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Drifting Lfe

tossed back and forth a wilted flower floated in whirling currents life moves on rudderless to be cast in unknown shores

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Heidi Sands

Date: 5/21/2022 8:51:00 PM

Beautiful Tanka Valsa :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/19/2022 2:56:00 PM

wow, this is a very well crafted tanka from you. Good one, dear.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 5/19/2022 11:37:00 AM

Inspiring imagery of a profound Tanka, dearest Valsa! Blessings!

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/18/2022 12:57:00 PM

And so starts a new colony, a new land, 'unknown shores' - 'amid whirling currents, life moves on rudderless', and so true, how do we know what our future holds? Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Rico Leffanta

Date: 5/18/2022 11:20:00 AM

Lfe? Fragile petals show their bruises to the end! Aloha!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 5/18/2022 9:44:00 AM

Such a short poem yet full of imagery and meaning.

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/18/2022 9:36:00 AM

Valsa, in such a short amount of space, you managed to communicate some profound meanings. Indeed, nature possesses a great deal of inventiveness.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/18/2022 8:04:00 AM

I like how you've captured how we can see ourselves in the ebb and flow of nature. May the wayward leaf find comfort on the nearest shore. ~ Gershon... (btw: Check your title on this one for a second).

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/18/2022 7:54:00 AM

Meaningful, metaphoric--much said succinctly in this poem.