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Drowning

I look up; I see her eyes Looking down at my helpless body Floating beneath a shimmering haze of water. I look up; I see her eyes Waiting and watching as I take a breath And choke on liquid air. I look up; Into the eyes Of my mother.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 1/29/2011 4:34:00 PM
What a deep write, Deb. I see congratulations are in order! VEry well deserved win. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 1/24/2011 4:26:00 AM
Congratulations Deb on your win in the contest "My Darkest Childhood Memory"sponsored by Walayee (Lay). Love, Carol
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Date: 1/23/2011 7:07:00 AM
beautifully done, deb! HEADS up to you!! :) hugggs, nette
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Date: 1/23/2011 5:55:00 AM
Hi Deb - Congratulations on your WIN in Walayee's contest. Best wishes, KC
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Date: 1/22/2011 3:25:00 PM
Congratulations onn the well deserved win in the contest, deb
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Date: 1/22/2011 1:41:00 PM
Congratulations on your win..Sara
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Date: 1/22/2011 1:38:00 PM
Congrats Deb on your wonderful success in Lay's contest with this awesome write and entry my friend.. enjoy with luv..
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Date: 1/22/2011 12:48:00 PM
This is a very moving poem, Deb, and you're on a roll with contest wins. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 1/22/2011 12:32:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in Lay's contest, Deb. Always, Annalise
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Date: 1/22/2011 12:04:00 PM
A strong write Deb, congratulations on your win in the contest
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Date: 1/8/2011 3:20:00 PM
Don't go swimming without a lifeguard present. Good entry.
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Date: 1/8/2011 12:45:00 PM
powerful...scary....well done...Syd
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Date: 1/8/2011 12:43:00 PM
wow a strong deep write my dear...powerful feelings expressed...with luv Michael
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