Deb Radke Poet Free verse

Drowning

I look up;
I see her eyes
Looking down at my helpless body
Floating beneath a shimmering haze of water.

I look up;
I see her eyes
Waiting and watching as I take a breath
And choke on liquid air.

I look up;
Into the eyes
Of my mother.

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Andrea Dietrich January 29, 2011 at 4:34 PM What a deep write, Deb. I see congratulations are in order! VEry well deserved win. Luv, Andrea

Carol Sunshine Brown January 24, 2011 at 4:26 AM Congratulations Deb on your win in the contest "My Darkest Childhood Memory"sponsored by Walayee (Lay). Love, Carol

Nette Onclaud January 23, 2011 at 7:07 AM beautifully done, deb! HEADS up to you!! :) hugggs, nette

Kory Calhoun January 23, 2011 at 5:55 AM Hi Deb - Congratulations on your WIN in Walayee's contest. Best wishes, KC

Dr.Ram Mehta January 22, 2011 at 3:25 PM Congratulations onn the well deserved win in the contest, deb

Sara Kendrick January 22, 2011 at 1:41 PM Congratulations on your win..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 22, 2011 at 1:38 PM Congrats Deb on your wonderful success in Lay's contest with this awesome write and entry my friend.. enjoy with luv..

Carolyn Devonshire January 22, 2011 at 12:48 PM This is a very moving poem, Deb, and you're on a roll with contest wins. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn

Audrey Haick January 22, 2011 at 12:32 PM Congratulations on your win in Lay's contest, Deb. Always, Annalise

Wilma Neels January 22, 2011 at 12:04 PM A strong write Deb, congratulations on your win in the contest

Robert Pettit January 8, 2011 at 3:20 PM Don't go swimming without a lifeguard present. Good entry.

Sidney Beck January 8, 2011 at 12:45 PM powerful...scary....well done...Syd

Michael J. Falotico January 8, 2011 at 12:43 PM wow a strong deep write my dear...powerful feelings expressed...with luv Michael