Dui

Scraps of metal Surround the trees Lying on the leaf covered floor Smoke still rising From the smoldering engine Heating the leather interior A headlight makes a path to see The other in front A shattered windshield Shows the flesh torn body And the beer cans that Survived.

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Tom Quigley

Date: 6/15/2016 6:45:00 AM

Not too sophomoric at all...don't judge what you write by the number or type of responses! This is beautifully, incisively vivid with a serious knife twist at the end.

Lukas Ficklin
Date: 6/15/2016 8:36:00 AM

Thanks Tom.. You are so right!! Writing isn't new for me but poetry is. Thank you so much for the comment and kind reminder. :)