Jane Bowen Poet Rhyme

Drenched

Drenched with guilt he feels
Beaten down with worry
Cursed and threatened not to tell
The dreams he takes away are real
Next time you'll be sorry
Underestimating every day
He breaks in with his own key
Not following but getting me...
The look in his eyes all but say
Don't leave me girl...
            ...I'll make you stay

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John Rhinem April 17, 2009 at 2:34 PM Hmm, this almost seems as a relationship gone very obsessive and somewhat possessive!!? And I am not very certain that anyone should or would, ever remain within such a relationship such as this!!? Although, again, it was very profound, expressed and well written~once more, confirming "Your Wonderful Abilities As A Writer!!!":):)~Time for one more.....

Carolyn Devonshire April 13, 2009 at 7:47 PM A compelling powem, Jane. He seems like a downtrodden man, but there is something in his eyes that ask you to stay with him. Love the way the title corresponds to the message! Very nice! Love, Carolyn

Christopher Higgins April 13, 2009 at 3:43 PM Well, this piece got my mind stirring....details sparingly.... allowing the reader to decipher beyond the words given..well done..love the mystery behind it.

John Loving Iii April 13, 2009 at 3:40 PM this is a mysterious piece. why do wicked people have to be the oppisite sex. i have the same view about some women. John H Loving III