duplex Form Contest: 2 syllables per line

Copyright © Andrea Dietrich | Year Posted 2016

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Jennifer Walker Date: 12/12/2016 6:41:00 AM As soon as the word texting I knew what was going to happen. Sad write but well penned. Login to Reply

Afzal Nusker Date: 12/11/2016 11:32:00 AM Oh no, such a tragic ending. It hurts! Login to Reply

Alexis Y. Date: 12/11/2016 4:55:00 AM Hi Andrea, It's no suprise seeing you on the top of the list! Congratulations on your top win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis Login to Reply

Darren White Date: 12/10/2016 11:54:00 PM Aww. This is chillingly good, and has also a very dar sense of humor. Melikes. Congratulations! Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 12/10/2016 10:45:00 PM Congrats on the win Andrea Login to Reply

Sushma A. Singh Date: 12/10/2016 10:20:00 PM Literally texting himself to death! Congrats! Login to Reply

Agnes Krampe Date: 12/10/2016 7:52:00 PM Coming back with congrats on your win! Login to Reply

Kim Rodrigues Date: 12/10/2016 7:28:00 PM Congrats, Andrea, on your top win! Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/10/2016 6:57:00 PM Oh my, that was quite the shock. Well done Andrea. Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 12/10/2016 6:26:00 PM Hey Andrea Your poem sends out a serious message but I love the wit in the title and at the end of the poem:-) Many congrats on your top spot:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply

Phyllis Babcock Date: 12/10/2016 10:23:00 AM Never text while driving but how often do you see that happening. Good luck on the contest. love phyl Login to Reply

Mark Martin Date: 12/10/2016 12:29:00 AM Can see this as a TV infomercial ending with someone saying in a sombre serious voice "don't text and drive". Can picture the ambulance and the husband being taken away in a stretcher. Really good poem! Good luck in the contest! :-) Login to Reply

Daver Austin Date: 12/9/2016 11:21:00 AM No, no, no! Do not text while driving. Good one, Andrea. Love, daver Login to Reply

Tamal Kundu Date: 12/9/2016 10:02:00 AM That last stanza brings the entire poem so wonderfully together. Good luck, Andrea! Login to Reply

Joanna Daniel Date: 12/9/2016 7:40:00 AM Oh, just as you said, fun, but truly sad:) well done, Andrea:) Jan's going to have quite a tough time choosing the winners, every entry I've read so far is excellent:) thank God, I don't have to judge contests, ha ha;) Login to Reply

Wendy Rycroft Date: 12/9/2016 2:45:00 AM Brilliant and emotional x sad few words but leaving an impact on the heart x Login to Reply

Alexis Y. Date: 12/8/2016 8:19:00 PM WoW! Andrea, you did great with this form. It had intrigue and suspence. The twist at the end was sad. It reads like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-)Alexis Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 12/8/2016 5:45:00 PM The double entendre adds a touch of mystery to the ending...Nicely written Andrea... Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 12/8/2016 2:42:00 PM A serious poem written with a touch of wit, Andrea...the right blend that will catch Jan's attention! Regards // paul Login to Reply

Matthew Anish Date: 12/8/2016 2:21:00 PM Sweet holiday words here. I have my electric menorah ready for Chanukah - which I always celebrate! Best of the season to you and yours - and please let me know when you have receive my chapbook. Peace & Love Matthew Ani Login to Reply

Deborah Dambani Date: 12/8/2016 10:14:00 AM Gosh!...tragic Login to Reply

Paloma P Date: 12/8/2016 9:44:00 AM Darkly affecting, ouch that hurt Andrea. Good luck, sounds like a winner to me! Login to Reply

Ravi Sathasivam Date: 12/7/2016 11:56:00 PM Excellent. Very dark write and cleverly done. Enjoyed reading it . Thanks for sharing it. Login to Reply

Janis Medders Tobechi Date: 12/7/2016 9:41:00 PM Wow, this takes you away. It's very sad and a warning against texting and driving. More people should see this poem. Login to Reply

Vera Duggan Date: 12/7/2016 9:04:00 PM Andrea, nice little verse and in my mind very clever, as Agnes said loved the word play at the end, didn't expect that, good luck in the contest and take care.....Vera Login to Reply

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