Driving In the Dark On My Birthday-Oct 7

Thirty minutes til pickup - leaving home before crack of dawn
A slew of police cars and orange cones blocking the exit
Reading mailboxes with old eyes - not owl eyes
My friend and I exchanging gift bags - her birthday was in August
Thirty more minutes North - I should have let her drive
A sharp curve - caught off guard - followed it to its conclusion 
A deer in a dead slump near the road’s edge
Motorcyclists - one popping a wheelie
Country bumpkin roads
Field of future Jack-O’-lanterns
The church steeple as the sun comes up
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Maverick Avatar
October 11, 2023 at 10:50 PM
All best yet belated birthday wishes Kim And one for every unbirthday day to follow.' May God keep your ways.'
Fowler Avatar
October 11, 2023 at 6:39 AM
Happy belated Kim! A great deal shone in your eyes and shown in your words. Linda :)
Rodrigues Avatar
October 11, 2023 at 10:50 AM
Thank you, Linda!
Legros Kelley Avatar
October 10, 2023 at 1:59 AM
Happy belated Birthday Kim! I'm glad you didn't hit the dear, that sounds like a hair raising night. I almost hit a cow tonight going around a dark curve, my daughter screamed "Slow down!!" When she saw eyes glowing ahead, I had no idea, I just hit the brakes and slid to a stop and then saw him, it was close. Oh, thank God He is watching over us gals with our old eyes Kim! I hope you had a fun birthday besides the scary stuff! <3
Rodrigues Avatar
October 10, 2023 at 9:17 AM
Right….lol! Glad you were able to stop! Thanks for the birthday wishes!
Hind Avatar
October 9, 2023 at 6:34 PM
Happy birthday! Like how you described it...
Rodrigues Avatar
October 10, 2023 at 9:17 AM
Thank you, Paige!
Empress Avatar
October 9, 2023 at 4:59 AM
Happy belated birthday talented poetess, wishing you good health and good thoughts always
Rodrigues Avatar
October 9, 2023 at 6:53 AM
Thank you!
Lane Avatar
October 8, 2023 at 1:15 PM
What a wonderful example of show, don’t tell, Kim.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 8, 2023 at 2:54 PM
Thank you, Lin!
Bauer Avatar
October 8, 2023 at 12:54 PM
you've described this so well, kim, that i can picture it all. happy belated birthday!
Rodrigues Avatar
October 8, 2023 at 2:55 PM
Thank you, Ilene!
Andresen Avatar
October 8, 2023 at 12:33 PM
- You shouldn't have driven in the dark alone... you'll probably never forget that night, Kim - Great written - hugs
Rodrigues Avatar
October 8, 2023 at 2:55 PM
All went well. An adventure.
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