Andrea Dietrich Poet Verse

Duplex

An Honest Man

Christmas
Eve and
he is
rushing
home with
gifts for
his wife
in bad
traffic.

He texts
“Dying
to get
home.” Then
nothing.

His wife,
not far
away,
and some
minutes
later,
can hear
sirens.

He was
always
true to
his word.

For Jan's Duplex Form Contest: 2 syllables per line

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Jennifer Walker December 12, 2016 at 6:41 AM As soon as the word texting I knew what was going to happen. Sad write but well penned.

Afzal Nusker December 11, 2016 at 11:32 AM Oh no, such a tragic ending. It hurts!

Alexis Y. December 11, 2016 at 4:55 AM Hi Andrea, It's no suprise seeing you on the top of the list! Congratulations on your top win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis

Darren White December 10, 2016 at 11:54 PM Aww. This is chillingly good, and has also a very dar sense of humor. Melikes. Congratulations!

Joseph May December 10, 2016 at 10:45 PM Congrats on the win Andrea

Sushma A. Singh December 10, 2016 at 10:20 PM Literally texting himself to death! Congrats!

Agnes Krampe December 10, 2016 at 7:52 PM Coming back with congrats on your win!

Kim Rodrigues December 10, 2016 at 7:28 PM Congrats, Andrea, on your top win!

Richard Lamoureux December 10, 2016 at 6:57 PM Oh my, that was quite the shock. Well done Andrea.

Jan Allison December 10, 2016 at 6:26 PM Hey Andrea Your poem sends out a serious message but I love the wit in the title and at the end of the poem:-) Many congrats on your top spot:-) hugs Jan xx

Phyllis Babcock December 10, 2016 at 10:23 AM Never text while driving but how often do you see that happening. Good luck on the contest. love phyl

Mark Martin December 10, 2016 at 12:29 AM Can see this as a TV infomercial ending with someone saying in a sombre serious voice "don't text and drive". Can picture the ambulance and the husband being taken away in a stretcher. Really good poem! Good luck in the contest! :-)

Daver Austin December 9, 2016 at 11:21 AM No, no, no! Do not text while driving. Good one, Andrea. Love, daver

Tamal Kundu December 9, 2016 at 10:02 AM That last stanza brings the entire poem so wonderfully together. Good luck, Andrea!

Joanna Daniel December 9, 2016 at 7:40 AM Oh, just as you said, fun, but truly sad:) well done, Andrea:) Jan's going to have quite a tough time choosing the winners, every entry I've read so far is excellent:) thank God, I don't have to judge contests, ha ha;)

Wendy Rycroft December 9, 2016 at 2:45 AM Brilliant and emotional x sad few words but leaving an impact on the heart x

Alexis Y. December 8, 2016 at 8:19 PM WoW! Andrea, you did great with this form. It had intrigue and suspence. The twist at the end was sad. It reads like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-)Alexis

Joseph May December 8, 2016 at 5:45 PM The double entendre adds a touch of mystery to the ending...Nicely written Andrea...

Paul Callus December 8, 2016 at 2:42 PM A serious poem written with a touch of wit, Andrea...the right blend that will catch Jan's attention! Regards // paul

Matthew Anish December 8, 2016 at 2:21 PM Sweet holiday words here. I have my electric menorah ready for Chanukah - which I always celebrate! Best of the season to you and yours - and please let me know when you have receive my chapbook. Peace & Love Matthew Ani

Deborah Dambani December 8, 2016 at 10:14 AM Gosh!...tragic

Paloma P December 8, 2016 at 9:44 AM Darkly affecting, ouch that hurt Andrea. Good luck, sounds like a winner to me!

Ravi Sathasivam December 7, 2016 at 11:56 PM Excellent. Very dark write and cleverly done. Enjoyed reading it . Thanks for sharing it.

Janis Medders Tobechi December 7, 2016 at 9:41 PM Wow, this takes you away. It's very sad and a warning against texting and driving. More people should see this poem.

Vera Duggan December 7, 2016 at 9:04 PM Andrea, nice little verse and in my mind very clever, as Agnes said loved the word play at the end, didn't expect that, good luck in the contest and take care.....Vera

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