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Written: June 16, 2023 ______________________________________________________________ The flames grew dim as the wax poured. A silent killer, it stealthily soared. My fire drowned in its accompanying liquid. As the wax engulfed me, my spirit was rid. Wobbly thighs are forcing legs to thrive, Against the tides of doubt, I strive, Softened walls once held me tight. But now I break free with all my might. Hardened, I pressed on through trials and strife. I was prepared to fight the challenges of life. But not the same; I emerged anew, A phoenix rising, with strength imbued. My stature morphed; I was no longer small. I stood tall, no longer afraid to fall. Spreading out with deeper roots, Nourishing my soul with resilient pursuits Fabricating a raw wick from crisp-cut hair, I swallowed wisps, training for another blare. Filling my insides with my melted torment, I structured walls with blunt-force blows. In the depths of darkness, a fiery rage ignited, A flame untamed, burning bright, A storm of fury is brewing inside. Ready to unleash its destructive might. I crafted a weapon, a wick of hair, Each strand is a reminder of my despair. Swallowing wisps of pain, fueling the fire, Training my soul for vengeance dire. Every cut, every strand, a sacrifice made, To forge a weapon, a fury blade, Igniting the embers of my shattered past, A tempest unleashed, a fury unsurpassed

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Date: 6/17/2023 10:22:00 AM
I crafted a weapon, a wick of hair, each strand is a reminder om my despair.....it was a fury blade..... a tempest unleashed, a fury unsurpassed - my word Lsaaad what a poem, what a winner - your poetry i unsurpassed my friend, brilliantly created. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 6/17/2023 10:05:00 AM
Hi Laasad, your suspense driven poem is articulated inj a manner and eloquence that only you can give meaning to. Your 1st Stanza last gives the reader a dramatic entrance to what is to follow. Your 3rd stansa, half way through the third line and all of the 4th is dripping with anticipation, love every line of your 4th stanza. Stanza five after you had morphed fro small to tall no longer afraid to fall, you were now ready to unleash the destructive might of a flame untamed, a storm of fury ....
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Date: 6/16/2023 5:37:00 PM
WOW WOW WOW Candles are one of my favourite things, but never have I seen the flame of a candle so amazingly described !!! Surely this has to be entered in Edward's unhinged power contest? SP its a wonderful poem. A favorite for sure.
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