Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

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Drifting Apart

I stared deeply into his dreamy deep blue eyes
So full of passionate love, they could not disguise
He’d call me his dove, I scarcely believed he was mine
Safely wrapped in his loving arms, we’d gently entwine
I’d succumb to his charms and be simply floating on air
When our ruby lips met, green-eyed girls would stare
Forever his girl - I mustn’t forget, but it was not true
When I met his mother, all my dreams fell through
Told me there was another, this made me oh so sad
His true love lay with the sea, as it did his late dad
He never truly loved me, now we are both set free


01~30~15
Contest Interlocking Rhyme – Isaiah Zerbst
~awarded 2nd place~

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Skat A February 15, 2015 at 10:19 AM Jan This is a sweet lovely win. *Skat LOVE* Jan Allison February 15, 2015 at 10:21 AM Thanks Skat:-) Hugs Jan x

Angie Thomas February 12, 2015 at 11:22 PM Awww... The ending is truly heartbreaking... But awsome poem :) Jan Allison February 13, 2015 at 4:41 AM Thanks Angie:-) Hugs Jan xx Angie Thomas February 12, 2015 at 11:23 PM Oh yeah,and congratulations on your win :)

Connie Marcum Wong February 4, 2015 at 2:52 AM Congratulations on your wonderful win Jan! Jan Allison February 4, 2015 at 3:05 AM Thanks so much Connie. Isaiah set us quite a challenge:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight February 3, 2015 at 5:30 PM Congratulations, Jan, and your nice win for this beautiful poem. Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison February 3, 2015 at 5:32 PM Thanks so much for your support Sandra it is people like you who keep me here! hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma February 3, 2015 at 4:34 AM Such an amazing emotive write Jan! Congrats on big win! Jan Allison February 3, 2015 at 6:25 AM Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders February 2, 2015 at 9:58 PM I love this Jan...such a beautiful, poignant story told! Congrats on a great win...hugs, Rhonda Jan Allison February 3, 2015 at 1:21 AM Thanks so much Rhonda:-) Hugs jan xx

Eve Roper February 2, 2015 at 4:53 PM Congratulations on your winning poem, Jan, a beautiful sad ending write. Blessings Eve Jan Allison February 2, 2015 at 4:54 PM Thanks so much for dropping by Eve i do appreciate your support:-) Hugs Jan xxx

David Fisher February 2, 2015 at 4:02 PM Congrats on the contest, Jan! Sad how true love sailed away into the sunset. Jan Allison February 2, 2015 at 4:04 PM Thanks David:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poesy Relish February 2, 2015 at 2:45 PM Congrats dear friend on your well deserving win... lov, nad! Jan Allison February 2, 2015 at 2:51 PM thanks so much Nadiya:-) Hugs jan xx

Laura Leiser February 2, 2015 at 12:41 PM A sad, yet beautifully written poem, Jan. Congrats on your win, too! Jan Allison February 2, 2015 at 12:42 PM Thanks so much Laura - my first attempt at this form so i was delighted with my win:-) Hugs jan xx

James Fraser February 1, 2015 at 3:27 PM What a sad poem, delivered splendidly Jan, hugs, James xx Jan Allison February 1, 2015 at 3:30 PM Thanks as ever for your continued support:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich January 30, 2015 at 9:02 PM Jan, I enjoyed how you made yours a love poem, same as I did, and how he ended up loving the sea. It reminds me of how I wrote a sonnet about that too, a man who loves the sea more than his woman. Sad one but enjoyable to read. Jan Allison January 31, 2015 at 5:28 AM Thanks Andrea:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus January 30, 2015 at 12:58 PM Lovely and sad! What a pity when love has to end like this...drifting away with the waves! hugs // paul Jan Allison January 31, 2015 at 5:27 AM She was the most foul mouthed woman you could ever meet Paul, but she adored me - sadly romance with her son was never on the cards - Ian and I are still in touch at Christmas Paul Callus January 30, 2015 at 1:21 PM ...:) perhaps she would have made a nice mother-in-law!:) Jan Allison January 30, 2015 at 1:07 PM Guess we can both relate to the lure of the sea on our little Island's Paul - it is purely a fictional write for the contest but I must confess I had a wonderful friend what I was growing up and he went off and joined the navy - we were simply amazing friends - never went out on a date... then I met his mother - she said 'oh so you're Jan - the girl Ian is going to marry' I nearly fell through the floor with shock! Hugs Jan xx

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty January 30, 2015 at 11:28 AM Sad tale of lost love so well said Jan a master poet at work. Love>Your friend Rajat Jan Allison January 30, 2015 at 11:29 AM Thank you for such a lovely comment Rajat:-) Hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux January 30, 2015 at 9:00 AM This is sad and oh so moving! Jan Allison January 30, 2015 at 9:54 AM I started the poem some weeks ago - thought I better finish it when i was on a roll yesterday:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shane Cooper January 30, 2015 at 12:19 AM and I missed clicking on the 7. :( better luck this time Jan Allison January 30, 2015 at 2:38 AM Thanks:-) Hugs Jan x

Shane Cooper January 30, 2015 at 12:17 AM You have done a great job with the poem the rhyme is supurb and and the story is filled with passion and loss. Good luck in the competition. A 7 from me Love Shane xxx Jan Allison January 30, 2015 at 2:37 AM Thanks Shane:-) Hugs Jan x

Jerry T Curtis January 29, 2015 at 7:57 PM Wow Jan, from intimate passion to meeting Mom---I'm not quiet how I feel right now.---but if you were after shock---you got it from me----very well done' xxx Jan Allison January 29, 2015 at 8:00 PM Thanks for the comment Jerry:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian January 29, 2015 at 7:55 PM Good luck in the contest, sweetie...This is quite the write...Sad ending....Hugs Eileen Manassian January 29, 2015 at 7:59 PM Thanks, sweetie...Paul is a dear....A very sweet man. Thanks for the sweet words. Jan Allison January 29, 2015 at 7:57 PM Thanks Eileen I've had a bit of time out recently and come back refreshed - written and posted 3 poems today. I ADORE the write you did with Paul - simply outstanding my beautiful friend:-) Hugs Jan xxx