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Drifting Apart

I stared deeply into his dreamy deep blue eyes
So full of passionate love, they could not disguise
He’d call me his dove, I scarcely believed he was mine
Safely wrapped in his loving arms, we’d gently entwine
I’d succumb to his charms and be simply floating on air
When our ruby lips met, green-eyed girls would stare
Forever his girl - I mustn’t forget, but it was not true
When I met his mother, all my dreams fell through
Told me there was another, this made me oh so sad
His true love lay with the sea, as it did his late dad
He never truly loved me, now we are both set free


01~30~15
Contest Interlocking Rhyme – Isaiah Zerbst
~awarded 2nd place~

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2015

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Skat A Date: 2/15/2015 10:19:00 AM Jan This is a sweet lovely win. *Skat LOVE* Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/15/2015 10:21:00 AM Thanks Skat:-) Hugs Jan x

Angie Thomas Date: 2/12/2015 11:22:00 PM Awww... The ending is truly heartbreaking... But awsome poem :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/13/2015 4:41:00 AM Thanks Angie:-) Hugs Jan xx Angie Thomas Date: 2/12/2015 11:23:00 PM Oh yeah,and congratulations on your win :)

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/4/2015 2:52:00 AM Congratulations on your wonderful win Jan! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/4/2015 3:05:00 AM Thanks so much Connie. Isaiah set us quite a challenge:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight Date: 2/3/2015 5:30:00 PM Congratulations, Jan, and your nice win for this beautiful poem. Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/3/2015 5:32:00 PM Thanks so much for your support Sandra it is people like you who keep me here! hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 2/3/2015 4:34:00 AM Such an amazing emotive write Jan! Congrats on big win! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/3/2015 6:25:00 AM Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders Date: 2/2/2015 9:58:00 PM I love this Jan...such a beautiful, poignant story told! Congrats on a great win...hugs, Rhonda Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/3/2015 1:21:00 AM Thanks so much Rhonda:-) Hugs jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 2/2/2015 4:53:00 PM Congratulations on your winning poem, Jan, a beautiful sad ending write. Blessings Eve Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/2/2015 4:54:00 PM Thanks so much for dropping by Eve i do appreciate your support:-) Hugs Jan xxx

David Fisher Date: 2/2/2015 4:02:00 PM Congrats on the contest, Jan! Sad how true love sailed away into the sunset. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/2/2015 4:04:00 PM Thanks David:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poesy Relish Date: 2/2/2015 2:45:00 PM Congrats dear friend on your well deserving win... lov, nad! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/2/2015 2:51:00 PM thanks so much Nadiya:-) Hugs jan xx

Laura Leiser Date: 2/2/2015 12:41:00 PM A sad, yet beautifully written poem, Jan. Congrats on your win, too! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/2/2015 12:42:00 PM Thanks so much Laura - my first attempt at this form so i was delighted with my win:-) Hugs jan xx

James Fraser Date: 2/1/2015 3:27:00 PM What a sad poem, delivered splendidly Jan, hugs, James xx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/1/2015 3:30:00 PM Thanks as ever for your continued support:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/30/2015 9:02:00 PM Jan, I enjoyed how you made yours a love poem, same as I did, and how he ended up loving the sea. It reminds me of how I wrote a sonnet about that too, a man who loves the sea more than his woman. Sad one but enjoyable to read. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/31/2015 5:28:00 AM Thanks Andrea:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus Date: 1/30/2015 12:58:00 PM Lovely and sad! What a pity when love has to end like this...drifting away with the waves! hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/31/2015 5:27:00 AM She was the most foul mouthed woman you could ever meet Paul, but she adored me - sadly romance with her son was never on the cards - Ian and I are still in touch at Christmas Paul Callus Date: 1/30/2015 1:21:00 PM ...:) perhaps she would have made a nice mother-in-law!:) Jan Allison Date: 1/30/2015 1:07:00 PM Guess we can both relate to the lure of the sea on our little Island's Paul - it is purely a fictional write for the contest but I must confess I had a wonderful friend what I was growing up and he went off and joined the navy - we were simply amazing friends - never went out on a date... then I met his mother - she said 'oh so you're Jan - the girl Ian is going to marry' I nearly fell through the floor with shock! Hugs Jan xx

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty Date: 1/30/2015 11:28:00 AM Sad tale of lost love so well said Jan a master poet at work. Love>Your friend Rajat Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/30/2015 11:29:00 AM Thank you for such a lovely comment Rajat:-) Hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/30/2015 9:00:00 AM This is sad and oh so moving! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/30/2015 9:54:00 AM I started the poem some weeks ago - thought I better finish it when i was on a roll yesterday:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shane Cooper Date: 1/30/2015 12:19:00 AM and I missed clicking on the 7. :( better luck this time Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/30/2015 2:38:00 AM Thanks:-) Hugs Jan x

Shane Cooper Date: 1/30/2015 12:17:00 AM You have done a great job with the poem the rhyme is supurb and and the story is filled with passion and loss. Good luck in the competition. A 7 from me Love Shane xxx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/30/2015 2:37:00 AM Thanks Shane:-) Hugs Jan x

Jerry T Curtis Date: 1/29/2015 7:57:00 PM Wow Jan, from intimate passion to meeting Mom---I'm not quiet how I feel right now.---but if you were after shock---you got it from me----very well done' xxx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2015 8:00:00 PM Thanks for the comment Jerry:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian Date: 1/29/2015 7:55:00 PM Good luck in the contest, sweetie...This is quite the write...Sad ending....Hugs Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 1/29/2015 7:59:00 PM Thanks, sweetie...Paul is a dear....A very sweet man. Thanks for the sweet words. Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2015 7:57:00 PM Thanks Eileen I've had a bit of time out recently and come back refreshed - written and posted 3 poems today. I ADORE the write you did with Paul - simply outstanding my beautiful friend:-) Hugs Jan xxx