Drenched

Drenched with guilt he feels Beaten down with worry Cursed and threatened not to tell The dreams he takes away are real Next time you'll be sorry Underestimating every day He breaks in with his own key Not following but getting me... The look in his eyes all but say Don't leave me girl... ...I'll make you stay

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John Rhinem

Date: 4/17/2009 2:34:00 PM

Hmm, this almost seems as a relationship gone very obsessive and somewhat possessive!!? And I am not very certain that anyone should or would, ever remain within such a relationship such as this!!? Although, again, it was very profound, expressed and well written~once more, confirming "Your Wonderful Abilities As A Writer!!!":):)~Time for one more.....

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/13/2009 7:47:00 PM

A compelling powem, Jane. He seems like a downtrodden man, but there is something in his eyes that ask you to stay with him. Love the way the title corresponds to the message! Very nice! Love, Carolyn

Christopher Higgins

Date: 4/13/2009 3:43:00 PM

Well, this piece got my mind stirring....details sparingly.... allowing the reader to decipher beyond the words given..well done..love the mystery behind it.

John Loving Iii

Date: 4/13/2009 3:40:00 PM

this is a mysterious piece. why do wicked people have to be the oppisite sex. i have the same view about some women. John H Loving III